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A collection of poetry

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Comment from rmdelta
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sue,

well written and what can one say about the descriptives? Strong? It is a great contest entry even with another weirdly named poem style. Great work, but I think you're telling a story. I doubt seriously if it was the daylights that was scared out of you when the shark came up beside you. Expect it was something else.

Reggie

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    Scared the WHAT outta me? Yep! Well, now that you're being converted over to haiku, it's time to write a 'naani'. Do a bit of practice tonight and I'll grade your homework. After you've got that down, we'll start on a cinquain. So glad you've taken the turn! "feeble-mindedness no more"...... ;-)) Sue
Comment from sherrygreywolf
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This is one of those situations where you don't know whether to laugh, cry or scream in terror!

Great little verse for the contest - sherry

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    I did all the above! HA!!! Thanks for your review, Sherry! Sue
Comment from Nicnac
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Well this entry sure is flavorful. LOL
What a treat! haha
I enjoyed this humorous tale of tail emissions and shark obsessions.
Thanks for the smiles, and best wishes in the contest.
~Nic

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    Hi Nicnac patty-whack! (Couldn't resist).... "tail emissions and shark obsessions" LOL!!! Sounds like a poem beginning to me! Thanks so much for your review. Much appreciated. Sue
Comment from JoAnna Lee
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It's called protein? Eeewww! But, one of the ways of nature. (I wonder if the shark enjoyed it...)

Good Luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing,
Lunch anyone?
Donna

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    Of COURSE he enjoyed it! They eat ANYTHING! LOL!!!! Ewwwwwww! Thanks for contest well-wishes and for your review. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from bkrighter
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Great story. Disgusting story. I wonder, do sharks have taste buds? If they like chum, they can't be too particular about what they eat.


Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    Yes, sad that it can be both great and disgusting! LOL!! Sharks will eat ANYTHING! It's amazing. Thanks so much for stopping by for a read and review. Much appreciated! :-)) Sue
Comment from Aurora C. Borealis
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Ahahaha!!! That shark must've regretted that! I'm impressed that you didn't get a heart attack seeing him jump out to get the turds!
Well written.

~Aurora C. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    I tell you...I jumped! Saw that shark's face not 5 feet from me. Laughed my butt off when I realized what he jumped up for - HA!! Thanks for your kind review (with fun).....Sue
Comment from Fleedleflump
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Haha :-). A great little story. I'm not allowed to use the word "turd" in the house because it makes the girlfriend feel ill, apparently. For me, though, it's one of those words that can't help being funny. Thankyou for the smile :-)

Mike

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2009
    Turd is a good word! HA! If you can't say turd at home, what's the alternative? Medical B.M.? HA!! Raising all those kids, I heard 'em all. Floaters, tootsie rolls, jobbies, dumps....the kids never seemed to run outta names for it! HA!! Can't believe I'm thanking everyone for a review of that turd! HA!!!! Sue
Comment from Minglement
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Shocked! No kidding! This was too funny! Great entry for the contest. Funny how those odd instances come back to help us out, eh? Great job. Good luck.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009

Comment from Domino
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Hi, Sue.
WHAT!!!? The shark jumped up and ate THE BABY? Oh well, no more poo-poo's ta worry about. LMAO.
Seriously, excellent and vivid funny write, and good luck.
Ray xx

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
    THE DINGO TOOK MY BABY!!! LOL!!!!
Comment from Curt Mongold
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Talk about waste management! Now I know what to do when the unexpected happens! Wow, you must have been really surprised by something like that, I know I would be!
Great job cuz!
Curt

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2009

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2009
    I could not believe it. I was still leaning over the boat when he did it! Means he was lurking around the boat the whole time. YIKES! Shocked the heck outta me! And we all laughed all day! HA! Thanks for review, Cuz!