CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 91 "That First Kiss"A collection of poetry
15 total reviews
Comment from dportwood
Ah! the New Year's Eve parties - everybody kissing everybody - Why not not a lasting love? I enjoyed this and wish you well in the contest.
Duane
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Ah! the New Year's Eve parties - everybody kissing everybody - Why not not a lasting love? I enjoyed this and wish you well in the contest.
Duane
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from Roisin
Beautiful. This is an emotional, sweet love poem. You've done a great job with the rhyme and rhythm as well as doing it in acrostic style. A great entry to the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Beautiful. This is an emotional, sweet love poem. You've done a great job with the rhyme and rhythm as well as doing it in acrostic style. A great entry to the contest.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Roisin, I appreciate your very kind compliments and review. I did fall in love with my husband the second I saw him...was SO weird. WAY before there was even a kiss! Isn't the chemistry thing weird! Again, many thanks...Sue
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
Well done! It seems to meet all the requirements for the contest. Your rhythm and flow are excellent and the imagery is wonderful... Great job and good luck with the contest.... Dreamdancer
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Hello my friend,
Well done! It seems to meet all the requirements for the contest. Your rhythm and flow are excellent and the imagery is wonderful... Great job and good luck with the contest.... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Dreamdance, thank you for your lovely compliments and great review! Always so appreciated, as I really respect your writing!...Sue
Comment from Hitcher
AH! The new Years Kiss, I remember a couple a scorchers myself, back in my day and the heat after...well, I don't think I could write about it here, ha ha. A rhyming Acrostic Sue! I'm always impressed with your rhyming friend, this is a great contest piece, it reminds me that I have to write one yet. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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AH! The new Years Kiss, I remember a couple a scorchers myself, back in my day and the heat after...well, I don't think I could write about it here, ha ha. A rhyming Acrostic Sue! I'm always impressed with your rhyming friend, this is a great contest piece, it reminds me that I have to write one yet. Good luck.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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You playa, you! I'm really into this rhyming thing. Really practicing hard on that and meter. More meters to learn...a long way to go. Yeah, do join this one! Thanks for the review, my friend. :-)) Suc
Comment from jack silver
good luck in the contest. well worded and ordered. loved it and it made me remember and think about with a laugh the first kiss i ever had. enjoyed the read and look forward to reading more.
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good luck in the contest. well worded and ordered. loved it and it made me remember and think about with a laugh the first kiss i ever had. enjoyed the read and look forward to reading more.
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Judian James
Well done. This is a great acrostic that is definitely a love poem of the finest kind. There is nothing quite like love at first sight. I have experienced it! Bravo
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Well done. This is a great acrostic that is definitely a love poem of the finest kind. There is nothing quite like love at first sight. I have experienced it! Bravo
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Curt Mongold
Why didn't ya just say it was an acrostic? LOL! I always like acrostics that rhyme, so this is a winner by default for me. It gives the piece such a nice flow when read.
Best wishes cuz!
Curt
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Why didn't ya just say it was an acrostic? LOL! I always like acrostics that rhyme, so this is a winner by default for me. It gives the piece such a nice flow when read.
Best wishes cuz!
Curt
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Domino
Hey, Sue, do ya realise this spells downwards -
'AT FIRST SHIGHT'?
Just kiddin, LMAO.
Lovely tender picture, though I find em both havin beards a little off-puttin. LOL
Maybe tag 'scintillating start' onto preceedin satnza?
Lovely smooth-flowing perfect long-lastin romance. can't criticize that theme, or your execution of such.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hey, Sue, do ya realise this spells downwards -
'AT FIRST SHIGHT'?
Just kiddin, LMAO.
Lovely tender picture, though I find em both havin beards a little off-puttin. LOL
Maybe tag 'scintillating start' onto preceedin satnza?
Lovely smooth-flowing perfect long-lastin romance. can't criticize that theme, or your execution of such.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Top 'a the mornin' to ya! Oh wait. It's my morning, not yours! HA!! I WISH I could have "scintillating start" up there, but can't. According to the rules of the contest in this acrosstic, each word has to be separate ( at first sight). Dang!! A "lovely smooth-flowing perfect..." coming from you is all I need to hear today, Ray!! Thanks for your great review! :-)) Sue
Comment from joan marie
Acrostics are fun to write and can be used in several ways. You chose to write a sentences. The last one I wrote used 2 to 3 words phrases. Good luck in the contest. joan marie
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Acrostics are fun to write and can be used in several ways. You chose to write a sentences. The last one I wrote used 2 to 3 words phrases. Good luck in the contest. joan marie
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
Well, this was really a great poem, my friend. Is this one of those kinds that are called Acronistic? Never mind. Your poem is beautifully written and makes sense as well. I like your idea of At First Sight.
The first thing I ever wrote was on this site when I joined in Sept. last year. It's called "My Sweet Kathy," and in it I tell of something that happened when I first saw my wife, 41 years ago. If you ever read it, see if you can discover the spot where that incident is.
Your poem, took me back to that moment again, Thanks.
Reggie
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Sue,
Well, this was really a great poem, my friend. Is this one of those kinds that are called Acronistic? Never mind. Your poem is beautifully written and makes sense as well. I like your idea of At First Sight.
The first thing I ever wrote was on this site when I joined in Sept. last year. It's called "My Sweet Kathy," and in it I tell of something that happened when I first saw my wife, 41 years ago. If you ever read it, see if you can discover the spot where that incident is.
Your poem, took me back to that moment again, Thanks.
Reggie
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Okay, I've started to read "My Sweet Kathy" and then got choked up when I read this part: "Thank you for loving me, Kathy. If such a thing is allowed in Heaven, will you marry me when we get there?" - I'm loving this story. Right now, I'm at the part where I've read a fantastic line! - "My name is Sam Bell and I arrived in Gonzales, Texas about a year ago. I'm twenty-two years oldā?? I will never be twenty-three." - GREAT transition! Will continue reading today and visit ya when I'm done. (Then, I'll spot the part of 41 years ago). So glad you enjoyed this, Reggie, and that it took you back. 41 years and still in love - how wonderful is that. Thank you for your lovely words. Sue