Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Love, eternity and remembering."memiors from my life experiences.
14 total reviews
Comment from whitteron
This is nicely done...not overly sentimental. It reads a little rough in some areas, but over all, you have conveyed your messages clearly...not an easy task, writing one's eulogy.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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This is nicely done...not overly sentimental. It reads a little rough in some areas, but over all, you have conveyed your messages clearly...not an easy task, writing one's eulogy.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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Thanks for the kind review and the stars.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
your poem is poignant and very well written. Your words are rich in imagery with great narrative and very good descriptive writing. Your art work is lovely. I like you title Love, eternity and remembering. Effective use of alliteration and metaphors. The lines that stood out for me: "The morning sun on my face brings tears to my eyes. The sheer happiness of hope for the new day. With the mist hovering over the mountains. Feeling everything all at once. Knowing the reason for being is here in my heart." I enjoyed the spiritual message. Your poem is an excellent entry in the Write your own eulogy contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Missy.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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Poet,
your poem is poignant and very well written. Your words are rich in imagery with great narrative and very good descriptive writing. Your art work is lovely. I like you title Love, eternity and remembering. Effective use of alliteration and metaphors. The lines that stood out for me: "The morning sun on my face brings tears to my eyes. The sheer happiness of hope for the new day. With the mist hovering over the mountains. Feeling everything all at once. Knowing the reason for being is here in my heart." I enjoyed the spiritual message. Your poem is an excellent entry in the Write your own eulogy contest. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Missy.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2010
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Thank you missy. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from rosah
great eulogy, soothing, and peaceful, full of gratitude for what was yours, that you now pass on, thank you for sharing, peace be with you.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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great eulogy, soothing, and peaceful, full of gratitude for what was yours, that you now pass on, thank you for sharing, peace be with you.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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thank you
Comment from winlaw writer
A well prepared message that shares your parting thoughts with everyone to remind them of yourself and your love toward them with art work that is pleasant to view.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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A well prepared message that shares your parting thoughts with everyone to remind them of yourself and your love toward them with art work that is pleasant to view.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2010
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thank you
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
The picture is awesome and what a beautiful place to see yourself going to. And reassuring to your loved ones as is letting your family know you have 'no regrets'.
I noted a little oops below
My beautiful children, there tiny faces, the love in there hearts. [their needs to replace 'there']
Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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The picture is awesome and what a beautiful place to see yourself going to. And reassuring to your loved ones as is letting your family know you have 'no regrets'.
I noted a little oops below
My beautiful children, there tiny faces, the love in there hearts. [their needs to replace 'there']
Good job.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thank you for the kind review and the corrections.
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
this is great. its carfully thought out, full of admirable love and passion for life, the kind of things we all want to remember and be remembered for !
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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this is great. its carfully thought out, full of admirable love and passion for life, the kind of things we all want to remember and be remembered for !
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from daymanrayne
As I read this, I think that this is present very differently. I would see this as like good-bye and you would joining the army not how it's said in the author's notes.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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As I read this, I think that this is present very differently. I would see this as like good-bye and you would joining the army not how it's said in the author's notes.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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It's supposed to be a Eulogy. it's a contest entry so in that it is similar to a suicide note. Just a message you leave behind to loved ones after you die.
Comment from fluffnstuff
what a beautiful writing...i choose at this time to think on it. i know for a fact that i will have two songs played and they are Go the Distance from disneys Hercules and Remember me this way from Casper. My favorite you wrote was "knowing the reason for being is here in my heart"----important line.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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what a beautiful writing...i choose at this time to think on it. i know for a fact that i will have two songs played and they are Go the Distance from disneys Hercules and Remember me this way from Casper. My favorite you wrote was "knowing the reason for being is here in my heart"----important line.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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Thank you. you are too kind. I don't remember go the distance.
or remember me this way ill have to look them up on u tube.
Comment from Mustang Patty
This is a beautiful tribute to you and how you live life. One small flaw; you used the wrong form of "their" at the end to describe your children's' faces. The flow was lovely, and I could imagine this being read at a funeral. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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This is a beautiful tribute to you and how you live life. One small flaw; you used the wrong form of "their" at the end to describe your children's' faces. The flow was lovely, and I could imagine this being read at a funeral. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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thank you for the kind review
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a very tender eulogy. i don't see how this can't be a winner. i wish you the best of luck in the contest....
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a very tender eulogy. i don't see how this can't be a winner. i wish you the best of luck in the contest....
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2010
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thank you