CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from bard owl
I love to hear trains rumble by. There is something so comfortingly archaic about them - as if they are emerging from another lifetime. I can remember as a child waving to the engineer as the train passed by my friends and I as we played nearby. Excellent imagery in this one, Sue. I can see why you were the winner here. Blessings, Linda
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I love to hear trains rumble by. There is something so comfortingly archaic about them - as if they are emerging from another lifetime. I can remember as a child waving to the engineer as the train passed by my friends and I as we played nearby. Excellent imagery in this one, Sue. I can see why you were the winner here. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 31-Mar-2009
Comment from rama devi
Excellent presentation, Sue. This is highly effective and I love how it tangentially deals with the difficult 'crossing" Great extended metaphor combined with artwork and creating a good synergy as a whole.
Bravo. No nits. Best of luck.
Love, rd
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Excellent presentation, Sue. This is highly effective and I love how it tangentially deals with the difficult 'crossing" Great extended metaphor combined with artwork and creating a good synergy as a whole.
Bravo. No nits. Best of luck.
Love, rd
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from geetika sethi
I LOVE THIS KID
IT SAYS SO MUCH IN SO LITTLE AND THE ART WORK GOES PERFECTLY WELL.WHAT A WAY TO DECRIBE GETTING SINGLE..A PATH..A TRAIN TRACK..TWO SIDES ..ONE ON ONE AND THE OTHER THE OTHER SIDE..NO CAN PATCH THEM AND ITS A LONG LONG ROUTE..
THANKS FOR SHARING SUCH AND AWAKENING THE SENSES
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I LOVE THIS KID
IT SAYS SO MUCH IN SO LITTLE AND THE ART WORK GOES PERFECTLY WELL.WHAT A WAY TO DECRIBE GETTING SINGLE..A PATH..A TRAIN TRACK..TWO SIDES ..ONE ON ONE AND THE OTHER THE OTHER SIDE..NO CAN PATCH THEM AND ITS A LONG LONG ROUTE..
THANKS FOR SHARING SUCH AND AWAKENING THE SENSES
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from Karen B.
I love this, its message of comfort and of "life moves on" comes through loud and clear. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Karen
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I love this, its message of comfort and of "life moves on" comes through loud and clear. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest. Karen
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from Diane Marie
Hi Sue
This is a great little poem. It's amazing how one moment can turn into a lovely poem. The artwork compliments the poem so well!
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Hi Sue
This is a great little poem. It's amazing how one moment can turn into a lovely poem. The artwork compliments the poem so well!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from fayesh
A very nice poem filled with imagery that works on two levels - literal and metaphorical. Interesting that you used a train as a metaphor for an episode of life that sees an end - the caboose.
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A very nice poem filled with imagery that works on two levels - literal and metaphorical. Interesting that you used a train as a metaphor for an episode of life that sees an end - the caboose.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from Counting Carrots
Love it love it love it love it love it! It was really great. The alliteration really gives the feeling of standing by that train track, keeping the rhythm and the flow nicely, despite the fact that the syllables in this kind of poem are quite awkward.
This was really great.
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Love it love it love it love it love it! It was really great. The alliteration really gives the feeling of standing by that train track, keeping the rhythm and the flow nicely, despite the fact that the syllables in this kind of poem are quite awkward.
This was really great.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Best of luck to you in the contest my friend. I cast my vote for this little piece of your writing. I could never write anything like this Fibonacci Poem format.
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Best of luck to you in the contest my friend. I cast my vote for this little piece of your writing. I could never write anything like this Fibonacci Poem format.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
"when you both know it's over" what a great way of writing it. I don't care about Fibonacci...I just like it. Well done.
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"when you both know it's over" what a great way of writing it. I don't care about Fibonacci...I just like it. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from Jnetgame
I like this poem about a train very much. You have followed all the requirements and it flows nicely. Good luck in the contest.
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I like this poem about a train very much. You have followed all the requirements and it flows nicely. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009