Ghost Town USA
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ghost Town, The end"A sandy trip in the desert
9 total reviews
Comment from Readywriter52
The police found Wilma. Of course, they don't believe her story. It does sound fantastic, but sometimes we need to get beyond the obvious and think about the fantastic.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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The police found Wilma. Of course, they don't believe her story. It does sound fantastic, but sometimes we need to get beyond the obvious and think about the fantastic.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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thank you so much
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Humm, now this one I could get a handle on. I understood it and it made sense to me. I am not sure what the difference is. I'll have to figure it out.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Humm, now this one I could get a handle on. I understood it and it made sense to me. I am not sure what the difference is. I'll have to figure it out.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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I will be rewriting it soon, thank you
Comment from c_lucas
Stranger things have happened. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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Stranger things have happened. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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thank you my friend, already made changes to this, post it later, thanks
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You're welcome, Grace. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
Yash, yeah, I know the deal about you writers always keep us readers hanging. ( Mmmmm thatsounfs likw me ) Smile.
Of course this is not the end and only heaven knows what going to come out that brain of yours. this is a good write.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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Yash, yeah, I know the deal about you writers always keep us readers hanging. ( Mmmmm thatsounfs likw me ) Smile.
Of course this is not the end and only heaven knows what going to come out that brain of yours. this is a good write.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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haha, thank you my friend
Comment from knowledge
Darn! I was hoping that a handsome ghost stranger would come into the town and they would fall in love. I thought that she had died and gone to her heaven. Your grammar is rough around the edges but with a little polishing it's a seller.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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Darn! I was hoping that a handsome ghost stranger would come into the town and they would fall in love. I thought that she had died and gone to her heaven. Your grammar is rough around the edges but with a little polishing it's a seller.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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I thought about adding more chapter, and probably will soon, so I can keep the readers going, thank you for your help on the other chapter, I changed the orginal.
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
What a sweet little jewel of writing this is. I would love to read more. Aunt emily is such natural tendency oriented character. Very well done.
K
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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What a sweet little jewel of writing this is. I would love to read more. Aunt emily is such natural tendency oriented character. Very well done.
K
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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thank you so much my friend for reading
Comment from El.Marjie
I just read your ghost story about Wilma. The mention of a Lillian, a dance hall girl that had been there confused me. How is she fitting into the story?
I have heard about water in the desert before, in Bible stories of the Children of Israel in the desert. In those instances it was a case of God taking care of His people. In this case, I would wonder if Wilma prayed and asked for help. That would explain the water which is no longer there for others to find. I have heard other non-explainable stories, and just know when I hear them that God can do anything He wants to do whenever He wants to do it. I don't think it's ghosts, I think it's God.
Interesting story, but without a few details I needed, especially about "Lillian."
Sorry to hear about your tumors, and am lifting you to God regarding those. Glad you are finding creativity and life in writing. Best Blessings! Marjie
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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I just read your ghost story about Wilma. The mention of a Lillian, a dance hall girl that had been there confused me. How is she fitting into the story?
I have heard about water in the desert before, in Bible stories of the Children of Israel in the desert. In those instances it was a case of God taking care of His people. In this case, I would wonder if Wilma prayed and asked for help. That would explain the water which is no longer there for others to find. I have heard other non-explainable stories, and just know when I hear them that God can do anything He wants to do whenever He wants to do it. I don't think it's ghosts, I think it's God.
Interesting story, but without a few details I needed, especially about "Lillian."
Sorry to hear about your tumors, and am lifting you to God regarding those. Glad you are finding creativity and life in writing. Best Blessings! Marjie
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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thank you you have given me many ideas.
Comment from adewpearl
Grace, I like the way you leave it up to us to decide what was delirium and what somehow supernaturally happened - something has to explain what good shape she was in and how she knew Lilian's name!! Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2010
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Grace, I like the way you leave it up to us to decide what was delirium and what somehow supernaturally happened - something has to explain what good shape she was in and how she knew Lilian's name!! Brooke
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2010
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ah soon, someday, part two of this book will come, and we will see, thank you for reading
Comment from Sweet Victory
I love it! It's suspenseful and you placed me within the ghost town usa, I also like the eerie feel to the story the uncertainty of the not knowing. Great Job!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2010
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I love it! It's suspenseful and you placed me within the ghost town usa, I also like the eerie feel to the story the uncertainty of the not knowing. Great Job!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2010
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that is so cool, that was my first thought, thank you so somuch
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A pleasure to read such great work.
