I Knew You Before I Knew
A contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Love to hear the song.
Poetry has been my scary trial. I'm more comfortable with short stories.
I believe it's true God, will protect the children, who will one day trust him.
Keep writing, and check out faithwriters.com too, that is if you haven't. Share that voice of poetry.
Blessings
Stan Bednarz
Phil.1:6
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Love to hear the song.
Poetry has been my scary trial. I'm more comfortable with short stories.
I believe it's true God, will protect the children, who will one day trust him.
Keep writing, and check out faithwriters.com too, that is if you haven't. Share that voice of poetry.
Blessings
Stan Bednarz
Phil.1:6
Comment Written 07-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Stan, thank you so much for this review. I am on faithwriters so glad you know about them too. I have not posted there since they started charging to post. It is too rich for my blood. LOL.
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Way christian cool, I think I recall seeing your name around that forum, but I'm a little slow in the head.
Grat days ahead.
Comment from Ann Smith
I believe that God protects us when we don't know. The rhythm and flow in the poem allows the mind to slowly soak the words in. I like the repetition because it is pleasing to the ear. Thank you for sharing. ann
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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I believe that God protects us when we don't know. The rhythm and flow in the poem allows the mind to slowly soak the words in. I like the repetition because it is pleasing to the ear. Thank you for sharing. ann
Comment Written 20-May-2010
reply by the author on 20-May-2010
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Ann, thank you so much for this kind review. It is truely amazing how God protects us.
Comment from geoniasha
Katie --
This is a beautifully written poem that clearly shows your belief, trust and faith. The artwork is very reassuring and inspiring. 'Suffer the little children to come unto me for of such is the Kingdom of Heaven'. This verse from the bible tells me that to be part of the Kingdom we must be as little innocent children in our trust and belief. I have no doubt that Jesus protected to though you had no knowledge of Him at the time. Though you may have been abused, those memories were divinely hidden from you to protect your innocent mind. Bless you and thank you for sharing your story in poem. Good luck! geo
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Katie --
This is a beautifully written poem that clearly shows your belief, trust and faith. The artwork is very reassuring and inspiring. 'Suffer the little children to come unto me for of such is the Kingdom of Heaven'. This verse from the bible tells me that to be part of the Kingdom we must be as little innocent children in our trust and belief. I have no doubt that Jesus protected to though you had no knowledge of Him at the time. Though you may have been abused, those memories were divinely hidden from you to protect your innocent mind. Bless you and thank you for sharing your story in poem. Good luck! geo
Comment Written 18-May-2010
reply by the author on 18-May-2010
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Geo, thank you for such an understanding review. Yes I totally believe that God kept those memories from me to protect my mind and then amazingly he filled my memoires with knowledge that He was always protecting me, even before I knew Him. What a miracle. Thank you againg for your kind words. Blessings, Katie
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You're welcome. geo
Comment from Nicole Maye
Will I ever know why
Jesus loved me so much
That's God. He is not mindful of age. He calls whom He wants when He wants. He was calling you, protecting you at that age. God bless you and your friend. Though the situation was sad, the poem flowed nicely and I know God uses our circumstances to accomplish His goals, His will for us.
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Will I ever know why
Jesus loved me so much
That's God. He is not mindful of age. He calls whom He wants when He wants. He was calling you, protecting you at that age. God bless you and your friend. Though the situation was sad, the poem flowed nicely and I know God uses our circumstances to accomplish His goals, His will for us.
Comment Written 03-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Nicole, thank you so much for your generous and understanding review. God is amazing. I am just glad that God can be glorified in this. He had blessed me in SO many ways, and for that I am beyond greatful. Blessing, Katie
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
This is a beautiful, haunting and powerful poem which shines full of God's mercy and love. What a strong testimony you have. Well done and thank you for sharing your heart.
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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This is a beautiful, haunting and powerful poem which shines full of God's mercy and love. What a strong testimony you have. Well done and thank you for sharing your heart.
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Janine, thank you for this kind and understanding review. God is amazing and I am so thankful He protected me all these years.
