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Comment from Nicki_Mist
Thios sounds very interesting and full of imagery so i will have to read the other chapters to catch up on the reading and see what is going on. Keep on writing like you do.
Nicole
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thios sounds very interesting and full of imagery so i will have to read the other chapters to catch up on the reading and see what is going on. Keep on writing like you do.
Nicole
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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thank you so so much
Comment from rmdelta
grace,
another strong chapter that you take us along with you on, my friend. Great descriptives and dialogue. Well done.
Reggie
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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grace,
another strong chapter that you take us along with you on, my friend. Great descriptives and dialogue. Well done.
Reggie
Comment Written 14-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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thank you my friend
Comment from Readywriter52
Jackie has contacted Johnny. Jackie lives in England and contacted Johnny via his mind. It looks like a couple of the children have very special skills. I imagine they all do.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Jackie has contacted Johnny. Jackie lives in England and contacted Johnny via his mind. It looks like a couple of the children have very special skills. I imagine they all do.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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this is true, hope you like the rest
Comment from Ponder
Hi WierdGrace,
Your story is taking an interesting turn now that the six boys have grown a little. I spotted a few errors here, but havne't pointed them out as I'm not sure that this is what you want in your reviews, please let me know if you do,
Jules
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Hi WierdGrace,
Your story is taking an interesting turn now that the six boys have grown a little. I spotted a few errors here, but havne't pointed them out as I'm not sure that this is what you want in your reviews, please let me know if you do,
Jules
Comment Written 13-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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so true, sorry short, tell me of the errors as I need to review soon, right now, this is straight from the mind to keys on computer, and my typings is back some days, most days, thank you.
Comment from ulster3
Hello wierdgrace.
This is really cool. Again your keen imagination is overflowing, and it is all entertaining.
Hugs. Rebecca
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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Hello wierdgrace.
This is really cool. Again your keen imagination is overflowing, and it is all entertaining.
Hugs. Rebecca
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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this is great, thank you
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So the six boys are able to communicate with each other, even though they are no where close to each other. Okay, I will buy into that. It's almost believable. I have heard that twins, separated at birth can do unreal things.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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So the six boys are able to communicate with each other, even though they are no where close to each other. Okay, I will buy into that. It's almost believable. I have heard that twins, separated at birth can do unreal things.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2010
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me too, thank you
Comment from Tellis
Excellent that they can talk telepathically and I wonder where the father went. MAybethey will become world leaders.
Tellis
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Excellent that they can talk telepathically and I wonder where the father went. MAybethey will become world leaders.
Tellis
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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haha, you are the first to ask, we will seen soon,
Comment from prophetess
This is an interesting chapter grace. i think I have to go back and read the beginning. I like the way the boy can hear the other boy from england in his head. It would be great if we could really do such things. One thing I noticed though, Hollywood is one word, you split it up. Other than that I saw no spag, or grammar errors. The dialogue flows well and so far as i can tell from this one chapter your characters are believable. Thank you Grace and I look forward to reading more of the book. Keep up the good work. Have a wonderful evening.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This is an interesting chapter grace. i think I have to go back and read the beginning. I like the way the boy can hear the other boy from england in his head. It would be great if we could really do such things. One thing I noticed though, Hollywood is one word, you split it up. Other than that I saw no spag, or grammar errors. The dialogue flows well and so far as i can tell from this one chapter your characters are believable. Thank you Grace and I look forward to reading more of the book. Keep up the good work. Have a wonderful evening.
Prophetess
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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I knew that, and fixed it, it must not have kept, I will fix
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It's done that to me before too. I try to edit and it doesn't fix. It's not a big deal, just an observation, if the edit doesn't fix it doesn't take away from the story at all.
Comment from Deejharrington
Now the boys are their abilities are starting to get spooky. Their all telepathic? How cool. The story line is really starting to develop so well. As we are getting to know each of the boys individually.
deb
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Now the boys are their abilities are starting to get spooky. Their all telepathic? How cool. The story line is really starting to develop so well. As we are getting to know each of the boys individually.
deb
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you, hope you continue reading
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another good chapter from you i enjoyed reading, good form, good flow, good storyline and i will make sure i read more of this story. i'm glad you're still with us
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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this is another good chapter from you i enjoyed reading, good form, good flow, good storyline and i will make sure i read more of this story. i'm glad you're still with us
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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so so glad you are reading thank you
