CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Bearing Witness"A collection of poetry
38 total reviews
Comment from FredCollingwood
What a great opening:
Pulling back the drapes of denial
gives glimpses of familiar dread
You really have a talent, sixties!
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What a great opening:
Pulling back the drapes of denial
gives glimpses of familiar dread
You really have a talent, sixties!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2009
Comment from moosegal
I really like how the drape seems to be this heavy thing that the narrator acknowledges and controls, yet the looking is very light, only glimpsing and peeking. This piece very much summarized the "peek, ouch, done with THAT thank you very much" ritual we go through, but in a much more eloquent way. Excellent job!
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I really like how the drape seems to be this heavy thing that the narrator acknowledges and controls, yet the looking is very light, only glimpsing and peeking. This piece very much summarized the "peek, ouch, done with THAT thank you very much" ritual we go through, but in a much more eloquent way. Excellent job!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Minglement
Excellent little poem on a great subject. I think we have to do this from time to time, to get our bearings. Great job. Should be a contest entry, friend.
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Excellent little poem on a great subject. I think we have to do this from time to time, to get our bearings. Great job. Should be a contest entry, friend.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from sharon fallis
It's short, but well thought out and written. It says alot in such a very short verse. You have used good words and excellent usage. Wonderful visuals and imagery. Thanks! Sharon
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It's short, but well thought out and written. It says alot in such a very short verse. You have used good words and excellent usage. Wonderful visuals and imagery. Thanks! Sharon
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from jmyron
A fitting companion to the previous poem that I reviewed. A well done piece, brim full of philosophy and hope. Don't let the hope die.
John
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A fitting companion to the previous poem that I reviewed. A well done piece, brim full of philosophy and hope. Don't let the hope die.
John
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Aleksandramarie
absolutely lovely imagery in this piece.
a simple look into a life...,bared then secured.
Don't we all do this in one way or another?
Very tightly written, I wouldn't alter a thing,thanks, msp
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absolutely lovely imagery in this piece.
a simple look into a life...,bared then secured.
Don't we all do this in one way or another?
Very tightly written, I wouldn't alter a thing,thanks, msp
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
This piece was very witty. You are evasive just enough to make me read it twice, and then there it was. We can chose not to believe something, but do we really know and simply say because of the pain it will cause to actually "give it life" so to speak. Nicely done
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This piece was very witty. You are evasive just enough to make me read it twice, and then there it was. We can chose not to believe something, but do we really know and simply say because of the pain it will cause to actually "give it life" so to speak. Nicely done
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
Comment from jdrhye
Hope very well you have executed your message. Just a peek, a glimpse to keep one in check and then close again. Read many times and each time became more profound! It almost like each time read the drapes were opened a little more! Thank you for sharing!
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Hope very well you have executed your message. Just a peek, a glimpse to keep one in check and then close again. Read many times and each time became more profound! It almost like each time read the drapes were opened a little more! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
Comment from m_plum
This is excellent. So well written, it gives a clear message in such a short piece. So true to life, something we all feel at least once in our lives. Most of us, more often. Well done!
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This is excellent. So well written, it gives a clear message in such a short piece. So true to life, something we all feel at least once in our lives. Most of us, more often. Well done!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009
Comment from Arkine
Sounds like this is 'trying to keep it real'. I agree, sometimes we need to stop and review ourselves. Are we on the right path? Are we doing something that actually gives us a sense of fullfillment? Are we struggling but know it's worth it in the end?
I liked this poem. It's very individualized.
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Sounds like this is 'trying to keep it real'. I agree, sometimes we need to stop and review ourselves. Are we on the right path? Are we doing something that actually gives us a sense of fullfillment? Are we struggling but know it's worth it in the end?
I liked this poem. It's very individualized.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2009