CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 58 "Mom's Memories"A collection of poetry
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Comment from shimmeringlights
Oh how I dread the day when they are all grown up and on their own. I can't imagine how empty the house will feel. But I know I can fall back on those sweet memories. Great write, thanks for sharing.
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Oh how I dread the day when they are all grown up and on their own. I can't imagine how empty the house will feel. But I know I can fall back on those sweet memories. Great write, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from Nanny 6
Your flow and rhyme makes this lighthearted poem a fun read. It's amazing how we forget what a pain our kids were when they were small, causing us much stress. But to look back is such a joy! Thanks for the memories. Judy
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Your flow and rhyme makes this lighthearted poem a fun read. It's amazing how we forget what a pain our kids were when they were small, causing us much stress. But to look back is such a joy! Thanks for the memories. Judy
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from minopavlic
Simply takes my breath away...You in your own artistic wizardry have captured the very essence of what every mother on the planet has felt.What a connection,what a wonderful testimony to giving and receiving a new born life.
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Simply takes my breath away...You in your own artistic wizardry have captured the very essence of what every mother on the planet has felt.What a connection,what a wonderful testimony to giving and receiving a new born life.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2009
Comment from malachi1206
This is something only parents understand having two grown children and one with family of his own I really feel this on occasion though I must confess it is only on days I feel more seasoned than on others LOL :) great write malachi1206
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This is something only parents understand having two grown children and one with family of his own I really feel this on occasion though I must confess it is only on days I feel more seasoned than on others LOL :) great write malachi1206
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
Comment from flea0420
this was very touching...although i don't have kids i can totally relate. time goes by so quickly and all the joy they bring makes you want to box it up and keep them young forever. thanks for sharing.
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this was very touching...although i don't have kids i can totally relate. time goes by so quickly and all the joy they bring makes you want to box it up and keep them young forever. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
Comment from howling harp
really liked the touching unconditional aspects of the motherly love. you did find the unconditional and bring it out in the open in just the way mothere reflect when given the piece to do so. nicely done
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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really liked the touching unconditional aspects of the motherly love. you did find the unconditional and bring it out in the open in just the way mothere reflect when given the piece to do so. nicely done
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your lovely compliments and review. Very much appreciated. With regards, Sue
Comment from debskatz
Hey kid,
A very sweet & nostalgic poem. And also very well written with the meter being perfect except for one line (that i could tell) & the rhymes being dead on. Good Job!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Hey kid,
A very sweet & nostalgic poem. And also very well written with the meter being perfect except for one line (that i could tell) & the rhymes being dead on. Good Job!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Which line did you feel was off? My iambics are precious to me! HA! Let me know so I can go over it again. Thanks, Sue
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"While looking at me so doe-eyed" I'm reading it as:
da dum da dum da dum dum da
'Course, I know different folks read it different ways, but that's what I'm getting. Heck, i really don't think one line is any biggy. a lot of folks prefer that the entire poem not be entirely one way; helps to break it up a little bit.
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I think it can be read either way, now that you mention it. It gets down to intonations and syntax sometimes. But thanks so much for bringing it up. :-))
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You're welcome!
Comment from Brandenpaul
Very mom-like or sentimental. I think it pulled at all us parents out there. I thought it was sad in a very proud way, if that makes any sense.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Very mom-like or sentimental. I think it pulled at all us parents out there. I thought it was sad in a very proud way, if that makes any sense.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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It makes all the sense in the world. Very sad to see them grow up, but proud of how they have grown up. Yet, missing them as children once in awhile. Thanks so much for your very kind review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from tammipratt
I feel every word with 3 children of my own. Each day I look at them, watching them grow and wondering why it has to change. At the shops the other day it hit me - what am I going to do when they are all too grown to come with me - I'll miss it all - the begging for toys, throwing things in the trolley when they think I'm not looking, scooting off and picking up things on my list - I LOVE shopping with my kids. What am I going to do? Great poem - thank you.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I feel every word with 3 children of my own. Each day I look at them, watching them grow and wondering why it has to change. At the shops the other day it hit me - what am I going to do when they are all too grown to come with me - I'll miss it all - the begging for toys, throwing things in the trolley when they think I'm not looking, scooting off and picking up things on my list - I LOVE shopping with my kids. What am I going to do? Great poem - thank you.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I knew when I read "at the shops" in your review that you were from Australia. Ha! I lived in Brisbane for about 8 years and my kids were born there. I lived at Sunnybank and then Fig Tree Pocket. I tell you, I had the greatest memories of my kids in Brisbane. Barefoot, going to the shops asking for lollies, sports day, the beach. Can't stand thinking about it all! Thanks so much for your great review. So appreciated, Sue
Comment from skye
It is easy to remember the sweet boys and girls that clustered around, so cute and clever. I love your poem, because it brings back the sweetness, and the mischieviousness, of our kids now grown and gone.
Nice poem, great rhymes.
Thanks for the chance to remember.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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It is easy to remember the sweet boys and girls that clustered around, so cute and clever. I love your poem, because it brings back the sweetness, and the mischieviousness, of our kids now grown and gone.
Nice poem, great rhymes.
Thanks for the chance to remember.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Oh, yes...mischief! HA!! Okay, they are full-on adults now and I've been hearing for years, their confessions of what they got up to. And it was only this past Thanksgiving that yet another one was told to me!! LOL!!! And here I thought I was the most vigilant of mothers! HA!!! Thanks so much for your great review. So appreciated, Sue
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My own have proven over and over again that even while at home, I was not paying close attention. LOL