CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 107 "Analyze This"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Paradox Tremors
I liked this and had to give you my vote in the contest. Perfectly written from start to end. To ponder and yearn lets us know we live and strive to be more than our sum.
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I liked this and had to give you my vote in the contest. Perfectly written from start to end. To ponder and yearn lets us know we live and strive to be more than our sum.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from Aurora C. Borealis
Oh, I love this. It's a great poem that fits the requirements of the contest really well. Beautiful that it's a fun read, flowing well.
Best of luck!
~Aurora C. :)
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Oh, I love this. It's a great poem that fits the requirements of the contest really well. Beautiful that it's a fun read, flowing well.
Best of luck!
~Aurora C. :)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
Good execution of the abcdefabcdef rhyme scheme. Yo might want to change the formatting; I believe the directive said "one stanza." Excellent execution of iambic tetrameter. You do have to commit some grammatical oddities (like splitting infinitives--e.g. "to just exist"), but those are very minor concerns. Good juxtaposition of picture (Rodin's "The Thinker", right?) and poem. A very reflective work.
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Good execution of the abcdefabcdef rhyme scheme. Yo might want to change the formatting; I believe the directive said "one stanza." Excellent execution of iambic tetrameter. You do have to commit some grammatical oddities (like splitting infinitives--e.g. "to just exist"), but those are very minor concerns. Good juxtaposition of picture (Rodin's "The Thinker", right?) and poem. A very reflective work.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2009
Comment from Josipher32
I am seeing you all over the place, my friend! This was a well written piece with a consistant rhyme scheme throughout as well as the iambic tetrameter measure. There is some intense competition in this particular contest. The best of luck to you.
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I am seeing you all over the place, my friend! This was a well written piece with a consistant rhyme scheme throughout as well as the iambic tetrameter measure. There is some intense competition in this particular contest. The best of luck to you.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2009
Comment from mslyla216
This is a most interesting rhyme scheme, but it works quite well here and serves to tell a great story. We all need to be a sponge and absorb the world -- and analyze it if we must. Good poem and well written. mslyla
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This is a most interesting rhyme scheme, but it works quite well here and serves to tell a great story. We all need to be a sponge and absorb the world -- and analyze it if we must. Good poem and well written. mslyla
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from joan marie
Terrific contest entry. I hope I learn until I take my last breath. I am fascinated by space and where it begins but I know in my lifetime we will never know. joan marie
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Terrific contest entry. I hope I learn until I take my last breath. I am fascinated by space and where it begins but I know in my lifetime we will never know. joan marie
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"Analyze This" is a beautifully written poem. Good for you who likes to think things through and who is always curious, you have a long life ahead of you and that curiosity will keep your mind forever sharp. Nice poem.
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"Analyze This" is a beautifully written poem. Good for you who likes to think things through and who is always curious, you have a long life ahead of you and that curiosity will keep your mind forever sharp. Nice poem.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2009
Comment from Roisin
What a great poem. I love everything about it. Your rhyme scheme is original and interesting and your meter and flow is great. It's one that sounds great when read aloud. It's also a great topic - over-analysing is not necessarily a bad thing. As you say yourself, there's so much in this world to ponder on, it's good that you take it all in and think about it. Great poem and a great entry to the contest. Good luck.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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What a great poem. I love everything about it. Your rhyme scheme is original and interesting and your meter and flow is great. It's one that sounds great when read aloud. It's also a great topic - over-analysing is not necessarily a bad thing. As you say yourself, there's so much in this world to ponder on, it's good that you take it all in and think about it. Great poem and a great entry to the contest. Good luck.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
Comment from Firefly54
Oh no! You were one of those "Why?" kids weren't you? Asking why to all the questions that grown-ups couldn't, or didn't want to, answer!lol It's a nice poem though. A strange rhyme scheme... I find I've forgotten the first by the time I reach its partner!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Oh no! You were one of those "Why?" kids weren't you? Asking why to all the questions that grown-ups couldn't, or didn't want to, answer!lol It's a nice poem though. A strange rhyme scheme... I find I've forgotten the first by the time I reach its partner!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Ha!! Yes, when you read that first line, damnit...you want to hear that rhyme now! LOL!! Yeah, questions questions. I think that's why people keep telling me even now that I think too much....they only want to talk about things on the surface all the time! Hey, I've got a great sense of humor and love to talk crap a lot, too. But, where's the beef sometimes?! HA!! Thanks for our review. Really appreciate it. :-)) Sue
Comment from Joan E.
We are two peas in a pod. And, you chose my favorite Rodin sculpture to illustrate your poem, as well. (I think you meant "deeply" and "that's all".)
Neat title and colors too.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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We are two peas in a pod. And, you chose my favorite Rodin sculpture to illustrate your poem, as well. (I think you meant "deeply" and "that's all".)
Neat title and colors too.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2009
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Yes, that's what I meant: 'deeply and that's all". But used the word "deep" in prior line. Had to put just a smidgen of sarcastic humor in it, cuz I get tired of people saying I think too much! HA!! Thanks for reviewing. I really appreciate it. :-)) Sue