Legacy of Loss
A daughter's lament29 total reviews
Comment from afternoonlight
This story is heard every day in all the corners of the world. You have told it well in quatrains and the story of this life flows with a daughter who is brave. It is a wonder to me how father's can leave there children without contact, sometimes even when they sit at the same dinner table. You've sent my thoughts out to all the children who are strong and still able to give after they have been wronged.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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This story is heard every day in all the corners of the world. You have told it well in quatrains and the story of this life flows with a daughter who is brave. It is a wonder to me how father's can leave there children without contact, sometimes even when they sit at the same dinner table. You've sent my thoughts out to all the children who are strong and still able to give after they have been wronged.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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afternoonlight, this is a pleasant surprise. I am always humbled and h0nored when a fanstorian stops by, takes their time to read and review a work that pays not one thing. This simple act tells me, you are hear to read, savor and enjoy the immense talent this place offers and also to hone your artistic craft. this means so much to me..again thank you..jlsavell
Comment from Shannon Raili
Well this is sadness and reality.
I am a child from a divorces family....but I am lucky to say that I never experienced such pain.
The honest is vivid a daughter 's pain.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Well this is sadness and reality.
I am a child from a divorces family....but I am lucky to say that I never experienced such pain.
The honest is vivid a daughter 's pain.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Shannon Raili, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. Yes this is a sad and tragic tale...jls
Comment from Judian James
Oh, pieces like this are so hard to read and I am so sorry for this sad turn of events. "Your promises were lies
Your happiness, my cost" A well written but sad piece, Jimi
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Oh, pieces like this are so hard to read and I am so sorry for this sad turn of events. "Your promises were lies
Your happiness, my cost" A well written but sad piece, Jimi
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Judian Jmaes, once again thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. Your time and words are very much appreciated..jimi
Comment from Hitcher
Jimi! Nice to read you again friend, and what a one to it was! You describe the forever longing of a child abandoned by her father. One so young should never have to nurse a never ending wound in her heart, and just when they seem to have put it to bed...Knock! Knock! open the wound and welcome it in and watch it die, some people just don't deserve compassion, no matter who they think they are. Loved it friend, my kind of soulful writing, You are fine though friend? Course you are!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Jimi! Nice to read you again friend, and what a one to it was! You describe the forever longing of a child abandoned by her father. One so young should never have to nurse a never ending wound in her heart, and just when they seem to have put it to bed...Knock! Knock! open the wound and welcome it in and watch it die, some people just don't deserve compassion, no matter who they think they are. Loved it friend, my kind of soulful writing, You are fine though friend? Course you are!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Hitcher, once again thank you thank you thank you!!! It was a little difficult to write, but I am fine. I appreciate you so very much friend..jimi
Comment from Arkine
I'll never understand why some guys just can't seem to stick around. My husband's dad did the same thing though he came back, but I wonder if that was really such a good thing; he wasn't the nicest man. Anyhow, nicely done on this!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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I'll never understand why some guys just can't seem to stick around. My husband's dad did the same thing though he came back, but I wonder if that was really such a good thing; he wasn't the nicest man. Anyhow, nicely done on this!
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Arkine, thank you so very much for stopping by. I appreciate you very much. Yes, this plays out each and ever day around the world, unfortunately it can leave great emotional scars...again thank you so very much..jls
Comment from Dave M
Jimi,
This is an excellent narrative poem of what seem to be rather selfish people. I appreciated it and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Jimi,
This is an excellent narrative poem of what seem to be rather selfish people. I appreciated it and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Dave once again thank you!!!!!
Comment from JimLee
So heartfelt and beautiful. The stains we can leave on our children are often never seen. You did a wonderful job of expressing the thoughts of a little, girl, a teen, a happy bride with a hole in her heart, and a God gifted care giver.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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So heartfelt and beautiful. The stains we can leave on our children are often never seen. You did a wonderful job of expressing the thoughts of a little, girl, a teen, a happy bride with a hole in her heart, and a God gifted care giver.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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JimLee, thank you so very much for stopping by to read and review my work. Yes parents can create great emotional scars that theri children can carry for a lifetime..again thank you so very much..jimi
Comment from NightWriter
"Legacy of Loss" is a powerful and moving quatrain. You touch the reader's heart with every word. Perfectly written and stated with good rhythm and perfect rhyme. Well done as always!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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"Legacy of Loss" is a powerful and moving quatrain. You touch the reader's heart with every word. Perfectly written and stated with good rhythm and perfect rhyme. Well done as always!
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Nightwriter, thank you for stopping by.. You know I always appreciate you..always..jimi
Comment from Nanny 6
This is a very sad poem...to think the daughter took her father in after he abandoned her after all those years to take care of his needs. This is profound, and makes me wonder if I would do the same thing??? Thank you for sharing. Judy
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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This is a very sad poem...to think the daughter took her father in after he abandoned her after all those years to take care of his needs. This is profound, and makes me wonder if I would do the same thing??? Thank you for sharing. Judy
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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judy f, once again thank you so very much. Well I think you would..because it was the right thing to do..again thank you so very very much for your great reviews and loyal support..jlsavell
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Jimi, that was so very tragic and painful and you captured the mood perfectly. Not sure if it is true, but could indeed be. You pulled the reader right into your poem and it's sad story. Great work, Loyd
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Jimi, that was so very tragic and painful and you captured the mood perfectly. Not sure if it is true, but could indeed be. You pulled the reader right into your poem and it's sad story. Great work, Loyd
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Loyd, once again thank you so very much..for your friendship and your support of my work...jimi
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My great pleasure, Loyd