Comment from rmdelta

Exceptional

Sue,

A delightful little gem you've presented with this lovely writign, my friend. Great descriptives fill it and allow us the ability to know what you're talkng about. Excellent poem to recite and to learn from. Great work, Sue.

Reggie

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2009

Comment from DreamChaser

Excellent

I couldn't agree more. I'm a late bloomer with the internet world. Email, ebay, and green spot were the greatest until I found this website. You've managed to make a statement colored with humor. Great work.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2009

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

And learning you are... and doing it well. This is priceless, and sounds a lot like me. Nicely Done!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2009

Comment from MJMuraco

Excellent

What a delightful and creative poem! I love how you described the Internet as such a foreign thing until you got familiar with it. Yeah, games and even E-mails can be boring. It is convenient to shop online. I didn't think that I could do it but now I do my bill paying and shopping online. I have changed because of the Internet. I found FanStory because of this wonderful form of communication. I laughed out loud when I read your poem. Very well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

Sixteezkid,

I love the originality of this poem. It shows charm and wit and gives a historical message that is recognized around the world.

Nice.

Duane

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2009

Comment from Roisin

Excellent

Wow! This is great. I only wish I had a six to give you. I love your use of so many computer words (double dutch to me!LOL). Your rhyme is perfect and your meter is great. It's a joy to read aloud. There was just one line that I felt slightly broke the flow for me:

'And then one day I found a poem place'

I feel that it needs an extra syllable to fix the meter - maybe you're pronouncing poem with two syllables, if so that would sound fine. It's just that I've pronounced it with one and I feel that you should stick in a 'great' or something like that before 'poem'. It's just a thought - the meter is so perfect that this line just threw me slightly. Great job.

Warm regards.

Roisin

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009

Roison, I'll just deposit that sixer in my "would-be" account. HA! Thanks so much for that! So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for bringing up the syllable issue with the word poem. I checked two dictionaries and they both say it can be read with two syllables (one with accent on first syllable: POem) and one syllable (rhyming with home). HUH! I never knew that! Learn something new every day. But I really appreciate you watching my back!! Thanks very much for your great review. Always appreciated...Sue

Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman

Excellent

This is a refreshing and uplifting piece! Catchy title too; well written and delightful throughout; good imagery; no corrections; well done!

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2009

Comment from chaswriter

Excellent

Sue - How in the world you write this little rhyming vignettes is beyond me. And you've added humor into you story. I love it. Keep 'em coming. Charlie

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2009

Comment from Minglement

Excellent

Oh, I love this one. You tell the whole story so many have experienced. And what a lovely tribute to FS in your last verse. Again expressing what many of us here at the site, feel. And - love the title! Great job!

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2009

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

You're learning well, S-kid. This is a great poem and very well written. I particularly like th erhyme scheme.

--Fred--

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2009