CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Nicnac
Beautiful!
Lovely imagery and perfect meter and rhyme.
I can picture the crashing waves of the beautiful blue ocean. Your imagery is very strong. I could almost feel the sand between my toes! ;)
Wonderful writing.
~Nic
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Beautiful!
Lovely imagery and perfect meter and rhyme.
I can picture the crashing waves of the beautiful blue ocean. Your imagery is very strong. I could almost feel the sand between my toes! ;)
Wonderful writing.
~Nic
Comment Written 04-Feb-2009
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Kiddo,
What a great little poem! Reading it, I felt as though I was splashing in the crashing foam myself. You certainly do have a way with words. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
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Hi Kiddo,
What a great little poem! Reading it, I felt as though I was splashing in the crashing foam myself. You certainly do have a way with words. Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
Comment from Readywriter52
The picture is beautiful and it matches the poem perfectly. Your poem speaks of the ocean and it beauty. The ocean that is perfect and eternal.
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The picture is beautiful and it matches the poem perfectly. Your poem speaks of the ocean and it beauty. The ocean that is perfect and eternal.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
Comment from wierdgrace
You must know by now that if you put a picture of the ocean, and write a poem, i will read, it is my favorite, great for the contest, perfect minute poem and good luck.
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You must know by now that if you put a picture of the ocean, and write a poem, i will read, it is my favorite, great for the contest, perfect minute poem and good luck.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
Comment from jshep
Lovely descriptions of your ocean dreams, Sue. Great flow in this piece and perfectly executed. 'Of surf that pounds with rushing roar on sandy shore'- loved this descripton has could hear it. No changes to recommend and good luck. Excellent entry. Joyce
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Lovely descriptions of your ocean dreams, Sue. Great flow in this piece and perfectly executed. 'Of surf that pounds with rushing roar on sandy shore'- loved this descripton has could hear it. No changes to recommend and good luck. Excellent entry. Joyce
Comment Written 03-Feb-2009
Comment from Aurora C. Borealis
What lovely imagery. I'm very fond of the ocean myself and try to get a walk at the seafront every day. Very well written and it follows all the rules! Best of luck!!
~Aurora C. :)
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What lovely imagery. I'm very fond of the ocean myself and try to get a walk at the seafront every day. Very well written and it follows all the rules! Best of luck!!
~Aurora C. :)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from jack silver
the whole poem was perfect from beginning to end. i would not be surprised if you when the contest or come second or third. the rhyming was really excellently done as well.
look forward to reading a whole lot more of your work.
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the whole poem was perfect from beginning to end. i would not be surprised if you when the contest or come second or third. the rhyming was really excellently done as well.
look forward to reading a whole lot more of your work.
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jack
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
Comment from adewpearl
The structure of this poem type provides the perfect rhythm for your poem about the waves of the ocean, as if the two were made specifically for each other
read out loud, this is fantastic
the tranquil view of ebb and flow and undertow - each verse is glorious in its sound
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The structure of this poem type provides the perfect rhythm for your poem about the waves of the ocean, as if the two were made specifically for each other
read out loud, this is fantastic
the tranquil view of ebb and flow and undertow - each verse is glorious in its sound
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from skye
You have done this very well. And taken me to where I also long to be...
near the ocean, watching those beautiful waves crash into the shore.
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You have done this very well. And taken me to where I also long to be...
near the ocean, watching those beautiful waves crash into the shore.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from Adam Smith
Well executed and with some great images. Even undertow seems to be a postiive thing in this poem of longing. I liked the color scheme too! This took me away, I could hear the ocean and taste the salt as the waves leapfrog one another along the shore. Ahhhhhh.......Adam
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
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Well executed and with some great images. Even undertow seems to be a postiive thing in this poem of longing. I liked the color scheme too! This took me away, I could hear the ocean and taste the salt as the waves leapfrog one another along the shore. Ahhhhhh.......Adam
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
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Adam, so glad you caught the beautiful image! Yeah, just standing at the water's edge and feeling your feet sink into the sand from the undertow is a great feeling. Yes, the simple things in life ARE the best! Thanks so much for your review. Always appreciated...Sue