CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Freeflyer
Each word you have used to describe jealousy is perfect.
WANT
covet
blind desire
envy erodes and
corrodes cardinal needs
by seizing and choking truth
"wanton while remaining empty"
and the last line sums up the result of this feeling. Great work. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
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Each word you have used to describe jealousy is perfect.
WANT
covet
blind desire
envy erodes and
corrodes cardinal needs
by seizing and choking truth
"wanton while remaining empty"
and the last line sums up the result of this feeling. Great work. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This might be short
on words but they
say it all, cleverly
presented as a Clarity
poem.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
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This might be short
on words but they
say it all, cleverly
presented as a Clarity
poem.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is a powerful poem. Seems too much to say in so few words. But you managed it brilliantly. "Wanton while remaining empty." Where do you get such wisdom? How old are you, 90? You did quie a job on this.
Delora
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This is a powerful poem. Seems too much to say in so few words. But you managed it brilliantly. "Wanton while remaining empty." Where do you get such wisdom? How old are you, 90? You did quie a job on this.
Delora
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
Comment from honeytree
Maybe jealously but I feel hurt here and the right one will turn up one day. I feel their are many that want to be loved and they will love in return. The world is a wanting place at the moment. The rich will hang onto their money I guess and the poor will still be poor.
We live in a very ungiving world and we must change to help others.
Honeytree.
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Maybe jealously but I feel hurt here and the right one will turn up one day. I feel their are many that want to be loved and they will love in return. The world is a wanting place at the moment. The rich will hang onto their money I guess and the poor will still be poor.
We live in a very ungiving world and we must change to help others.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
Yeah, there's a good reason "do not covet" is one of the Ten Commandments!
This is a very well written poem, deserving of that ribbon! Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
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Yeah, there's a good reason "do not covet" is one of the Ten Commandments!
This is a very well written poem, deserving of that ribbon! Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nicely written poem that describes jealously without actually using the word.
"envy erodes and corrodes cardinal needs by seizing and choking truth" That seems to sum it up well.
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This is a nicely written poem that describes jealously without actually using the word.
"envy erodes and corrodes cardinal needs by seizing and choking truth" That seems to sum it up well.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from bard owl
You have very poetically described jealousy. It just feeds on itself until it becomes a monster in a mortal soul. Excellent imagery with very few words! Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
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You have very poetically described jealousy. It just feeds on itself until it becomes a monster in a mortal soul. Excellent imagery with very few words! Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Rottie
WANT
covet
blind desire
Those say it all. A very well written piece, giving a touch of jealous feel. The picture doesn't do it for me, but the poem is very good.
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WANT
covet
blind desire
Those say it all. A very well written piece, giving a touch of jealous feel. The picture doesn't do it for me, but the poem is very good.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Wendyanne
Hmm what a superb way to describe jealousy 60skid. I found your imagery very interesting, thought-provoking and effective. Good luck
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Hmm what a superb way to describe jealousy 60skid. I found your imagery very interesting, thought-provoking and effective. Good luck
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is nicely done. The subject of jealousy was well elucidated in the short poem. It appears you are using jealousy and envy interchangeably. I don't really know whether it should be so. Well done
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This is nicely done. The subject of jealousy was well elucidated in the short poem. It appears you are using jealousy and envy interchangeably. I don't really know whether it should be so. Well done
Comment Written 01-Apr-2009