CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Embracing the Light"A collection of poetry
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Comment from mark tree
sixteezkid, you've shown in your poem a very good lesson of life and sometimes one of the hardest to overcome, the influence of family. This speak well of character. Good luck
marcus....
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sixteezkid, you've shown in your poem a very good lesson of life and sometimes one of the hardest to overcome, the influence of family. This speak well of character. Good luck
marcus....
Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
Comment from marilyn2
Great work. You've told the story very well and a lot of people can relate to it. I'm pleased you have challenged what you grew up with and moved on. Good luck in contest.Good choice of artwork with the shining light.
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Great work. You've told the story very well and a lot of people can relate to it. I'm pleased you have challenged what you grew up with and moved on. Good luck in contest.Good choice of artwork with the shining light.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2009
Comment from bard owl
Being surrounded by negativinty can have a profound effect on the soul. I know, because I have lived with a negative personality for 26 years. You are so right. You cannot live your whole life with your head down, there is too much to see looking up. Excellently uplifting poem, Sue. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
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Being surrounded by negativinty can have a profound effect on the soul. I know, because I have lived with a negative personality for 26 years. You are so right. You cannot live your whole life with your head down, there is too much to see looking up. Excellently uplifting poem, Sue. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2009
Comment from petruvio
- a poem structured as a sonnet means that it has a consistent rhyme scheme;
- "to hold my head up high to see" is much more than a moral, is an inducement;
- and above all your poem is art.
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- a poem structured as a sonnet means that it has a consistent rhyme scheme;
- "to hold my head up high to see" is much more than a moral, is an inducement;
- and above all your poem is art.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from MumEsGirl
Good work on this poem. We all have to learn to overcome what we see as negative in life. Too many times people are held back by the conventions that surrounded them.
You certainly have produced a great work within the limits of the contest
hugs
kate
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Good work on this poem. We all have to learn to overcome what we see as negative in life. Too many times people are held back by the conventions that surrounded them.
You certainly have produced a great work within the limits of the contest
hugs
kate
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from starkat
And so the moral is ... you have to gain strength and rise above the negativity that surrounds one in life and family situations ... cast aside the energy that's not healthy for one's growth, and become your own positive person. Otherwise, you could end up like them. At least that's what I'm coming up with.
Great job with following all the rules of the contest...steady 15 syllables per line, and pleasant abcb rhyme scheme carry the poem right along. I imagine this piece is a bit biographical...and there was lots of negativity in your family growing up which you had to ovecome. It must be especially difficult when one's parents are negative...that would tend to rub off, and a necessary thing to learn to wash off later on in life.
Enjoyed your poem. Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best of luck...;0)
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And so the moral is ... you have to gain strength and rise above the negativity that surrounds one in life and family situations ... cast aside the energy that's not healthy for one's growth, and become your own positive person. Otherwise, you could end up like them. At least that's what I'm coming up with.
Great job with following all the rules of the contest...steady 15 syllables per line, and pleasant abcb rhyme scheme carry the poem right along. I imagine this piece is a bit biographical...and there was lots of negativity in your family growing up which you had to ovecome. It must be especially difficult when one's parents are negative...that would tend to rub off, and a necessary thing to learn to wash off later on in life.
Enjoyed your poem. Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best of luck...;0)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
The idea is very much apart of the major portion of society today as a whole; in fact, world wide. Too much self pity and ungreatfulliness not because of heart but because of circumstances which we when in our youth cannot see. It is, you could say the spirit of the age. Your solution is top-notch and to be shared with all you meet as a writer, and in person.
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The idea is very much apart of the major portion of society today as a whole; in fact, world wide. Too much self pity and ungreatfulliness not because of heart but because of circumstances which we when in our youth cannot see. It is, you could say the spirit of the age. Your solution is top-notch and to be shared with all you meet as a writer, and in person.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
Great poem!
And a sonnet nonetheless. I enjoyed that most about it and can see that this must have easily received the all time best. I found no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
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Great poem!
And a sonnet nonetheless. I enjoyed that most about it and can see that this must have easily received the all time best. I found no room for improvement.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from phild
This is good writing with a very clear message. It showed a great deal of strength in character to break away from what you grew up in. Most people are not strong enough to do that.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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This is good writing with a very clear message. It showed a great deal of strength in character to break away from what you grew up in. Most people are not strong enough to do that.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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phild, thank you very much for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Sixteezkid,
Very true wise words, I think every one thinks there life growing up is the only way, however there comes a time when we understand that possible there is another and a better way.
I love in particular We have the strength to swim against the tide
And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide...Beautiful.
Good luck with the contest I am sure you will do well.
Kind regards
Steve
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Dear Sixteezkid,
Very true wise words, I think every one thinks there life growing up is the only way, however there comes a time when we understand that possible there is another and a better way.
I love in particular We have the strength to swim against the tide
And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide...Beautiful.
Good luck with the contest I am sure you will do well.
Kind regards
Steve
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2009
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Steve, thank you so much for your great review. And for all your lovely comments. Very much appreciated, Sue