Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Part four Chapter four"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Mr. Keller was a bit too loose with the info. In real life he would have been concerned about law suits for divulging personal information. That said it was perfect for driving the scene to the next rise. Onward!!!! lol
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Mr. Keller was a bit too loose with the info. In real life he would have been concerned about law suits for divulging personal information. That said it was perfect for driving the scene to the next rise. Onward!!!! lol
Comment Written 17-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you. Mr. Keller already knew Troy.
Comment from rzubey
You set up a nice puzzle here, a puzzle that is realistic for domestic violence victims. But it still doesn't answer the question of what role Ellen Collier was supposed to play. That is so far unresolved and I think that needs to be resolved. That is like a big hole in the story. I'm also worried that Anna would run away from help. I'm hoping that Mr. Sorenson was really going to help her. Otherwise it is a very good story.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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You set up a nice puzzle here, a puzzle that is realistic for domestic violence victims. But it still doesn't answer the question of what role Ellen Collier was supposed to play. That is so far unresolved and I think that needs to be resolved. That is like a big hole in the story. I'm also worried that Anna would run away from help. I'm hoping that Mr. Sorenson was really going to help her. Otherwise it is a very good story.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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It will be resolved, but it will take a while. Thank you for the support.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Well, no comments this chapter, and no spags either. Troy's pretty tricky--smooth move.
I was planning on catching up tonight, but I realized I don't know how many chapters there are. If not, I'll finish tomorrow.
Roberta
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Well, no comments this chapter, and no spags either. Troy's pretty tricky--smooth move.
I was planning on catching up tonight, but I realized I don't know how many chapters there are. If not, I'll finish tomorrow.
Roberta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from Queenise
I am going back and reading these chapter to fill in the blanks that I missed. This is great writing and the way you have crafted this story is so life like. Very fascinating read and informative at the same time. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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I am going back and reading these chapter to fill in the blanks that I missed. This is great writing and the way you have crafted this story is so life like. Very fascinating read and informative at the same time. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 15-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2011
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Thank you for reading. I am sorry there isn't any points still available on it.
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I'm not concerned about the points. I am reading ecause I dearly love your writing. Queenise
Comment from Des Beirne
Oops I missed this one and read the next bit first, got confussed so came back. Glad io did as the next now makes sense. You can right click on the book picture and save it to your computer to replace the lost one. I've downloaded it and can e-mail it to you if you need, but you should be able to get it yourself. Des
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Oops I missed this one and read the next bit first, got confussed so came back. Glad io did as the next now makes sense. You can right click on the book picture and save it to your computer to replace the lost one. I've downloaded it and can e-mail it to you if you need, but you should be able to get it yourself. Des
Comment Written 07-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the suggestion I will try it. I hate this laptop I'm using. I have ordered a new Dell tower. It should be here in a week. My Dell was really old and this was it's secon hit in only about a half a year.
Comment from Helen Tan
It's a different lifestyle from which we have in the city.
I read this line a few times and think " ...from WHAT we have..." may sound better.
I'm sure her home would be one of the first places the husband would look too. It's difficult to be on the run when you're with a toddler.
Well done on making through school and only missing so few days. But remember, your health is more important. =D
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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It's a different lifestyle from which we have in the city.
I read this line a few times and think " ...from WHAT we have..." may sound better.
I'm sure her home would be one of the first places the husband would look too. It's difficult to be on the run when you're with a toddler.
Well done on making through school and only missing so few days. But remember, your health is more important. =D
Comment Written 03-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and I will recheck those areas.
Comment from Cheryl1957
I was immediately drawn into the story, and at the end I was wanting to know what the outcome will be. I especially enjoyed your author notes about abuse. Working with women who are victims of domestic violence has been very eye-opening. Your words ring very true. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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I was immediately drawn into the story, and at the end I was wanting to know what the outcome will be. I especially enjoyed your author notes about abuse. Working with women who are victims of domestic violence has been very eye-opening. Your words ring very true. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Wow-it is incredible that you kept working this spring and still found time to write too. Again, you are doing such a good service by writing this and providing information!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Wow-it is incredible that you kept working this spring and still found time to write too. Again, you are doing such a good service by writing this and providing information!!! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from roserock
I liked how the dialogue and the interaction between the characters were believable. The story flowed well and I like how you end the chapter on an interesting note that makes the reader want to turn the page.
Well written and I enjoyed reading this:)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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I liked how the dialogue and the interaction between the characters were believable. The story flowed well and I like how you end the chapter on an interesting note that makes the reader want to turn the page.
Well written and I enjoyed reading this:)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from SWANNY
Another well written segment. I didn't notice any problems and don't have any suggestions for changes this time. You left things off at a good point making the reader curious to know if Troy will find Anna.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Another well written segment. I didn't notice any problems and don't have any suggestions for changes this time. You left things off at a good point making the reader curious to know if Troy will find Anna.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
