CSP: A Collection of Poems
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32 total reviews
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
Good presentation and topic too; catchy title; well written; creative; not a thing to correct; liked this:
" My heart belongs to Tennessee
Although I'm from up north
Imbued with love, serenity
Her beauty calls me forth"
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Good presentation and topic too; catchy title; well written; creative; not a thing to correct; liked this:
" My heart belongs to Tennessee
Although I'm from up north
Imbued with love, serenity
Her beauty calls me forth"
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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astrolite, thank you very much for your review and specific comments. Am glad you enjoyed this work! With regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
What a beautiful poem about a place you obviously treasure deeply. I'm loving your wonderful metered poems at the moment. I'm no expert, but your writing seems to be getting stronger by the day. Well done.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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What a beautiful poem about a place you obviously treasure deeply. I'm loving your wonderful metered poems at the moment. I'm no expert, but your writing seems to be getting stronger by the day. Well done.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Roisin, what a lovely compliment. I have been working very hard on my rhymes and metered works. Have learned so much here, there are no words to say just how much. And I can tell you, one reason is due to such encouragement such as yours! I appreciate it so much. So glad you enjoyed this poem. With regards, Sue
Comment from FredCollingwood
Boy, you sure have been active, latey and we reviewers are all the better for it. This is another great poem. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Boy, you sure have been active, latey and we reviewers are all the better for it. This is another great poem. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Active?!!! I tell you, this blasted winter weather has me holed up like a hermit! HA!! If it weren't for this 0 degree weather and a foot of snow that just won't stop building, I suppose I wouldn't be writing so much. The good news, is "thank God for poetry!" - Ha! I sure appreciate your lovely compliments and encouragement. Warmest regards, Sue
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I probably shouldn't tell you this, but I got up this morning, put on my shorts and went for a walk on the beach.
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I am now going to "squelch" you. This is completely uncalled for.
If I were to put your words to metaphor, it would be "1st degree felony assault"! HA!!!!
You're bad!
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Hey, I could've gotten sunburned out there! (Feel bad for me now?)
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You're walkin' a fine line there......
(if you were here, you'd be skating on thin ice!) HA!!!!!
Comment from shimmeringlights
I've never been there, but this poem makes me want to go. You paint a lovely picture of a simpler lifestyle. Born and raised in the city, but love of the country is deep in my heart. Great imagery, love how you told this is a story form, tight rhyme scheme and good flow. Nothing to dislike.
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I've never been there, but this poem makes me want to go. You paint a lovely picture of a simpler lifestyle. Born and raised in the city, but love of the country is deep in my heart. Great imagery, love how you told this is a story form, tight rhyme scheme and good flow. Nothing to dislike.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from skye
Memory poems about the nearest and dearest are so much fun to read.
You have crafted this one very nicely, using great images and emotions.
It is a wonder how certain places impact our whole lives.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Memory poems about the nearest and dearest are so much fun to read.
You have crafted this one very nicely, using great images and emotions.
It is a wonder how certain places impact our whole lives.
Very well done.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Skye, indeed, it is a wonder. Writing this took me back to all of it with such fondness. I sent a copy of it to my most-loved cousin in Tennessee and she wrote back and said she cried. She feels the same away about our times down there together. Thanks so much for your lovely review. With regards, Sue
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - My family lineage had many generations living in the Crossville area of Tennessee before my branch moved to Florida. I can go back some 13 generations and 10 of those lived in Tennessee. Nicely written with great rhyme, fluid pace and effective descriptives of the area. Loved it. Charlie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Sue - My family lineage had many generations living in the Crossville area of Tennessee before my branch moved to Florida. I can go back some 13 generations and 10 of those lived in Tennessee. Nicely written with great rhyme, fluid pace and effective descriptives of the area. Loved it. Charlie
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Charlie, I LOVE researching my genealogy! I have a ton of work done on ancestry.com - amazing stuff! Do you still spend a lot of time on it? Thank you for your very kind review. So glad you liked it! :-)) Sue
Comment from Daizie
Another beautiful poem,indeed. It's full of warmth and sweet memories. It brings back memories for me, too, because I was raised out in the countryside, which I loved. I'm glad you have such positive memories of pleasant times, and I really appreciate you sharing them with us. Very enjoyable!
Warm regards,
Daizie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Another beautiful poem,indeed. It's full of warmth and sweet memories. It brings back memories for me, too, because I was raised out in the countryside, which I loved. I'm glad you have such positive memories of pleasant times, and I really appreciate you sharing them with us. Very enjoyable!
Warm regards,
Daizie
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Daizie, so glad you enjoyed this poem! And I thank you for your very kind review and comments! Always appreciated....Sue
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Being from the south myself I fully understand your love for her. My grandfather's family (on my mother's side) actually has roots in Tennessee (are you any relations to the Hudson's BTW?) and throughout that area of the country. I, too, hold fond memories of almost everything you mentioned in this poem.
I had one area that I wasn't quite comfortable with. The punctuation seemed a bit "off" and it just didn't read right to me. Please note that punc's aren't my strong suit (if you've read any of my stuff, you may have noticed this - LOL) so it may be A-OK, but you might want to take a look.
"These memories are just a start
For, many do I hold."
To me, it seemed that the comma should have fallen after the word "start" rather than after "For".
As I said, punc's aren't my strong suit, so I didn't mark down for it.
Hugs, from one southern belle to another - sherry
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Being from the south myself I fully understand your love for her. My grandfather's family (on my mother's side) actually has roots in Tennessee (are you any relations to the Hudson's BTW?) and throughout that area of the country. I, too, hold fond memories of almost everything you mentioned in this poem.
I had one area that I wasn't quite comfortable with. The punctuation seemed a bit "off" and it just didn't read right to me. Please note that punc's aren't my strong suit (if you've read any of my stuff, you may have noticed this - LOL) so it may be A-OK, but you might want to take a look.
"These memories are just a start
For, many do I hold."
To me, it seemed that the comma should have fallen after the word "start" rather than after "For".
As I said, punc's aren't my strong suit, so I didn't mark down for it.
Hugs, from one southern belle to another - sherry
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Sherry, you are correct and I thank you SO much for seeing this error. I try to be a spelling and grammar fanatic but I sure missed this one. I think part of my problem is that in poetry, I find it very difficult to use punctuation at the end of any line. It's just a style I've developed. There are some exceptions, though. So, I've got to have a look at it again, because I surely don't want to see a comma after "start". HA!! Thank you for sharing your souther roots story! A slower life which leaves cozy memories. Thank you for your great review and compliments. AND for your catching my comma blunder! With regards, Sue
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is an emotional poem,full of nostalgia. The lines try to capture golden moments that flew past during childhood, which the writer would do anything to recapture. This is very well done. cheers.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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This is an emotional poem,full of nostalgia. The lines try to capture golden moments that flew past during childhood, which the writer would do anything to recapture. This is very well done. cheers.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Perp, So glad you read this as intended from my heart. A great thing to be able to put down in words one's memories. Thank you very much for your very kind review. Always appreciated...Sue
Comment from Jendowoz
Nicely put Sixteenzkid. I really like the bounce and rhythm in this piece. Especially when it is read aloud. The colour is great and so is the picture. Both add to the feel of the poem. Well done.
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Nicely put Sixteenzkid. I really like the bounce and rhythm in this piece. Especially when it is read aloud. The colour is great and so is the picture. Both add to the feel of the poem. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009