The Romeo's
A lifetime of love27 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
Great story, bittersweet humor, and you handled that flashback so that it was easy to bridge.
I liked the way that you handled the conclusion, stimulating and delightful.
These people have great attitudes, and will be together as long as they live.
Great job!
Cheers, irish
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Great story, bittersweet humor, and you handled that flashback so that it was easy to bridge.
I liked the way that you handled the conclusion, stimulating and delightful.
These people have great attitudes, and will be together as long as they live.
Great job!
Cheers, irish
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2010
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Irish... thanks for reading and commenting.. John
Comment from pugdogy
excellent job!!! This story with the romance still glowing between the elderly couple is sweet and then I had to chuckle at the end with her Mr. Romeo remembering of all things that he has one viagra pill left and she makes sure the life insurance is paid up....good job.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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excellent job!!! This story with the romance still glowing between the elderly couple is sweet and then I had to chuckle at the end with her Mr. Romeo remembering of all things that he has one viagra pill left and she makes sure the life insurance is paid up....good job.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thank you Pugdogy for the review... John
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This one is a brief love story about old people who have managed to be in love for decades. It is interesting to know that age is not necessarily a barrier to love. kudos
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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This one is a brief love story about old people who have managed to be in love for decades. It is interesting to know that age is not necessarily a barrier to love. kudos
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you Perp for reading and reviewing... John
Comment from fictionwriter
Well the Romeo's aren't quite what they used to be. I bet he was really a hoot as a young man. I enjoyed this. Great job. One little nit.
All()right, all()right.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Well the Romeo's aren't quite what they used to be. I bet he was really a hoot as a young man. I enjoyed this. Great job. One little nit.
All()right, all()right.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Thank you fictionwriter for reading and commenting, John
Comment from warbler
This story is very entertaining. I enjoyed the ROMEO definition. The story gives us all hope that love can go on for a very long time. Good job!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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This story is very entertaining. I enjoyed the ROMEO definition. The story gives us all hope that love can go on for a very long time. Good job!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thanks warbler for reading.. you only the second person from nearly 25 reviews that commented on ROMEO... thanks John
Comment from adewpearl
He snickered, realizing what he had said - add comma
nudged her husband's shoulder - add apostrophe
Yea, Yea - Yeah, Yeah
come on, Romeo, - add commas for direct address
Come here, Romeo - add comma
What a cute story this is - I love the way the old couple have such warm humor and familiarity between them after over half a century but how he still dreams of the night he proposed. That is just so damned sweet :-) A great Valentine's Day story with a fun, risque ending!! Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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He snickered, realizing what he had said - add comma
nudged her husband's shoulder - add apostrophe
Yea, Yea - Yeah, Yeah
come on, Romeo, - add commas for direct address
Come here, Romeo - add comma
What a cute story this is - I love the way the old couple have such warm humor and familiarity between them after over half a century but how he still dreams of the night he proposed. That is just so damned sweet :-) A great Valentine's Day story with a fun, risque ending!! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thank you Brooke, and I will make the corrections.. John
Comment from patmedium
jmdg... what a write! I am sitting here with a great big silly grin plastered on my face. Thankyou so much for this bit of fun. I wish you good luck with it. Pat.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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jmdg... what a write! I am sitting here with a great big silly grin plastered on my face. Thankyou so much for this bit of fun. I wish you good luck with it. Pat.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thank you Pat for reading and reviewing... John
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John, this one was a good read. I still remember the oops! So it is a piece which has had an effect on me. Pat.
Comment from kellyolsen
A sweet, endearing depiction of a believable relationship that has endured the test of time. Very nice story and the way it was delivered was smooth and easy to read. The humor was there, as well as all the other elements necessary to make this a good contest entry. I really liked it. Good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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A sweet, endearing depiction of a believable relationship that has endured the test of time. Very nice story and the way it was delivered was smooth and easy to read. The humor was there, as well as all the other elements necessary to make this a good contest entry. I really liked it. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thanks Kelly... I appreciate you reading my work and commenting positively... John
Comment from Border Reiver
Here are some typos I've spotted.
"Alec, wake up." Jen nudged her husband(?)s shoulder.
Valentine(?)s Day
"Allright, allright. Can you push my walker closer?" (Can be written all right or alright, but not allright).
Also your title should be "The Romeos", no possessive.
I didn't really enjoy this story, I feel that it doesn't have a clear beginning, middle and end. It's as if the reader is left high and dry.
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Here are some typos I've spotted.
"Alec, wake up." Jen nudged her husband(?)s shoulder.
Valentine(?)s Day
"Allright, allright. Can you push my walker closer?" (Can be written all right or alright, but not allright).
Also your title should be "The Romeos", no possessive.
I didn't really enjoy this story, I feel that it doesn't have a clear beginning, middle and end. It's as if the reader is left high and dry.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2010
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Border... thanks for taking the time to read my story and for those constructive comments. Unfortunately you do not share the same views as the other 25 +/- commentaries. Can you please be more specific on the "unclear" beginning, middle and end of my story as I am a bit, actually more then a bit puzzled by the comment. I would appreciate your input so that I may be able to learn from your experience as a writer.... thank you again, John
Comment from eliz100
This piece is very funny. I enjoyed reading it. I like the surprise twist in the middle. It is well-written and I do not see room for improvement.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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This piece is very funny. I enjoyed reading it. I like the surprise twist in the middle. It is well-written and I do not see room for improvement.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thank you eliz100 for reading and the positive comments, John