Comment from GentleWind
I am glad He protected you so we can have the honor and privilege of reading this poem. This piece spoke volumes of your love for Him and His for you. It flowed well and the rhyming scheme worked. I love the last stanza as it stands alone in it Truth. What a testimony of His grace and mercy. Great job
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I am glad He protected you so we can have the honor and privilege of reading this poem. This piece spoke volumes of your love for Him and His for you. It flowed well and the rhyming scheme worked. I love the last stanza as it stands alone in it Truth. What a testimony of His grace and mercy. Great job
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you so much for this kind and encouraging review. God sure is amazing. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Blessing, Katie
Comment from JudithMarie
Katie, this is beautiful. The thoughts on God being there before I knew Him, I have felt this strongly as well. The thought, "Will I ever know why You loved me so much" has a lot of emotion, something I will need to ask Him when I see Him face to face. This has a great flow...I enjoyed the images and emotions of a child growing to the present recognition of unconditional love. This was a journey you took your readers on. It is a well thought out writing. JudithMarie
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Katie, this is beautiful. The thoughts on God being there before I knew Him, I have felt this strongly as well. The thought, "Will I ever know why You loved me so much" has a lot of emotion, something I will need to ask Him when I see Him face to face. This has a great flow...I enjoyed the images and emotions of a child growing to the present recognition of unconditional love. This was a journey you took your readers on. It is a well thought out writing. JudithMarie
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Judy, thank you so much for the understanding review. It is amazing that I have such strong memories, the only memories from that age, of God protecting me. Thank you for the encouragment.
Comment from Oatmeal
Katiesherrill,
The theme was good. The flow is smooth. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no SPAG and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Katiesherrill,
The theme was good. The flow is smooth. Very informative and soulful, full of vivid impressions, effective and impressive.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no SPAG and no typos.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate your comments very much.
Comment from prodigal
I agree with your views, however, structurally this needs a lot of work. Throughout your song you have forced rhyming and awkward phrasing... Case in Point-
"Before I knew He died
And my life He'd deliver
He rescued me still
The thoughts make me shiver "
My life He'd deliver.... very strange phrasing. Obviously written this way to create a rhyme with shiver. My question is why use that in the first place? "the thoughts make me shiver" comes off as a little strange.
Just to reiterate, I like the message which is Jesus knew you before you knew. That is awesome, however, it's the structure that needs work. Good luck in the contest- sam
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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I agree with your views, however, structurally this needs a lot of work. Throughout your song you have forced rhyming and awkward phrasing... Case in Point-
"Before I knew He died
And my life He'd deliver
He rescued me still
The thoughts make me shiver "
My life He'd deliver.... very strange phrasing. Obviously written this way to create a rhyme with shiver. My question is why use that in the first place? "the thoughts make me shiver" comes off as a little strange.
Just to reiterate, I like the message which is Jesus knew you before you knew. That is awesome, however, it's the structure that needs work. Good luck in the contest- sam
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Thank you for the review. I will take another look at the rhyming to see how I can make it feel less forced. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Jeremiah 1:5 (NLT)
'I knew you before I formed you in your mother's womb. Before you were born I set you apart and annointed you as a prophet to the nations.'
This verse very much validates your experience, that Jesus was watching over your life from that young age, even though it was a number of years before you actually responded to His call on your life.
Of course, as everyone else, you will still be subject to the same temptations, trials and tribulations of everyday life, but just knowing that He is there makes it all bearable.
I love how you write of now 'seeing' and knowing Him,and of feeling amazed by his great and abiding love and protection.
The six star award is because your poem spoke to my heart, as I hope it will speak to many others.
I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
Juliette
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Jeremiah 1:5 (NLT)
'I knew you before I formed you in your mother's womb. Before you were born I set you apart and annointed you as a prophet to the nations.'
This verse very much validates your experience, that Jesus was watching over your life from that young age, even though it was a number of years before you actually responded to His call on your life.
Of course, as everyone else, you will still be subject to the same temptations, trials and tribulations of everyday life, but just knowing that He is there makes it all bearable.
I love how you write of now 'seeing' and knowing Him,and of feeling amazed by his great and abiding love and protection.
The six star award is because your poem spoke to my heart, as I hope it will speak to many others.
I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
Juliette
Comment Written 01-May-2010
reply by the author on 01-May-2010
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Juliette, thank you so much for this review. I love the scripture you quote from Jeremiah. I totally agree, it makes me think of Psalm 139 I knit you together in your mother's womb" Thank you so much for reminding me of that. I'm glad this spoke to you, I hope to have it put to music soon so I can use it when I speak to groups. I really appreciate your encouragement.
