Matilda
Without love there's nothing27 total reviews
Comment from bkrighter
I have to admit that Matilda's story does not interest me, but I think you have written it well. The dialog felt pretty natural, something that is hard to accomplish. Keep on writing, for yourself and for your readers.
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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I have to admit that Matilda's story does not interest me, but I think you have written it well. The dialog felt pretty natural, something that is hard to accomplish. Keep on writing, for yourself and for your readers.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2010
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Thank you Steve, there's a book for everybody out there , that's what they say...
Adina
Comment from Traviata
i wish i had 6 stars !exceptional writing, intense and thought provoking ...
very well developed psychological portraial of love and doubt and jubilation...
thanks for a wonderful read.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2010
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i wish i had 6 stars !exceptional writing, intense and thought provoking ...
very well developed psychological portraial of love and doubt and jubilation...
thanks for a wonderful read.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2010
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thanks
Comment from sigambri
Immaculate writing !
Full of awesome descriptive passages, witty inner dialog,
philosophy , math ...Wonderful !
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2010
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Immaculate writing !
Full of awesome descriptive passages, witty inner dialog,
philosophy , math ...Wonderful !
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 30-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2010
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thank you
Comment from LadyNyx
Wow, what a story. It really speaks about how someone's influence can always be felt no matter how many years go by. Using a dream to start off the whole idea was a fantastic way to open it. You did a very good job that made this feel real and believable. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Wow, what a story. It really speaks about how someone's influence can always be felt no matter how many years go by. Using a dream to start off the whole idea was a fantastic way to open it. You did a very good job that made this feel real and believable. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you so much for your generous review, I am touched
adina
Comment from amada
Reading this powerful story I came to the realization that I have my own Saul in my life. Very much the sort of man you describe. WoW! What a discovery.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Reading this powerful story I came to the realization that I have my own Saul in my life. Very much the sort of man you describe. WoW! What a discovery.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you , I appreciate you reading it and commenting, sometimes life imitates fiction and the other way around
Comment from hemase
Interesting piece here. You have captured one person grappling with their thoughts well. I'm sure their are times we all go back over the things we have done in the past- and the people- and look at what shaped us. Good work.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Interesting piece here. You have captured one person grappling with their thoughts well. I'm sure their are times we all go back over the things we have done in the past- and the people- and look at what shaped us. Good work.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you , I appreciate you reading it and commenting
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very good first chapter. I wonder how many women have a 'Saul' in their lives. This was so interesting I forgot to look for mechanical errors, sorry.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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This is a very good first chapter. I wonder how many women have a 'Saul' in their lives. This was so interesting I forgot to look for mechanical errors, sorry.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you Barbara.
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting words to read and I am thinking that Matilda is immature in a way and has a lot to learn in life.
I felt Matilda seemed confused when seeing Saul naked on the sofa.
I feel one has to be careful in introducing to many characters at one.
I felt it was a good read.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Very interesting words to read and I am thinking that Matilda is immature in a way and has a lot to learn in life.
I felt Matilda seemed confused when seeing Saul naked on the sofa.
I feel one has to be careful in introducing to many characters at one.
I felt it was a good read.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you honeytree
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I am glad you liked the review.
Honeytree
Comment from Thomas Raine
A very interesting read, and I could feel Matilda's uncomfortableness as she sat chatting with Saul. Very nice job on allowing the reader to really get into her head.
- TR
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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A very interesting read, and I could feel Matilda's uncomfortableness as she sat chatting with Saul. Very nice job on allowing the reader to really get into her head.
- TR
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thanks TR, I appreciate your comment
Comment from FanDan
Interesting foray into the mind of this woman, with great detail and descriptive emotion. "Her reply still echoed as an acoustic memory kept hidden in the secret chambers of her quirky mind."
Very nice, indeed.
No problems with SPaGs or flow. Very entertaining read. Nice stuff!
Dan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Interesting foray into the mind of this woman, with great detail and descriptive emotion. "Her reply still echoed as an acoustic memory kept hidden in the secret chambers of her quirky mind."
Very nice, indeed.
No problems with SPaGs or flow. Very entertaining read. Nice stuff!
Dan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you Dan :)
