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CSP: A Collection of Poems

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A collection of poetry

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Comment from minopavlic
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A beautiful poem, majestically expressing our inner most desire for love. A must read for all who have lost a love,and long for its return. Sometimes now within my own self imposed recluciveness,I feel like the loneliest man on the planet,and yet within this sanctuary of solitude I find a peaceful contentment.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
    no_obstacle, I always enjoy reading your reviews. You take a lot of time to ponder what you read. I respect that very much. I feel both ways, depending on the day. Contentment with my solitude, yet the human need for love continues to beckon. Thank you for your generous and thoughtful review. Yours, Sue
reply by minopavlic on 01-Feb-2009
    Yes I certainly understand about a welcomed solitude and the desire for a shared companionship, however, even though love on one hand is something we all crave and desire, a beautiful reality within the depths of our minds and souls, love can also be so frightening. Sometimes the fear of being hurt again in itself is an unbearable pain, within those haunting demons, that we choose a self imopsed reclusiveness.

Comment from dportwood
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Nice expressive detail - curtains, rugs, furniture, and fabrics do not make a home.

I share your confusion about free verse. I've heard the terms 'prose poetry' and 'poetic prose', which I guess, are both free verse.

Anyway I enjoyed the poem.

Duane

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
    Duane, I'll just say that I'm "expressing". Ha! Yes, we can have all those 'things', but without someone to share it all with, it can be very lonely and meaningless. Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful review. Yours, Sue
Comment from NightWriter
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"Something is Missing" is a very beautifully written poem. I know, it's missing more people to fill it, LOL. Perfectly written with perfect rhythm. Well done.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009

Comment from MJMuraco
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I consider this a poem and it was nicely written. It flowed well and made the point that not every house is a home. Aesthetics don't make a house a home. The people who live there do.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009

Comment from Dreamdancer
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Hello my friend,
I have learned the difference:-) One is a story and the other is not... I am still a bit confused over that one.. I liked the feelings within this wonderful piece of prose? LOL... Awesome job dear lady... Dreamdancer

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2009
    You're a sweety, Dreamdancer. It's been so honed now, I think everyone is calling it "free verse". LOL!! Always love you reading my work. And your review is appreciated, Sue
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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Good evening and how are you. What a very nice poem and yet so very sad. You are so correct in describing a house and not a home. Loved it, Loyd

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009

Comment from adewpearl
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alone admiring aesthetics - what a fantastic way to describe a place being a house and not a home, perfect in everything but the warmth a family brings - this is quite lovely - and I'm no free verse expert either - but this has the flow I look for that separates poetry from prose Brooke

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    I had it written quite long, then had help from jazh to hone it. I'm happy with it now. Free verse is difficult for me unless I'm in a "state" like my "Just Bitchin' poem! HA! Glad you liked it, Brooke. Now, back to the rhymes! :-)) Sue
Comment from Domino
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Blimey, Sue, is that your place, when can I move in? ;-)
I'm no free verse expert, but I thought it needed include a splattering of rhyme and metaphors. Oh well, can't get two people ta agree on any form of poetry, LOL.
This is an easy and interesting read with a very strong message, so must pass the test. Better than livin is a dunp with the same devoid feeling. Ray xx

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    That's why I really love to stick with meter and rhyme. No ambiguity. I do LOVE to read free verse when it is good. But, to write it? Different story. I've done it before when I was EXTREMELY emotional about something. Had tons of conviction at those few moments on those few pieces. Had to give it another try. Oh well, back to my good ole friend: abab / 8-6-8-6 LOL!!!!! Sue
Comment from rmdelta
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Sue,

What's missing? I think your poem is great. It tells a story I can understand, so it really is a poem for everybody, and it is quite beautiful as well. I like it.

Reggie

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Just a wee bit of a self-pity party about not having the special other to share it with. But, my pity-parties only last for a few hours! Ha! Thanks so much, Reggie. Always, Sue
Comment from joan marie
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It appears to be great free verse to me. Although a prevailing sadness througout because there is no one to share it with. Great write. joan marie

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2009


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Hi Joan, I have honed it to death since you read it. So, I'm feeling better about it. Yeah, I wanted that sadness to come through. Thanks for your very generous review and comments. :-)) Sue
reply by joan marie on 29-Jan-2009
    That's what I consider a successful write. jm
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
    Seriously? Do you think it deserves the name "free verse"? I had a ton of help from Jazh. She kicked me in the ass and told me to get back to work! LOL!!!! Love it when someone really wants your work to do well.