CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Gramma Kathy
I'm so glad you wrote this poem. The beatitudes have been on my mind the last several days. Did you read my mind? ;)
Your rhythm and rhyme work well together, and the artwork is perfect. I thought you have a couple commas too many. For example:
"The earth was theirs, to own" I don't think the comma is necessary.
But that is a very minor nit, and your poem is wonderful. Thanks for sharing it!
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I'm so glad you wrote this poem. The beatitudes have been on my mind the last several days. Did you read my mind? ;)
Your rhythm and rhyme work well together, and the artwork is perfect. I thought you have a couple commas too many. For example:
"The earth was theirs, to own" I don't think the comma is necessary.
But that is a very minor nit, and your poem is wonderful. Thanks for sharing it!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from Cedar
You certainly picked a wonderful subject to write about for this contest, your poem is beautiful. The picture you have chosen sure does the job. Good luck.
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You certainly picked a wonderful subject to write about for this contest, your poem is beautiful. The picture you have chosen sure does the job. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from QuietMtnSunrise
Woohoo! Cheers to you. I like your 3rd stanza in particular, but the whole poem flows really well and I'm sure it will do well in the contest. I hope lots of people read it.
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Woohoo! Cheers to you. I like your 3rd stanza in particular, but the whole poem flows really well and I'm sure it will do well in the contest. I hope lots of people read it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from yachtworknz
Sixteezkit-Great post. I think it came down to this bit-
The lowest of them all, the meek
The earth was theirs, to own
And anyone who's merciful
No longer would bemoan.
Cheers
Scott
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Sixteezkit-Great post. I think it came down to this bit-
The lowest of them all, the meek
The earth was theirs, to own
And anyone who's merciful
No longer would bemoan.
Cheers
Scott
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
Above the Galilee = you do not need the article in this line
You have a terrific poem here. Other than what is above I find nothing that needs to be overhauled or anything. Good luck in the contest.
Happy writing
michelle
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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Above the Galilee = you do not need the article in this line
You have a terrific poem here. Other than what is above I find nothing that needs to be overhauled or anything. Good luck in the contest.
Happy writing
michelle
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2009
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The "THE" is in reference above the Sea of Galiee, so I don't mind it. I'm going to start calling you the "preposition, article Nazi" LOL!!! But, you are so right. I try trimming them as much as possible and MOST appreciate you keeping me in check! Thanks for all your honest reviews and this one. With regards, Sue
Comment from AndStuff
That is a really cool testament to the faith. Very edifying for those already in the faith. You did a really good job. You've got some really neat poetry!
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That is a really cool testament to the faith. Very edifying for those already in the faith. You did a really good job. You've got some really neat poetry!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from sharon fallis
Nice writing, but I don't agree with the context. Each to his own. Good formatting and nice word choices. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
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Nice writing, but I don't agree with the context. Each to his own. Good formatting and nice word choices. Thanks for sharing. Sharon
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from MercyWrites
Those are such true words you have spoken in your poem. There is no doubt that history was made that day, but more important it brought hope to many. My imagination is never big enough when I imagine that day. Beautiful poem. God bless.
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Those are such true words you have spoken in your poem. There is no doubt that history was made that day, but more important it brought hope to many. My imagination is never big enough when I imagine that day. Beautiful poem. God bless.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
I love faith poems :-) This is well done in title, presentation and content; strong contest entry in my opinion. Best wishes in the voting booth!
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I love faith poems :-) This is well done in title, presentation and content; strong contest entry in my opinion. Best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Beautifully stated in your poem and remarks! "Seek ye first the Kingdom of God"-and everything we hope for that is good and life building will be added....loved your work!
Dave
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Beautifully stated in your poem and remarks! "Seek ye first the Kingdom of God"-and everything we hope for that is good and life building will be added....loved your work!
Dave
Comment Written 25-Feb-2009