CSP: A Collection of Poems
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10 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent English sonnet form, in structure, meter and rhyme - and your tribute to the importance of love in life is beautiful - from a child's first cry until the day he dies - it answers all the whys - that came close to making me cry
a touch, a bond, a kiss, our only need - my daughter just returned home yesterday from her Christmas visit, and all I kept wanting to do was reach over and touch her arm, kiss her cheek - you truly capture that feeling - a lovely poem!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2008
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Excellent English sonnet form, in structure, meter and rhyme - and your tribute to the importance of love in life is beautiful - from a child's first cry until the day he dies - it answers all the whys - that came close to making me cry
a touch, a bond, a kiss, our only need - my daughter just returned home yesterday from her Christmas visit, and all I kept wanting to do was reach over and touch her arm, kiss her cheek - you truly capture that feeling - a lovely poem!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2008
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Brooke, so happy you liked it! I have been wanting to try a sonnet and I had an idea for a poem (love), so decided to try it in sonnet. So glad I did. And I'm glad I at least pulled it off (even though I can get better over time!). I am SO glad you shared the feeling of always wanting to reach over and touch and kiss your daughter. That's one thing I do so much! Makes it all worth while! Thanks for your lovely review and all your very kind words. Happy New Year, Brooke.....Sue
Comment from dportwood
Sixteezkid,
This is a very nice sonnet - the gift of love. Your lines are lovely, the rhyming is perfect, the iambic lopes along like it should. A truly enjoyable poem; pleasant, light and easy reading.
Happy New Year.
Duane
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Sixteezkid,
This is a very nice sonnet - the gift of love. Your lines are lovely, the rhyming is perfect, the iambic lopes along like it should. A truly enjoyable poem; pleasant, light and easy reading.
Happy New Year.
Duane
Comment Written 27-Dec-2008
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid
a nice English sonnet did Shakespere (or your muse help you?).
I give you credit to compose unstressed and stressed syllable in the right order take time and talent
thank you for sharing
Gert
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Hello Sixteezkid
a nice English sonnet did Shakespere (or your muse help you?).
I give you credit to compose unstressed and stressed syllable in the right order take time and talent
thank you for sharing
Gert
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
Comment from Hitcher
I think you nailed the iambic Pentameter Sue, very nice, I loved the first stanza and even had to look up sextant. I agree that for most it is a life long goal, unfortunately less and less people actually achieve that goal these days and just settle for happy. I hope you had a great Christmas, I'm just about to take the girls to the Christmas Carnival, so I'm about to be shaken and stirred, JOY! Ha ha
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I think you nailed the iambic Pentameter Sue, very nice, I loved the first stanza and even had to look up sextant. I agree that for most it is a life long goal, unfortunately less and less people actually achieve that goal these days and just settle for happy. I hope you had a great Christmas, I'm just about to take the girls to the Christmas Carnival, so I'm about to be shaken and stirred, JOY! Ha ha
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
Comment from Pitt
Very good! I love the symobolism in the first verse of North being the love we want to steer to.
I also love the line: "A two-edged knife not sheathed will only dull"
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Very good! I love the symobolism in the first verse of North being the love we want to steer to.
I also love the line: "A two-edged knife not sheathed will only dull"
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
Comment from beulahcyn
The poem is exceptional in unity, centering on the topic of a quest, a search, a longing. The poet delineates several kinds of quests, but zeroes in on the quest for "the gift of love" which for him is the "greatest joy of life". When lost however, he expresses in deep despair and probable hiding until the pain heals, but rises again in the lines
"But hope and time ensures the hurt will fade..." The final conclusion that love must be rekindled or the heart suffers dullness (emptiness) that even time cannot heal.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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The poem is exceptional in unity, centering on the topic of a quest, a search, a longing. The poet delineates several kinds of quests, but zeroes in on the quest for "the gift of love" which for him is the "greatest joy of life". When lost however, he expresses in deep despair and probable hiding until the pain heals, but rises again in the lines
"But hope and time ensures the hurt will fade..." The final conclusion that love must be rekindled or the heart suffers dullness (emptiness) that even time cannot heal.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Thank you for your very kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. With much appreciation, Sue
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Thanks for your reply, I think you are a gifted writer and have a lot of creativity still waiting to be released. Merry Christmas!
beulahcyn
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
English Sonnet, 14 lines in lambic pentameter? abab/cdcd/efef/gg? You know this makes no sense to me, Sue. lol I look at these notes and its a whole nother language.
I love the poem, however. The story is fantastic you tell with it and I completely understood each line except the last one. What did that mean? It is a beautifully written poem with terrific word choices. Sometimes I amaze myself with my own dumbness.
Reggie
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Sue,
English Sonnet, 14 lines in lambic pentameter? abab/cdcd/efef/gg? You know this makes no sense to me, Sue. lol I look at these notes and its a whole nother language.
I love the poem, however. The story is fantastic you tell with it and I completely understood each line except the last one. What did that mean? It is a beautifully written poem with terrific word choices. Sometimes I amaze myself with my own dumbness.
Reggie
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Reggie, can you believe the rules and regulations that we are confined to??!! I mean, this is suppression!! ATTICA! ATTICA! HA!!! I am so glad you liked this, Reg. And, of course, happy that you fully understood it (that feeble mind of yours is going to need a bit more poetic exercise!) - I didn't care for the final couplet at the end and changed it. It wasn't you that couldn't get it. It was just wrong. Thanks for your review and I hope you got paid enough on this one. :-)) Sue
Comment from mahejabeen/ nidhi
It is a pretty good poem. The writer in the first paragraph told about the joys of live. and in the second paragraph about the things that fulfill our lives. And in the third and last paragraph the writer told us about the misery of life when we lost the joys, fulfillments and comforts of our lives.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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It is a pretty good poem. The writer in the first paragraph told about the joys of live. and in the second paragraph about the things that fulfill our lives. And in the third and last paragraph the writer told us about the misery of life when we lost the joys, fulfillments and comforts of our lives.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this work. Much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
I like it! You got the style down with a coherent message throughout that speaks to the reader. Great rhyme sheme too.
Awesome cuz!
Curt
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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I like it! You got the style down with a coherent message throughout that speaks to the reader. Great rhyme sheme too.
Awesome cuz!
Curt
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2008
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Hey Cuz, glad you liked it! And thanks for your great review....Sue
Comment from rama devi
IN light of our conversation this morning, it is truly wonderful to read this inspiring and elevating as well as excellently scribed sonnet.
Perfect artwork to match your exquisite metaphor in your superb first stanza!
The greatest joy of life, the gift of love
Will always be the North for which we seek
With sextant in our hearts, we look above
In dark sky's vastness at our hunger's peak.
The message of this is thought provoking and emotionally charged.
Bravo.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
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IN light of our conversation this morning, it is truly wonderful to read this inspiring and elevating as well as excellently scribed sonnet.
Perfect artwork to match your exquisite metaphor in your superb first stanza!
The greatest joy of life, the gift of love
Will always be the North for which we seek
With sextant in our hearts, we look above
In dark sky's vastness at our hunger's peak.
The message of this is thought provoking and emotionally charged.
Bravo.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 26-Dec-2008