CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Rain Chapman
Excellent rhyme and rhythm, my favorite lines are the last two ~ So foreign, these dualities / The twain cannot agree ~ These are the lines that resonate with me the most. Great work!
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Excellent rhyme and rhythm, my favorite lines are the last two ~ So foreign, these dualities / The twain cannot agree ~ These are the lines that resonate with me the most. Great work!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh boy, I recognize myself in these lines! You have written beautifully (as always), I can't find anything to pick at and criticize. Tell you what though, getting old don't half suck eh?
All the best.
kat
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Oh boy, I recognize myself in these lines! You have written beautifully (as always), I can't find anything to pick at and criticize. Tell you what though, getting old don't half suck eh?
All the best.
kat
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
Sue, this is a beautifully written poem about life's challenges and our dealing with them We all have had our doubts about different times in our lives. Your poem flows beautifully and the rhyming is very well done. Nice read.
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Sue, this is a beautifully written poem about life's challenges and our dealing with them We all have had our doubts about different times in our lives. Your poem flows beautifully and the rhyming is very well done. Nice read.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem about aging. There comes a time in evryone's life where they can't do what they use to do. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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A very well written poem about aging. There comes a time in evryone's life where they can't do what they use to do. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is a wonderfful picture of the changes humans go through. But you wrote it so eloquently. Your words are lovely and the rhyme is excellent. It draws the reader into the question and keep him hanging on till the end. I love this poem.
Delora
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This is a wonderfful picture of the changes humans go through. But you wrote it so eloquently. Your words are lovely and the rhyme is excellent. It draws the reader into the question and keep him hanging on till the end. I love this poem.
Delora
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from brooklynauthor
Damn... this is deep...
I've run the course and gave my all
From birth to giving birth
Been blessed with life's abundancies
And lived its cold, stark dearth (I like this stanza the best. You capture the moment one realizes that all we have is fleeting and may be gone in an instant. Sometimes it seems that things we cherish were never there or were less than we thought at the time.)
Great job.
Jerry
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Damn... this is deep...
I've run the course and gave my all
From birth to giving birth
Been blessed with life's abundancies
And lived its cold, stark dearth (I like this stanza the best. You capture the moment one realizes that all we have is fleeting and may be gone in an instant. Sometimes it seems that things we cherish were never there or were less than we thought at the time.)
Great job.
Jerry
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2009
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Jerry, thanks for your very close read. So glad you liked it! And thank you for your awesome review! With warm regards, Sue
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
If this is biographical, remember "this too shall pass". Well written; astute capture of some of the puzzling chapters of life. no corrections.
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If this is biographical, remember "this too shall pass". Well written; astute capture of some of the puzzling chapters of life. no corrections.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from bard owl
I think self-doubt is one of the great thieves of talent and happiness. And it seems, as you so poetically say, with growing older, we begin to regret the loss of some of our former confidence. This is flawlessly executed and the subject one that I can readily identify with. Excellent writing, as usual. Blessings to you, Linda
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I think self-doubt is one of the great thieves of talent and happiness. And it seems, as you so poetically say, with growing older, we begin to regret the loss of some of our former confidence. This is flawlessly executed and the subject one that I can readily identify with. Excellent writing, as usual. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from WRITER1
A very good piece, self doubt hits us all at one time or another. I know because I really had doubts being on this site. I am amazed at how people have responded to me.
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A very good piece, self doubt hits us all at one time or another. I know because I really had doubts being on this site. I am amazed at how people have responded to me.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Roisin
Hey Sue! I came across this by accident. I didn't get a PM about it. I wonder why? This is a lovely poem with great rhymes and meter sustained throughout. I can feel your strength shining through this poem. You're being challenged in your life but always seem to come back out on top. I hope you're well at the moment.
Hugs
Roisin x
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Hey Sue! I came across this by accident. I didn't get a PM about it. I wonder why? This is a lovely poem with great rhymes and meter sustained throughout. I can feel your strength shining through this poem. You're being challenged in your life but always seem to come back out on top. I hope you're well at the moment.
Hugs
Roisin x
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009