Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Broken wings."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from Gungalo
My my my what a deep breath of a write this one is. Gosh, really, I held my breath in the end waiting to see what was coming next. Beautifully written with all the powerful emotions of such.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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My my my what a deep breath of a write this one is. Gosh, really, I held my breath in the end waiting to see what was coming next. Beautifully written with all the powerful emotions of such.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2010
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thank you Gungalo
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Thank you poet!!! My pleasure.
Comment from acvguard11
great job...i really enjoyed reading this piece of work...very well written...dont let others discourage you..great job and keep writing
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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great job...i really enjoyed reading this piece of work...very well written...dont let others discourage you..great job and keep writing
Comment Written 08-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2010
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thank you
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi keimosobie,
This is one of those poems that can be interpreted in more than one way. To me it is the loss of love to another. The melancholy flavor and the power of your well chosen words. I can't pick a favorite verse as I like them all. Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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Hi keimosobie,
This is one of those poems that can be interpreted in more than one way. To me it is the loss of love to another. The melancholy flavor and the power of your well chosen words. I can't pick a favorite verse as I like them all. Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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you are correct thank you for the review
Comment from dportwood
keimosobie,
Perfect rhyming in this series of quatrains with their sad storyline. Sorrowful when lives are uprooted by the act of one unfaithful.
Duane
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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keimosobie,
Perfect rhyming in this series of quatrains with their sad storyline. Sorrowful when lives are uprooted by the act of one unfaithful.
Duane
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you
Comment from AnnaLinda
keimosobie,
You have a well composed poem here with a smooth
rhythm and great rhymes in your quatrains. This
is a part of your poem that stood out to me:
"angel wings have been broken
without a word to be spoken"
So sad. The lines about puzzles and blleding wounds in
memorable as well - interesting and appropriate artwork
choice as well.
Linda
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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keimosobie,
You have a well composed poem here with a smooth
rhythm and great rhymes in your quatrains. This
is a part of your poem that stood out to me:
"angel wings have been broken
without a word to be spoken"
So sad. The lines about puzzles and blleding wounds in
memorable as well - interesting and appropriate artwork
choice as well.
Linda
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you linda I'm glad you lioked it
Comment from Triple P
Powerful poem! Could be taken in a couple of different ways - 'love stolen' could be rape; it could be that one got the other to love through false pretenses; it could be abuse. The reader is allowed to bring their own interpretation to the poem, which makes it outstanding. Great job.
Patrick.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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Powerful poem! Could be taken in a couple of different ways - 'love stolen' could be rape; it could be that one got the other to love through false pretenses; it could be abuse. The reader is allowed to bring their own interpretation to the poem, which makes it outstanding. Great job.
Patrick.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you patrick I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from richard7
wonderful!
your subtle rhyme and descriptive words paint the picture clear,,i hope!
a child molested?
the picture gives the poem good impact.
the lack of punctuation lets it flow right into place to complete the picture you brought across.
I hopw readers stop read have a good look like they already seem too be!
nice read thanks.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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wonderful!
your subtle rhyme and descriptive words paint the picture clear,,i hope!
a child molested?
the picture gives the poem good impact.
the lack of punctuation lets it flow right into place to complete the picture you brought across.
I hopw readers stop read have a good look like they already seem too be!
nice read thanks.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review and the comments
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okay!
Comment from Magics02
I so admired this write of yours. Angel wings have been broken but you know they can still fly with broken wings. I really liked this poem of yours. Look forward to reading more from your pen:) magics
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
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I so admired this write of yours. Angel wings have been broken but you know they can still fly with broken wings. I really liked this poem of yours. Look forward to reading more from your pen:) magics
Comment Written 06-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2010
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Thank you it is much appriciated. I'm glad you like it.
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You are so welcome Keim:)
Comment from leesm
A nice poem of broken love. This stanza says it all:
love has left me full of sorrow
till the end of all tomorrow
been trying hard to pretend
that it's not really the end
Nice write!
-Lee
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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A nice poem of broken love. This stanza says it all:
love has left me full of sorrow
till the end of all tomorrow
been trying hard to pretend
that it's not really the end
Nice write!
-Lee
Comment Written 05-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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thank you lee
Comment from Paulpl52
A very sad poem with a message we could all understand. Nothing in life is certain and this is true of love. Nice flow and deep heartfelt words to get the message across. Well done, Paul.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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A very sad poem with a message we could all understand. Nothing in life is certain and this is true of love. Nice flow and deep heartfelt words to get the message across. Well done, Paul.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review.