CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "An Unexpected Smile"A collection of poetry
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Comment from crochetbluedog
This is a beautiful poem that expresses the emotions of being hurt and closing your heart 'forever' until that one person comes along and makes you forget everything. The words are beautifully written, creating passion and discovery. Well done.
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This is a beautiful poem that expresses the emotions of being hurt and closing your heart 'forever' until that one person comes along and makes you forget everything. The words are beautifully written, creating passion and discovery. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2009
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
It's so difficult to say yes again. Lovely sonnet you have penned here. So many good ones already entered. Those inverted sentence, like your first line, can sometimes be worked around
In exile was my joy before your smile
In exile, my lost joy, before your smile
Very nicely penned.
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It's so difficult to say yes again. Lovely sonnet you have penned here. So many good ones already entered. Those inverted sentence, like your first line, can sometimes be worked around
In exile was my joy before your smile
In exile, my lost joy, before your smile
Very nicely penned.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2009
Comment from phild
The first two lines are great and pulled me right in. And, I enjoyed the rest of it. Very descriptive and your words had a smooth flow guiding the reader along. Great job.
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The first two lines are great and pulled me right in. And, I enjoyed the rest of it. Very descriptive and your words had a smooth flow guiding the reader along. Great job.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a lovely sonnet, Sue. The traditional sonnet is my favorite form of poetry when it is well done, as this one is. I enjoyed it very much.
Sally
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This is a lovely sonnet, Sue. The traditional sonnet is my favorite form of poetry when it is well done, as this one is. I enjoyed it very much.
Sally
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
Ah you make me want to write a sonnet. It's a great form, isn't it? You presented this with true class and I have noticed no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
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Ah you make me want to write a sonnet. It's a great form, isn't it? You presented this with true class and I have noticed no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Deejharrington
I should have saved a "6" for this. Within the structure of the sonnet, you worked magic. The picture works beautifully with the old fashion feel of the poem. You blend in the fear of opening one's heart to love once again. How true. We all can only hope we get a second or (third) chance at love.
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I should have saved a "6" for this. Within the structure of the sonnet, you worked magic. The picture works beautifully with the old fashion feel of the poem. You blend in the fear of opening one's heart to love once again. How true. We all can only hope we get a second or (third) chance at love.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Diane Marie
A lovely poem. I enjoyed it so much. You do have talent! For a minute I thought I was reading Shakespear...well done!
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A lovely poem. I enjoyed it so much. You do have talent! For a minute I thought I was reading Shakespear...well done!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Karen B.
Ah, the joys of love. You've penned a beautiful and romantic poem here, filled with warmth. A very enjoyable read. Good luck with it! Karen
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Ah, the joys of love. You've penned a beautiful and romantic poem here, filled with warmth. A very enjoyable read. Good luck with it! Karen
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Aussie
Well presented, loved the artwork. A rather formal Sonnet. I sort of liked it; I just found somehow (for me) it had no warmth behind it. But then the words are formal are they not? Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Well presented, loved the artwork. A rather formal Sonnet. I sort of liked it; I just found somehow (for me) it had no warmth behind it. But then the words are formal are they not? Well done.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2009
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Aussie, I agree that the more formal words aren't as romantic (to us in the 21st century, that is - ha!), but I also didn't want it to be a mushy one anyway. All about the 'smile'. Thanks for your honest comments and your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Sixteezkid,
Your wording is beautifully done, I entered this contest too, but have yet to write a poem, now I'm wondering if I made a wise choice. This really has a lovely Shakespearean touch. I know that's what the contest requires, but I wanted you to know you accomplished that goal with flying colors. Loved every word!
Good Luck in the Contest
Helvi :o)
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Hi Sixteezkid,
Your wording is beautifully done, I entered this contest too, but have yet to write a poem, now I'm wondering if I made a wise choice. This really has a lovely Shakespearean touch. I know that's what the contest requires, but I wanted you to know you accomplished that goal with flying colors. Loved every word!
Good Luck in the Contest
Helvi :o)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009