CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 89 "Family Matters"A collection of poetry
48 total reviews
Comment from Nanny 6
The coming together of a family, the breaking part of a family. Very sad. So much happiness in the beginning, and one wonders, what happened to break it apart? Good question. Very sad. Good luck in the contest. Judy
  |
The coming together of a family, the breaking part of a family. Very sad. So much happiness in the beginning, and one wonders, what happened to break it apart? Good question. Very sad. Good luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
Wow. The picture sets up the stories nicely. You have managed to write about a family in just a few words. Good and bad times.
Good luck in the contest.
|
Wow. The picture sets up the stories nicely. You have managed to write about a family in just a few words. Good and bad times.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
The picture started a moving and question filled narrative which goes on day after day unanswered by those who don't look for answers.
Dave
|
The picture started a moving and question filled narrative which goes on day after day unanswered by those who don't look for answers.
Dave
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from utopian_dream_x
The picture is an excellent choice, it tells everything! Your words are simple but direct, and they have an impact on the reader. A great entry for the contest, good luck!
|
The picture is an excellent choice, it tells everything! Your words are simple but direct, and they have an impact on the reader. A great entry for the contest, good luck!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue...you have written two profound and what would be long stories in 12 words. You could say much more but you have written the essence of how bad a marriage and break up can be. Well done.....good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
|
Hi Sue...you have written two profound and what would be long stories in 12 words. You could say much more but you have written the essence of how bad a marriage and break up can be. Well done.....good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from ulster3
Hi sixteez.
Good question. You meet the criteria for this contest very well as far as I can see. Best to you.
Fondly, Rebecca
|
Hi sixteez.
Good question. You meet the criteria for this contest very well as far as I can see. Best to you.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from cade
Wow. Two very opposite ends of the spectrum. The picture is also very appropriate. A very deep couple of stories hiding behind those twelve words. Well done!
|
Wow. Two very opposite ends of the spectrum. The picture is also very appropriate. A very deep couple of stories hiding behind those twelve words. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
In twelve words, you portray the disintegration of a happy family into a dysfunctional one. It happens far too often. The last question really is the key, and "why?" is a question that needs to be asked before the disintegration starts, not during. Biting social criticism. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
|
In twelve words, you portray the disintegration of a happy family into a dysfunctional one. It happens far too often. The last question really is the key, and "why?" is a question that needs to be asked before the disintegration starts, not during. Biting social criticism. Good juxtaposition of picture and poem.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sixteezkid, why, indeed.
In you first six words, the family has it all.
In the next, everything is shattered and a lifetime may not be long enough to undo the damage.
good luck in the contest.
|
Sixteezkid, why, indeed.
In you first six words, the family has it all.
In the next, everything is shattered and a lifetime may not be long enough to undo the damage.
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from Signaler
Hi sixteezkid, Hum, everything you need to convey the sad kind of stories that happen so often today. You have chosen the right words to hook your reader.
Keep your angel on Your shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
|
Hi sixteezkid, Hum, everything you need to convey the sad kind of stories that happen so often today. You have chosen the right words to hook your reader.
Keep your angel on Your shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009