I Am A Man
what goes around comes around24 total reviews
Comment from Amicus
Well done. This is succinct, packs an emotional wallop and makes a point that is important. I enjoyed reading it and was surprised to find that it was prompted by a required word list as this element is woven invisibly into the fabric of the work.
Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Well done. This is succinct, packs an emotional wallop and makes a point that is important. I enjoyed reading it and was surprised to find that it was prompted by a required word list as this element is woven invisibly into the fabric of the work.
Good job.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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Thank you Amicus. I am really delighted by your perceptive review. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and offer your encouragement. Warm regards...Bev
Comment from Revamay
You fulfilled the requirements of the contest well, and told an interesting story in just 200 words. The characters were well defined, and the plot imaginative. I'm glad you won the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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You fulfilled the requirements of the contest well, and told an interesting story in just 200 words. The characters were well defined, and the plot imaginative. I'm glad you won the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2011
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How kind of you to offer your wonderful and supporting review for my piece. I very much appreciate it! Warm regards...Bev
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You're welcome. Reva
Comment from InterestingRon
It's easy to see why you won the contest with this stunner.
In 200 words you established three strong characters, a setting, conflict and a satisfying resolution.
Revenge might not be very Christian, but it sure is satisfying.
Ron xx
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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It's easy to see why you won the contest with this stunner.
In 200 words you established three strong characters, a setting, conflict and a satisfying resolution.
Revenge might not be very Christian, but it sure is satisfying.
Ron xx
Comment Written 19-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Thank you Ron. Your review means a lot to me. You know how to write these kinds of pieces so well! Thanks so much for your support - on to the next! Got to hustle to even be in the same stratosphere with you LOL. XX Bev
Comment from missy98writer
Myster Writer,
your flash fiction story titled I Am A Man is very written. Excellent descriptive writing and great dialogue in dilect caps off your short story. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Mickey's mother is a fool staying with an abusive drunkard and allowing him to strike her son. What a creep. I say let him rot in the slammer. Your art work was beautiful you used. Your story is excellent and should be a real contender in the 200 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest. Please keep on writing excellent flash fiction.
Missy.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Myster Writer,
your flash fiction story titled I Am A Man is very written. Excellent descriptive writing and great dialogue in dilect caps off your short story. In a minimum amount of words for a maximum effect you established a setting, conflict, and a resolution to your story. Mickey's mother is a fool staying with an abusive drunkard and allowing him to strike her son. What a creep. I say let him rot in the slammer. Your art work was beautiful you used. Your story is excellent and should be a real contender in the 200 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest. Please keep on writing excellent flash fiction.
Missy.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2011
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Hi Missy. I so appreciate your wonderful review. It was a satisfying story to write. I worked for years for a bully like this - emotionally abusive. I finally escaped after 25 years and paying my 'dues'. When I walked out the door, I thanked God I never had to see his nasty face again. Maybe some of that rubbed off on this piece. You are so very kind to offer your time and generous support in all the reviewing you do. I much appreciate your efforts on my behalf. Warm regards.
Comment from Kingsland
Let him stay in there for awhile and cool his heels. I liked this short story it was well written and very entertaining. It was my pleasure to have read and written a response for... John
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Let him stay in there for awhile and cool his heels. I liked this short story it was well written and very entertaining. It was my pleasure to have read and written a response for... John
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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I don't plan to let him off the hook by writing a sequel! I've gone toe-to-toe with a few bullies in my time so I guess that's the dark place it came from. I really appreciate your review John. Much appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Warm regards.
Comment from Gungalo
Yayyyyyy! This is so cool and men like that need to get the same answer he just gave his ma. For a short story, this sure packed one helluva wallop, you!!! i so love it!!! The imagery is off the wall and the content superb!!!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Yayyyyyy! This is so cool and men like that need to get the same answer he just gave his ma. For a short story, this sure packed one helluva wallop, you!!! i so love it!!! The imagery is off the wall and the content superb!!!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Wow, you have me speachless - and that is not easy. I am so pleased that you liked my story lovely friend. I know it's a little dark, but I couldn't resist a story about bullies getting their due. Faced down a few of 'em in my time. Got a great full moon coming this weekend, so I'll probably start writing my horror story conest entry LOL. Thanks again beautiful lady. xx
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I love it you. Horror story contest. Hmmm, I could do that too for I do love horror and the dark side has been beckoning me as of late. LOL. Great write here!!!
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I would LOVE to see your writing in a contest setting. I think you would do a fantastic job with it and knock everyone's socks off! Hope you decide to some time. XXX Bev
Comment from Writeaway...
Glad to see that Mikey got his revenge after his fathers continous beatings an excellent job on tellnig this powerful story myster writer. A note to improve though: Your dad assaulted a police officer and I need you to give me some of your savings so I can post bail." Consider adding a comma before 'so' this clearly identifies the conjunction in the sentence with two independant clauses. Thanks for posting, good luck in the contest, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Glad to see that Mikey got his revenge after his fathers continous beatings an excellent job on tellnig this powerful story myster writer. A note to improve though: Your dad assaulted a police officer and I need you to give me some of your savings so I can post bail." Consider adding a comma before 'so' this clearly identifies the conjunction in the sentence with two independant clauses. Thanks for posting, good luck in the contest, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Thanks for the tip Jakeyboy. I think that will probably cause that sentence to flow better. I appreciate your good wishes too.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
Karma is such a wonderful thing.
It can and usually does, deal out
a whole heap of payback that you
probably wouldn't have managed if
left to do it yourself.
Great story, well written.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Karma is such a wonderful thing.
It can and usually does, deal out
a whole heap of payback that you
probably wouldn't have managed if
left to do it yourself.
Great story, well written.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Exactly Laurie! I wholeheartedly agree and was hoping to make that point with the story. Hey, thanks for your great review. You are most kind (good karma!) Best wishes.
Comment from bard owl
Even with so few words, me made me feel good about what happened to the bully in this story. I LOVE a happy ending. Great job of grabbing my attention and hold it. That what a good story always is supposed to do. Excellent entry. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Even with so few words, me made me feel good about what happened to the bully in this story. I LOVE a happy ending. Great job of grabbing my attention and hold it. That what a good story always is supposed to do. Excellent entry. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Hi bard owl. I like it best when life takes over and gets justice done! I so appreciate your wonderful review. How kind of you to read and review. Warm regards.
Comment from Deejharrington
I wish I had a six left to give you for this well written story. In the limited number of words you have created a fascinating plot with characters that are believable. Sadly, this is a very true story. But I loved that the son got his revenge and the father got his due.
dj
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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I wish I had a six left to give you for this well written story. In the limited number of words you have created a fascinating plot with characters that are believable. Sadly, this is a very true story. But I loved that the son got his revenge and the father got his due.
dj
Comment Written 18-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2011
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Hi dj. Your wish is satisfaction enough for me! Your words really delight me and I am happy you liked my story. I so appreciate you taking time to send along your very encouraging review. Warm regards.