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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The child is born"Parents die, so she moves in with unknown family
13 total reviews
Comment from Amyna
Hi Weirdgrace. Sorry I haven't been reading any of your stories for some time as I just have not had time to sit at the computer!
This chapter is gripping and makes me want to read the rest of the story. I shall, very soon. What a tragedy, going through such discomfort and pain and giving birth to a monster...
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2010
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Hi Weirdgrace. Sorry I haven't been reading any of your stories for some time as I just have not had time to sit at the computer!
This chapter is gripping and makes me want to read the rest of the story. I shall, very soon. What a tragedy, going through such discomfort and pain and giving birth to a monster...
Comment Written 26-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2010
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hope you do read the rest, thank you
Comment from Tellis
Poor Bonnie, is she going to get to raise her mutant baby. Maybe he'll grow up and become a doctor. They'll call him Doc Oct. LoL excellent chapter.
Tellis
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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Poor Bonnie, is she going to get to raise her mutant baby. Maybe he'll grow up and become a doctor. They'll call him Doc Oct. LoL excellent chapter.
Tellis
Comment Written 25-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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haha wish I would of thought that
Comment from Readywriter52
The baby didn't look like it should so they called it a monstrosity. It's a shame that people can't accept the differences in other people. I wonder how they plan to tell Bonnie that her baby is dead.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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The baby didn't look like it should so they called it a monstrosity. It's a shame that people can't accept the differences in other people. I wonder how they plan to tell Bonnie that her baby is dead.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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I know, but that is what the characters thought,
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Yikes, that really was a baby monstrosity! You are carrying on well with your story which does a really good job of capturing the reader's interest. Your storyline is interesting. You are doing an excellent job with it.
Hugs, W ^-^
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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Yikes, that really was a baby monstrosity! You are carrying on well with your story which does a really good job of capturing the reader's interest. Your storyline is interesting. You are doing an excellent job with it.
Hugs, W ^-^
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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thank you so so much
Comment from bhogg
Well, you certainly created tension in your story. I was a bit disapointed when it ended, having just got in to the story. I didn't really spot any obvious errors or spags. To me, a good read. I'll circle back and read some previous chapters. Bill
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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Well, you certainly created tension in your story. I was a bit disapointed when it ended, having just got in to the story. I didn't really spot any obvious errors or spags. To me, a good read. I'll circle back and read some previous chapters. Bill
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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It is not over yet, hope you read the coming chapters too. thank you
Comment from Rafaqat Bano
Hi
it is an interesting chapetr part of book ......as it is simple too.......I like your writing for using easy and simple sentences........subject is also appealing in your writing ......anyhow ..it is short but it is good ....it moves fluently and smoothly ......good work
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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Hi
it is an interesting chapetr part of book ......as it is simple too.......I like your writing for using easy and simple sentences........subject is also appealing in your writing ......anyhow ..it is short but it is good ....it moves fluently and smoothly ......good work
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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thank you so somuch
Comment from misscookie
This is a sad part of the story for the women who gave brth to this thing , yetyou instill happyness when the creater came out of the water and took the baby to the waer to breath. i know that bay and maommy are going to get together sooner or later.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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This is a sad part of the story for the women who gave brth to this thing , yetyou instill happyness when the creater came out of the water and took the baby to the waer to breath. i know that bay and maommy are going to get together sooner or later.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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I know, I am sorry, thank you for reading
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Hi never be sorry for the gift god blessed you with Your writing is outstanding and all ways fill with surprises that's why I read them.
Comment from ulster3
Fantastic, wierd grace.
I really just totally enjoyed this excellent and entertaining chapter. The picture you chose goes with it well. The chapter made me hungry. lol. I get hungrey when I am anxious. Keep up the good work.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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Fantastic, wierd grace.
I really just totally enjoyed this excellent and entertaining chapter. The picture you chose goes with it well. The chapter made me hungry. lol. I get hungrey when I am anxious. Keep up the good work.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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thank you, more to come today
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I thought in the last post it was a baby girl octopus. Maybe I am mistaken.
"Look," Sara said to the men, "Bonnie has had a monstrosity." (Understatement!!!! Wouldn't there be a little surprise, shock, or something here!!!)
"Don't tell Bonnie about the baby." Gramps told Sara. (comma after baby)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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I thought in the last post it was a baby girl octopus. Maybe I am mistaken.
"Look," Sara said to the men, "Bonnie has had a monstrosity." (Understatement!!!! Wouldn't there be a little surprise, shock, or something here!!!)
"Don't tell Bonnie about the baby." Gramps told Sara. (comma after baby)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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thank yu so much, and yes it is a girl, I will fix the errors, thank you so much for your help
Comment from Amina Ahmed
a good attempt but i could not get it totally. your expression is a bit vague. i have enjoyed but not totally. waiting for the next maybe i ll get the clue. take care
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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a good attempt but i could not get it totally. your expression is a bit vague. i have enjoyed but not totally. waiting for the next maybe i ll get the clue. take care
Comment Written 24-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2010
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so sorry you could not get it, have your read it all chapter, if not I will work on it, more to come, hope you enjoy those
