CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Jewell McChesney
So, in my veins, I welcome you
Within nirvana's reign o'er me
Yet tangled by this devil's brew
Heaven-bound, my destiny
you have depicted addiction well with this verse. Sad story it is and all too prevalent.
Good choice on the photo.
thanks for sharing your art with us.
Jj
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So, in my veins, I welcome you
Within nirvana's reign o'er me
Yet tangled by this devil's brew
Heaven-bound, my destiny
you have depicted addiction well with this verse. Sad story it is and all too prevalent.
Good choice on the photo.
thanks for sharing your art with us.
Jj
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
A friend of mine's son left this world with his last fix that was needed to still the spinning of this world. For those who do not have a relationship with their maker, the needle, bottle, sex, or whatever is their only solice.
Dave
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A friend of mine's son left this world with his last fix that was needed to still the spinning of this world. For those who do not have a relationship with their maker, the needle, bottle, sex, or whatever is their only solice.
Dave
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from skye
True to the form and structure. Your lines are very good.
I like the artwork, but it is not pretty.
The reality of this poem is not pretty, too real, too contemporary.
We all need to read this a lot. It is a warning.
Well done.
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True to the form and structure. Your lines are very good.
I like the artwork, but it is not pretty.
The reality of this poem is not pretty, too real, too contemporary.
We all need to read this a lot. It is a warning.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from kassey
Excellently writen poem about a very nasty subject matter. I am glad you were so precise with your author notes, explaining the rhyme scheme. It tells a sad story Kay
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Excellently writen poem about a very nasty subject matter. I am glad you were so precise with your author notes, explaining the rhyme scheme. It tells a sad story Kay
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from mindseye
This is a very well crafted poem and the poetic form does not seem forced at all! Well done. Your words say so much about such a terrible addiction.
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This is a very well crafted poem and the poetic form does not seem forced at all! Well done. Your words say so much about such a terrible addiction.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from raw form
When I was out there using I never liked Heroin, but I saved one of my friends on more than one occasion from overdosing she is still out there dying slowly and its sad, the ravages of drug abuse, will it ever end? I doubt it the pharmecuetical companines are the biggest dealers and we see it everyday with commercials for this that and a third. I like the way Chris Rock put it in his stand up there ain't no money in the cure there's money in the medicine. So sad that we are governed in this way and look to escape.
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When I was out there using I never liked Heroin, but I saved one of my friends on more than one occasion from overdosing she is still out there dying slowly and its sad, the ravages of drug abuse, will it ever end? I doubt it the pharmecuetical companines are the biggest dealers and we see it everyday with commercials for this that and a third. I like the way Chris Rock put it in his stand up there ain't no money in the cure there's money in the medicine. So sad that we are governed in this way and look to escape.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from Adri7enne
Well done in following the set pattern. And the repetition of the lines in describing this subject matter seems a natural thing. Good choice of sdubject, good rhyme and rhythm. Good job.
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Well done in following the set pattern. And the repetition of the lines in describing this subject matter seems a natural thing. Good choice of sdubject, good rhyme and rhythm. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from adewpearl
This is just one big punch in the gut of a poem. The pantoum form with its looping pattern works well with the thought of an addict getting entangled in this repetitive pattern of abuse, just strung out and waiting the next fix to be strung out all over. The flow of the poem works well, the word-choices are strong with the sad realization that this nirvana and bliss is all false.
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This is just one big punch in the gut of a poem. The pantoum form with its looping pattern works well with the thought of an addict getting entangled in this repetitive pattern of abuse, just strung out and waiting the next fix to be strung out all over. The flow of the poem works well, the word-choices are strong with the sad realization that this nirvana and bliss is all false.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
this poem is so simple, yet it presents well, a powerful message. it was my pleasure to read it. the picture choice is excellent as it enhances the message.
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this poem is so simple, yet it presents well, a powerful message. it was my pleasure to read it. the picture choice is excellent as it enhances the message.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
Comment from DreamChaser
I don't quite get the pattern of this poem but it's an excellent piece. A horribly tragic addiction with what can only be a sad ending. The picture and gray colors you chose enhance your verse. Well written and emotional.
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I don't quite get the pattern of this poem but it's an excellent piece. A horribly tragic addiction with what can only be a sad ending. The picture and gray colors you chose enhance your verse. Well written and emotional.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009