The Ballad of Big Dan
A poem about a miner15 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
This is a great ballad. You have a steady beat, good use of words and it flows like a song. This reminds me of one of Robert Service's poems. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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This is a great ballad. You have a steady beat, good use of words and it flows like a song. This reminds me of one of Robert Service's poems. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and for the great compliment. I wasn't familiar with Robert Service but I looked him up and read some of his poem. I only wish I could write like that.
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
I enjoyed reading your Big Dan ballad, my friend. You did a wonderful job in using the required words for this contest, my friend. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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I enjoyed reading your Big Dan ballad, my friend. You did a wonderful job in using the required words for this contest, my friend. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments and good wishes.
Comment from Espresso momma
A neat poem of Dan. He gave much for his country and for freedom. Thanks for sharing and good luck on the contest.
Was that his statue?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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A neat poem of Dan. He gave much for his country and for freedom. Thanks for sharing and good luck on the contest.
Was that his statue?
Comment Written 13-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. No this isn't the statue of Dan. The story is fiction.
Comment from ladywiltse
This is a nice tribute Ballad to Big Dan, and you seemed to bring all the words required to the table, and you had rhyming schemes also. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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This is a nice tribute Ballad to Big Dan, and you seemed to bring all the words required to the table, and you had rhyming schemes also. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments and good wishes.
Comment from Laurie Clayton
I can hear the music playing in the background to your words.
Pretty certain that youhave included all the words of the challenge.
Good rhythm and imagery woven into this entry.
Good luck with the comp.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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I can hear the music playing in the background to your words.
Pretty certain that youhave included all the words of the challenge.
Good rhythm and imagery woven into this entry.
Good luck with the comp.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I appreciate you stopping by to read this.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
your poem is very well written and rich in imagery painting a picture in the reader head. Your rhyme is excellent with great descriptive and very good narrative. The lines that stood out for me: "The family's faith was tested the day that Big Dan died, but Daniel died a hero's death, while all his children cried. The legacy he left behind has made his children strong, and to this day, in his hometown, we praise him in a song." A creative entry for the writing prompt contest. I wish your poem good luck in the contest. You did an excellent job using the required words in a cohesive song style poem.
Missy.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Poet,
your poem is very well written and rich in imagery painting a picture in the reader head. Your rhyme is excellent with great descriptive and very good narrative. The lines that stood out for me: "The family's faith was tested the day that Big Dan died, but Daniel died a hero's death, while all his children cried. The legacy he left behind has made his children strong, and to this day, in his hometown, we praise him in a song." A creative entry for the writing prompt contest. I wish your poem good luck in the contest. You did an excellent job using the required words in a cohesive song style poem.
Missy.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you Missy, You review is very encouraging. I appreciate you nice comments and good wishes.
Comment from adewpearl
Your quatrains in this story poem have a steady cadence and strong abcb rhyming.
Good use of alliteration.
Excellent chorus.
I didn't even realize until I got to the author's notes that you had to incorporate a list of required words, which means you worked them into the poem seamlessly - good luck in the contest - I sense a winner here. Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Your quatrains in this story poem have a steady cadence and strong abcb rhyming.
Good use of alliteration.
Excellent chorus.
I didn't even realize until I got to the author's notes that you had to incorporate a list of required words, which means you worked them into the poem seamlessly - good luck in the contest - I sense a winner here. Brooke
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you Brooke, I've never done a poem with a chorus before. I'm happy you think it works. I enjoy writing these poems that have certain words we much use. Fitting them in is sort of like doing a puzzle.
Comment from Sigrid Campbell
Your Ballad speaks of a stalwart, happy man who came to sacrifice his life for those he cared for, and includes the words provided in the writing prompt. It flows well, it has good structure, and it rhymes. Dan's story is interesting and may be inspiring to some.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Your Ballad speaks of a stalwart, happy man who came to sacrifice his life for those he cared for, and includes the words provided in the writing prompt. It flows well, it has good structure, and it rhymes. Dan's story is interesting and may be inspiring to some.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I love these challenges that have specific words you must use.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet
You have successfully used all of the required words in your ballad. It reminded me of "Big Bad John" by Jimmy Dean (1961). Dean wrote that song in two hours, and it earned him a Grammy.
Good Luck in the contest!
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Hi Mystery Poet
You have successfully used all of the required words in your ballad. It reminded me of "Big Bad John" by Jimmy Dean (1961). Dean wrote that song in two hours, and it earned him a Grammy.
Good Luck in the contest!
Kimbob
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you for the review and comments. Yes it is sort of like Big Bad John. It didn't take two hours but I'm not expecting a Grammy. LOL
Comment from mumsyone
Great subject and good lyrics! Your rhyme and meter are perfect, and the lines flow smoothly. I wish you all the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Great subject and good lyrics! Your rhyme and meter are perfect, and the lines flow smoothly. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2011
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments and good wishes.
