CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from kiwigirl
I like the repetition of sounds to keep the quick pace: Passion pursues purpose. And the rhyme: tears/years, pain/gain, etc. This tells of life's ups/downs/ins/outs and what inspires or causes what in life. Good job.
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I like the repetition of sounds to keep the quick pace: Passion pursues purpose. And the rhyme: tears/years, pain/gain, etc. This tells of life's ups/downs/ins/outs and what inspires or causes what in life. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2009
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid
A very fast pace thoughts, with very clear lines of how time can fly .
Very interesting to read you traveling thoughts.
Gert
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Hello Sixteezkid
A very fast pace thoughts, with very clear lines of how time can fly .
Very interesting to read you traveling thoughts.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Apr-2009
Comment from Psychonaut X
I found this poem to be technically flawless but a little bit bland and artistically generic. I couldn't feel the emotion. None of the imagery stuck with me. However, I did like these lines:
Preserve past
Preserve future
and
Count the years
Count the tears
Good luck in the contest.
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I found this poem to be technically flawless but a little bit bland and artistically generic. I couldn't feel the emotion. None of the imagery stuck with me. However, I did like these lines:
Preserve past
Preserve future
and
Count the years
Count the tears
Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2009
Comment from cherry_rose
This was indeed a very quick read full of very quick glimpses of time and its various aspects. I truly liked the flow of your poem from one idea to the next. It was very smooth.
cherry_
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This was indeed a very quick read full of very quick glimpses of time and its various aspects. I truly liked the flow of your poem from one idea to the next. It was very smooth.
cherry_
Comment Written 17-Apr-2009
Comment from Counting Carrots
Wow. A very interesting kind of poetry. I'm not sure it's one I could get used to though! Though it seems to me that you've done a good job with it!
Good luck in the contest
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Wow. A very interesting kind of poetry. I'm not sure it's one I could get used to though! Though it seems to me that you've done a good job with it!
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from skye
Different, fast-paced, telling quite a story in these sharp lines.
I like the idea of a quick, long poem... is there such a thing?
LOL
Your words take us on the journey... with ease.
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Different, fast-paced, telling quite a story in these sharp lines.
I like the idea of a quick, long poem... is there such a thing?
LOL
Your words take us on the journey... with ease.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from ~Dovey
Great job on your first Blitz poem. I'm working up the courage to try one of my own! lol Looks a bit intimidating. I think you managed to follow all of the rules. Good luck in the contest! :)
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Great job on your first Blitz poem. I'm working up the courage to try one of my own! lol Looks a bit intimidating. I think you managed to follow all of the rules. Good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from Hitcher
Sounds like way too much to grasp for me, put it's quite a impressive undertaking to say the least, I THINK you have produced a great Blitz poem, well done, crazy lady[that's just for attempting it!] ha ha
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Sounds like way too much to grasp for me, put it's quite a impressive undertaking to say the least, I THINK you have produced a great Blitz poem, well done, crazy lady[that's just for attempting it!] ha ha
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
This is the first Blitz I've read and I found your notes quite helpful. The format seems to invoke a stream of consciousness that is very effective. My favorite line was "Future soon yesterday". Just like the Fibonacci that you introduced me to, it's an appealing vehicle and one that worked well in your hands.
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This is the first Blitz I've read and I found your notes quite helpful. The format seems to invoke a stream of consciousness that is very effective. My favorite line was "Future soon yesterday". Just like the Fibonacci that you introduced me to, it's an appealing vehicle and one that worked well in your hands.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
Wow! That's awesome. We used to play a game like that when we were kids. It looks like fun but more like work to me. It's interesting and mind exercizing. I hope you had fun writing it. I had fun reading it.
Delora
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Wow! That's awesome. We used to play a game like that when we were kids. It looks like fun but more like work to me. It's interesting and mind exercizing. I hope you had fun writing it. I had fun reading it.
Delora
Comment Written 30-Mar-2009