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The Ice Princess

Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Setting the Rules"
Love, Hate, Conflicts and Fear

35 total reviews 
Comment from Rain Chapman
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Alright, I'm hooked. I went to the prologue and started reading from there. Reilly is my favorite kind of lead character, tough on the outside, soft on the inside. I am off to read more!
Lorraine :)

Best of luck to you, the letter sounded very professional to me.

Lorraine :)

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2009

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    Lorraine

    Wow...I am flattered that you are reading it all at the same time. Thanks so much Carol
Comment from LiveLoveDie
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Very, very good story.

Yes, let her have the last laugh. It's the best part.

I thought it was worded nicely. There weren't any errors that I could see, and the paragraphs seemed to be formed properly.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 12-Oct-2009
    LiveLoveDie

    Thanks for reading and enjoying.
    Appreciate the comments. Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Great job reinventing the bad boy. I liked it and can't wait to read more. You have a great hook here with good descriptions. You used dialogue and emotion to your advantage.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
    Barbara

    I am so glad that you decided to read my story. I have missed your thoughts and suggestions. Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Carol...I was glad I found the second chapter and have time to read it and write a review. The picture of the man is from the television program..."Lost" I love that show and this guy is as handsome as the character in your story. He is proving to be a challenge for Reilly....wonder why he is trouble? You aren't going to tell me are you? (grin) Well done....blessings....chey

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
    Chey

    No mama...But thank you for telling me who the guy was...I just thought when I saw the picture that he was sexy.Thank you for reading this chaper. I have posted through Chapter 8 and 9 should be the ending. Thank you again. Carol
Comment from BJean
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This popped up so I popped back in to follow your
story. Again I saw no mistakes in the writing.
It is coming along very well. Good job. Jean

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
    Jean

    Thanks again...If you look when you leave your review you should find 8 chapters. Thanks again...Carol
Comment from RebelRose
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I enjoyed this chapter. The photo is yummy ... eye candy. If he can't melt the ice princess, no one can. I look forward to reading the flashback.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 11-Oct-2009
    Rebelrose

    I'm right there with you!!! Thanks for the encouragement and the thought words. Carol
Comment from MsRefusenik
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(always out of sixes when I need one) Held my interest for sure from first sentence to last. Rather like a duel the way you have them interact, but you know she will win. Excellent writing. Great dialogue, characters and I would guess plot.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2009
    MsRefusenik

    Thanks for the great review. I hope you will continue reading and let me know if there is anything that seems unrealistic. Your kind words are worth more than a 6 to me. Thank again. Carol
Comment from redglasses
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I'm writing as I'm reading. I'm not liking the phrase "agonizing her with his sheer male virility." It's trying too hard. Suggestion: "The high-powered criminal lawyer was back in control, barely conquering the persona of the girl who gotten her heart broken by this guy. " Or something to that effect that reinforces the idea that she's not immune to her feelings for him.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2009
    I didn't was tied to it either but couldn't come up with anything else. I'll work on your suggestion.

    Thanks! Carol
reply by redglasses on 10-Oct-2009
    Let me know if this is the kind of critique you're looking for.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2009
    Yes story line and anything that doesn't seem realistic I appreciate it! Carol
Comment from anabellapongasi
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Another interesting character is introduced and pictured here in this chapter. His gestures and his speech tell much about him. I sense the plot is about to start building up and my interest is also building up...Great writing! Next chapter please!

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2009
    Anabella

    I am so happy that you are enjoying this story. Your comments make me smile. Thanks again Carol
Comment from BPL76
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I will have to read more so i know what he is charged with
It flows well
The dialog does not need any work
I am excited to read more
Good Job
BPL

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2009

reply by the author on 10-Oct-2009
    BPL

    I am so glad that you have decided to read on...I need all the input I can get. Thanks, Carol