CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Divided, We Fell"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Poetic Friend
Sue, this poem is thought-provoking and resonated with me. In fact, I read it three times.
I love the rhyme scheme, word choice, imagery and metaphor usage.
It was my pleasure indulging in your essence of your words.
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Sue, this poem is thought-provoking and resonated with me. In fact, I read it three times.
I love the rhyme scheme, word choice, imagery and metaphor usage.
It was my pleasure indulging in your essence of your words.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
Comment from Minglement
Wish I had a six to award this deep and poignant poem that tells the story of so many lives. Very nice rhythm and rhyme, perfect flow. Great job.
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Wish I had a six to award this deep and poignant poem that tells the story of so many lives. Very nice rhythm and rhyme, perfect flow. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
If you are new at writing , it certainly does not show here. The only suggestion I would dare give is to shorten the longer lines some. Just my personal feel on it, It takes nothing away from the work.
Very well done!
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If you are new at writing , it certainly does not show here. The only suggestion I would dare give is to shorten the longer lines some. Just my personal feel on it, It takes nothing away from the work.
Very well done!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a heartbreaking little poem, Sue. You wrote it beautifully, with escellent meter. I especially enjoyed your rhyme scheme. Great work.
Sally
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This is a heartbreaking little poem, Sue. You wrote it beautifully, with escellent meter. I especially enjoyed your rhyme scheme. Great work.
Sally
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Rain Chapman
I liked how your work followed through the relationship and I thought your rhyme pattern was neat, it seemed to bring the poem even more together as a whole. Great work!
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I liked how your work followed through the relationship and I thought your rhyme pattern was neat, it seemed to bring the poem even more together as a whole. Great work!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from KelinaJ
Interesting image selection. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A sad commentary. The shattered emotions came through well. Nice job.
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Interesting image selection. Good presentation and color scheme. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A sad commentary. The shattered emotions came through well. Nice job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - What a sad poem of love lost and rejection. I enjoyed the memories of the past and the ongoing conflict. Well written as always. Charlie
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Sue - What a sad poem of love lost and rejection. I enjoyed the memories of the past and the ongoing conflict. Well written as always. Charlie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
So sad and so true. It makes it hard to read knowing that this happens to so many families. It's a wonder anybody trusts anybody enough to start a life and a family together. I liked the form, made it easy to read with perfect pauses. Great job, Sue as usual.
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So sad and so true. It makes it hard to read knowing that this happens to so many families. It's a wonder anybody trusts anybody enough to start a life and a family together. I liked the form, made it easy to read with perfect pauses. Great job, Sue as usual.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from womanwriter
So true of so many families that it almost hurts to see it in print - I can hardly imagine what it would be like in person -especially with six(?) kids.
Kind of made me think of John & Kate +8 LOL
Great writing
warm regards,
womanwriter
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So true of so many families that it almost hurts to see it in print - I can hardly imagine what it would be like in person -especially with six(?) kids.
Kind of made me think of John & Kate +8 LOL
Great writing
warm regards,
womanwriter
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Nightwind1
This was a very sad but all too true poem. Pride will destroy even the strongest foundation or bond. I enjoyed the poem and the rhythem was good.
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This was a very sad but all too true poem. Pride will destroy even the strongest foundation or bond. I enjoyed the poem and the rhythem was good.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009