Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Devils Seed"memiors from my life experiences.
116 total reviews
Comment from redflaw
Hey!
You curve the path to your please. The reader has no clue what comes next. To be honest, sometimes nor the writer.
Wouldn't you say?
Cheers!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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Hey!
You curve the path to your please. The reader has no clue what comes next. To be honest, sometimes nor the writer.
Wouldn't you say?
Cheers!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2010
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does anyone really know whats next? Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
This all the truth until the last line but we won't argue about a moot point anyone ( but I will tell you that I did see the devil beating his head against the south wall of the First Christian Church on Main Street the other day, yelling, "I didn't do it!" ) LOL!
Love, loved, loving it! Your imagery, meter and rhyme are superb.
Penny
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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This all the truth until the last line but we won't argue about a moot point anyone ( but I will tell you that I did see the devil beating his head against the south wall of the First Christian Church on Main Street the other day, yelling, "I didn't do it!" ) LOL!
Love, loved, loving it! Your imagery, meter and rhyme are superb.
Penny
Comment Written 21-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2010
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thank you i liked your writing as well.
Comment from bhogg
Very good imagery, excellent poem. I guess I would have submitted to tempatation more, just not enough opportunity. So little time, so few opportunities. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Very good imagery, excellent poem. I guess I would have submitted to tempatation more, just not enough opportunity. So little time, so few opportunities. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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You probably werent looking for them. thank you
Comment from missy98writer
keimosobie,
your poem is very well written about temptation. Beautiful art work and presentation. Great title 'The Devils Seed.' Your poem tells a story about temptation. Your rhymes are excellent. Cleaver use of metaphors such as smoldering embers, combust in to fire, darkness lies, ultimate desire, heart's contemplation, lies hidden with imagination, hopeless abandonment, and spawns the Devil's seed.' Your poem was thought provoking and a delightful read. Thanks for sharing your poetic art and have a nice day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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keimosobie,
your poem is very well written about temptation. Beautiful art work and presentation. Great title 'The Devils Seed.' Your poem tells a story about temptation. Your rhymes are excellent. Cleaver use of metaphors such as smoldering embers, combust in to fire, darkness lies, ultimate desire, heart's contemplation, lies hidden with imagination, hopeless abandonment, and spawns the Devil's seed.' Your poem was thought provoking and a delightful read. Thanks for sharing your poetic art and have a nice day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I think most of us have submitted to temptation of one kind or another, it is human nature, the degree of what tempts us may be different but that is all,
you did very well on this poem, I enjoyed it and the photo is perfect.
renee
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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I think most of us have submitted to temptation of one kind or another, it is human nature, the degree of what tempts us may be different but that is all,
you did very well on this poem, I enjoyed it and the photo is perfect.
renee
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Thank you for the compliments and the stars.
Comment from Swtdreamz
Temptation, lust, and desire...so hard to push away, yet we must to save our own souls.
The Devil's seed takes root deep if we allow it to enter our hearts.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Temptation, lust, and desire...so hard to push away, yet we must to save our own souls.
The Devil's seed takes root deep if we allow it to enter our hearts.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from Brendajay
Strong words in a powerful poem. "every heart's contemplation
lies hidden with imagination," and the last line is so true. Pain is the beginning of going off track. Love the photo. I think this is a great poem. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Strong words in a powerful poem. "every heart's contemplation
lies hidden with imagination," and the last line is so true. Pain is the beginning of going off track. Love the photo. I think this is a great poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thank you and i appriciate the stars.
Comment from closetpoetjester
Oouch...I know what you mean and I have certainly been tempted and its erotic and wrong all at once.
This was a great little write and well narrated throughout.
You convey the feeling well of what it is like to be tempted and break.
Experience is always the best teacher and also makes for a great poem.
This was no exception.
A pleasure to read and my fave lines:
"every heart's contemplation
lies hidden with imagination"
This is perfectly phrased and I soooooo couldn't agree more.
Well done and this was a fantastic write with an equally as good presentation.
Cheers closetpoetjester xo
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Oouch...I know what you mean and I have certainly been tempted and its erotic and wrong all at once.
This was a great little write and well narrated throughout.
You convey the feeling well of what it is like to be tempted and break.
Experience is always the best teacher and also makes for a great poem.
This was no exception.
A pleasure to read and my fave lines:
"every heart's contemplation
lies hidden with imagination"
This is perfectly phrased and I soooooo couldn't agree more.
Well done and this was a fantastic write with an equally as good presentation.
Cheers closetpoetjester xo
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from InHisownwrite
Very powerful, very emotional.....
Filled with many life learned truths.....
Reminds me of the "not judging" others syndrome.....
Unless you've walked in their shoes.....
my favorite: not just from lust and greed, from pain spawns the devil's seed.... How inspired is that?
Bryan
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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Very powerful, very emotional.....
Filled with many life learned truths.....
Reminds me of the "not judging" others syndrome.....
Unless you've walked in their shoes.....
my favorite: not just from lust and greed, from pain spawns the devil's seed.... How inspired is that?
Bryan
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thanks
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You are welcome..Bryan
Comment from animatqua
This is so true. I remember one of Larry Flynt's magazines had a picture on the back cover of a soldier with his head smashed in. The caption was "And you call our pictures pornographic!"
Yes, I still do; but violence is so played down as the devil's seed!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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This is so true. I remember one of Larry Flynt's magazines had a picture on the back cover of a soldier with his head smashed in. The caption was "And you call our pictures pornographic!"
Yes, I still do; but violence is so played down as the devil's seed!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2010
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thanks for the comments and the stars.