CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Arkine
Sometimes I wish I could express my feelings in writing like you do...however, I think for now I'll have to stick with the card aisle at the local store. This is a beatiful poem and I'm sure that the person it was meant for really enjoyed it. :) Great job!
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Sometimes I wish I could express my feelings in writing like you do...however, I think for now I'll have to stick with the card aisle at the local store. This is a beatiful poem and I'm sure that the person it was meant for really enjoyed it. :) Great job!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from Ragnar
The artwork and poem are perfect for each other; nice choice.
The poem was not overly sentimental, yet conveys the feelings involved to a T.
Another excellent work...congratulations
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The artwork and poem are perfect for each other; nice choice.
The poem was not overly sentimental, yet conveys the feelings involved to a T.
Another excellent work...congratulations
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Ragnar, thank you very much for your lovely compliments and review. The artwork is done by my artist friend, whom this poem was dedicated to. Thank you for commenting on that also. With warm regards, Sue
Comment from Carol D Parker
Well this one sure is different. Very well written without all the hearts and flowers and kisses, and all that stuff. Nice friendly tribute to a nice guy. It gets the message across that you can be friends with a guy. I really like it. Good job!
Delora
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Well this one sure is different. Very well written without all the hearts and flowers and kisses, and all that stuff. Nice friendly tribute to a nice guy. It gets the message across that you can be friends with a guy. I really like it. Good job!
Delora
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Ha! Loved your comments: "without the hearts, flowers, kisses". LOL!! Yes a VERY nice guy. Like an 'easy-chair'. By the way, the art I chose for this poem is his painting. He's an artist. He didn't know I was going to accompany his artwork with this poem I wrote for him. Like I said in the poem, we love to talk about art. Thanks so much for your great review and comments! With regards, Sue
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue....this is a lovely Valentine poem. Whoever Mike is I am sure he thinks so too. There is nothing like having someone to talk to and share with. Well done....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Hi Sue....this is a lovely Valentine poem. Whoever Mike is I am sure he thinks so too. There is nothing like having someone to talk to and share with. Well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Hi Chey, yes...he is a very special guy. He is an artist friend and it was a surprise to him that I also included one of his pieces of art to accompany the poem. Thanks so much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
A new valentine indeed! Nice to see that you are dancing the Tango my friend, we all deserve someone special in our lives and I'm extremely happy to see that you have yours Sue. OH! The poem was very nice also!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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A new valentine indeed! Nice to see that you are dancing the Tango my friend, we all deserve someone special in our lives and I'm extremely happy to see that you have yours Sue. OH! The poem was very nice also!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Ha! Oh, yeah.....the poem! lol - He is an artist and as a surprise, I accompanied the poem with his own artwork. Thanks so much for the review, Hitch! Your friend :-))
Comment from justmade
Nice simple and warm words.
This was wonderful in its simple form and the words touch even deeper that way.
Much love,
Justmade.
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Nice simple and warm words.
This was wonderful in its simple form and the words touch even deeper that way.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
What a great tribute to someone who touches your life in a way that truly means something to you. I loved the poem. Great job.
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What a great tribute to someone who touches your life in a way that truly means something to you. I loved the poem. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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fictionwriter, yes, he is a terrific guy and someone I admire. He is an artist and as a surprise to him, I accompanied this poem with his latest painting. I just love it. Thanks so much for your great review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from K-Patrick
Maybe this poem is above my head. I have read it several times and keep tripping over 'And shared humor that makes us both smile'. It just seems bulky and drawn out. Maybe lose 'both'.
Still it is a lovely piece of writing and Wish you the best.
Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them. -- David Hume (1757)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Maybe this poem is above my head. I have read it several times and keep tripping over 'And shared humor that makes us both smile'. It just seems bulky and drawn out. Maybe lose 'both'.
Still it is a lovely piece of writing and Wish you the best.
Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them. -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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K-Patrick, I think it is the rhythm of "da/da/DUM/da/da/DUM/da/da/DUM" that's tripping you up. I can't take "both" out or it would be in straight iambic. But, thanks much for the very close read. And am glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for your very kind review. Very much appreciated, Sue
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Uh-oh! You raised a point that made me re-read the poem. I only JUST discovered I have used the word "both" twice in this poem. And worse? One line after the next. Thanks so much for your very close read. Going to make that correction now! :-)) Sue
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I've taken out all the "boths"! HA! Again, many thanks. It's much better. Really appreciate your help. :-) Sue
Comment from Brandenpaul
nice, beautiful poem to share feelings with someone special. And what a perfect time of year for that-is it march yet? Just kidding, I thought it was very well written, plenty of rhyme and rhythm.
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nice, beautiful poem to share feelings with someone special. And what a perfect time of year for that-is it march yet? Just kidding, I thought it was very well written, plenty of rhyme and rhythm.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a sweet little valentine, Sue. I like poetry that uses meter and rhyme, as this one does. My only suggestion is that you put a period at the end of the next-to-last line and change the word "and" in the last line to "I'm," so that both sentences would be complete. I enjoyed your poem.
Sally
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This is a sweet little valentine, Sue. I like poetry that uses meter and rhyme, as this one does. My only suggestion is that you put a period at the end of the next-to-last line and change the word "and" in the last line to "I'm," so that both sentences would be complete. I enjoyed your poem.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009