CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from jmyron
I don't know anything about the 'triolet' format, but I love the content of your poem. My only observation is that the key factor is YOU. The person going through this situation. One can descend into despair, or, like you, 'tough it out, and do all youo can to make it better.
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I don't know anything about the 'triolet' format, but I love the content of your poem. My only observation is that the key factor is YOU. The person going through this situation. One can descend into despair, or, like you, 'tough it out, and do all youo can to make it better.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from Vallachi
Our burdens lift! They always do.
And hours of fear give way to hope.
Oh I like this way of doing a poem
it has such flow and I also like the way you wrote it and the words you used to describe
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Our burdens lift! They always do.
And hours of fear give way to hope.
Oh I like this way of doing a poem
it has such flow and I also like the way you wrote it and the words you used to describe
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from LadyMary
This triolet is very well done, and the words do engender a wonderful sense of hope. You make it all sound so logical. Rhyme is good also. Well done. LadyMary
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This triolet is very well done, and the words do engender a wonderful sense of hope. You make it all sound so logical. Rhyme is good also. Well done. LadyMary
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from Adam Smith
Perfect form here and a wonderful poem that doesn't sound in the least bit redundant. The words are worthy of being repeated and no truer words have been spoken. Hope is everything, akin to faith, and all we need to see us through. Sincerely, Adam
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Perfect form here and a wonderful poem that doesn't sound in the least bit redundant. The words are worthy of being repeated and no truer words have been spoken. Hope is everything, akin to faith, and all we need to see us through. Sincerely, Adam
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from Firefly54
Thanks very much for you authors notes, without which I would have said that I didn't like the repetition. Well... now I know why the repetition, but I still don't like it, lol! However, your poem confirms with them as it should, and within this form it is both uplifting and attractively worded, so well done!
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Thanks very much for you authors notes, without which I would have said that I didn't like the repetition. Well... now I know why the repetition, but I still don't like it, lol! However, your poem confirms with them as it should, and within this form it is both uplifting and attractively worded, so well done!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from tator tot
I enjoyed the format and subject matter of your poem. I was glad that you inserted author notes for those of us trying to expand our knowledge of poetry forms. The repetition in the poem added to the message that "things will pass". Thank you.
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I enjoyed the format and subject matter of your poem. I was glad that you inserted author notes for those of us trying to expand our knowledge of poetry forms. The repetition in the poem added to the message that "things will pass". Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from allborn66
You picked a great theme for this poetic form. It was quite enjoyable. I like the flow of this poem, and the message. The picture is a nice choice.
Barbara
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You picked a great theme for this poetic form. It was quite enjoyable. I like the flow of this poem, and the message. The picture is a nice choice.
Barbara
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from sara-beth
These are wise words, and so very true. No matter what, there is always tomorrow. And you're right, even the most horrible times will pass, and hope will prevail. Awesome!
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These are wise words, and so very true. No matter what, there is always tomorrow. And you're right, even the most horrible times will pass, and hope will prevail. Awesome!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from Poetic Friend
Sue,
This is a positive, uplifting poem, all weaved in a eloquent poetic form -- the triolet.
My favorite line is the main refrain line: Our burdens lift! They always do.
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Sue,
This is a positive, uplifting poem, all weaved in a eloquent poetic form -- the triolet.
My favorite line is the main refrain line: Our burdens lift! They always do.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2008
Comment from kassey
I really like this form of poetry, the rhyming seems so much more enhanced by the repetition of the lines. This is about how our friends help lift our burdens and our spirits with them, Lovely poem Kay
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I really like this form of poetry, the rhyming seems so much more enhanced by the repetition of the lines. This is about how our friends help lift our burdens and our spirits with them, Lovely poem Kay
Comment Written 17-Dec-2008