CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 129 "Is it Possible"A collection of poetry
60 total reviews
Comment from Roisin
Okay, you've sold me on free verse. This is so beautiful. Your words flow beautifully and you immediately grab the reader in by asking a question. I do love the structure of the short lines.
It feels as though you're going on a journey through life and bringing us along with you. I can't imagine being able to write a free verse like this. It terrifies me.
I really enjoyed it.
Roisin
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Okay, you've sold me on free verse. This is so beautiful. Your words flow beautifully and you immediately grab the reader in by asking a question. I do love the structure of the short lines.
It feels as though you're going on a journey through life and bringing us along with you. I can't imagine being able to write a free verse like this. It terrifies me.
I really enjoyed it.
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from giftid3
Well for me, I enjoyed the read and the messages your words gave life to of one journeying through life, querying and pondering all that surrounds and even to the things given as a way of life. There is a release at every avenue of the bondages and restraints that life has placed upon one, and all the while curiosity reigns to seek answers to those unanswered and unasked questions. The expressions to share, to love, to accept, to embrace, all in the purity of heart, mind and soul, flow through this, while a cry for guidance, direction, discipline and security flit in and out of the lines. One who is bound and does not know which way to turn or where to go to be freed without guilt and shame, and the pondering ... is there such a place and is it possible to be free.
I comment on the message and imagery that I receive rather than look at the format, structure, meter, rhyme, etc, etc, and so cannot comment in this area. Sorry about that. All in all though, I enjoyed what you have expressed here and the many concepts, views and thoughts that have been compiled to create this artwork of imagery through words. Thanks and many blessings to you
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Well for me, I enjoyed the read and the messages your words gave life to of one journeying through life, querying and pondering all that surrounds and even to the things given as a way of life. There is a release at every avenue of the bondages and restraints that life has placed upon one, and all the while curiosity reigns to seek answers to those unanswered and unasked questions. The expressions to share, to love, to accept, to embrace, all in the purity of heart, mind and soul, flow through this, while a cry for guidance, direction, discipline and security flit in and out of the lines. One who is bound and does not know which way to turn or where to go to be freed without guilt and shame, and the pondering ... is there such a place and is it possible to be free.
I comment on the message and imagery that I receive rather than look at the format, structure, meter, rhyme, etc, etc, and so cannot comment in this area. Sorry about that. All in all though, I enjoyed what you have expressed here and the many concepts, views and thoughts that have been compiled to create this artwork of imagery through words. Thanks and many blessings to you
Comment Written 15-Dec-2008
Comment from Terror2s
This was a thought-provoking poem. Your chosen punctuation worked very well in this piece. I am sure we will be reading more free verse from you. Terror
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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This was a thought-provoking poem. Your chosen punctuation worked very well in this piece. I am sure we will be reading more free verse from you. Terror
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Terror2s, I am so glad you enjoyed this piece. I know that I have enjoyed my writing my two free verses. Was a great experience! Thanks very much for your great review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from fastdigits
An interesting poem that
starts out asking a question
as to a number of different
things.
It is well crafted and
really artistically done,
and evidently written from
the heart.
As long as you put down in
print your true feelings they
have a way of coming through
to the reader and one can
sense the sensitivity that
go along with the very
questions you ask.
Well done
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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An interesting poem that
starts out asking a question
as to a number of different
things.
It is well crafted and
really artistically done,
and evidently written from
the heart.
As long as you put down in
print your true feelings they
have a way of coming through
to the reader and one can
sense the sensitivity that
go along with the very
questions you ask.
Well done
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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fastdigits, I am so glad you could feel that this was from the heart and soul. I really enjoyed writing like this. Thank you for your very kind comments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from allborn66
This is a very nice poem. It seems free verse to me. It evokes wonderful and strong emotions. I really like your questions. The picture is nice.
Barbara
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This is a very nice poem. It seems free verse to me. It evokes wonderful and strong emotions. I really like your questions. The picture is nice.
Barbara
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
Comment from Charles Keith
Yes Kid,
This is free verse and a very good example.
I don'tknow what other are telling you in their eviews - I haven't looked yet, but believe me free verse is not poetry for lazy poets.
I offers the freedom for passion, emotion and expression on a different level and with greater drama often than with rhyming poems.
You only have to hear this form read by a good reader to understand this.
You can punctuate or not -- you can choose but often it is punctuated. But I would not recommend half punctuated work. All or nothing is the best policy.
I can see already you have realised the artistic freedom free verse offers from your notes.
Enjoy it!
Best Wishes
Keith
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Yes Kid,
This is free verse and a very good example.
I don'tknow what other are telling you in their eviews - I haven't looked yet, but believe me free verse is not poetry for lazy poets.
I offers the freedom for passion, emotion and expression on a different level and with greater drama often than with rhyming poems.
You only have to hear this form read by a good reader to understand this.
You can punctuate or not -- you can choose but often it is punctuated. But I would not recommend half punctuated work. All or nothing is the best policy.
I can see already you have realised the artistic freedom free verse offers from your notes.
Enjoy it!
Best Wishes
Keith
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
Comment from Journey woman
This is really good. I love free verse and found the use of the words and points made captivating.
Punctuation is pretty much up to you and generally used to create the emotion or point if needed. Free verse should read like a poem but does not have to rhyme all the way through. Walt Whitman is an excellent example of free verse. It is said he created the genre.
Best of luck to you and good job. I find it challenging and I do love the freedom.
Journey Woman
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This is really good. I love free verse and found the use of the words and points made captivating.
Punctuation is pretty much up to you and generally used to create the emotion or point if needed. Free verse should read like a poem but does not have to rhyme all the way through. Walt Whitman is an excellent example of free verse. It is said he created the genre.
Best of luck to you and good job. I find it challenging and I do love the freedom.
Journey Woman
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
You did a wonderful job on this. Isn't it great to take your mind for a walk, unshackled with no boundaries. I love it! I found no errors.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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You did a wonderful job on this. Isn't it great to take your mind for a walk, unshackled with no boundaries. I love it! I found no errors.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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El Gato, I have found just what you said, "unshackled with no boundaries" and I'm LOVIN' it! Thanks for those cool remarks! .....now..I'm gonna take my mind out for a walk HA!! :-)) Sue
Comment from Miska
So many questions, who has the answers. I'm no expert on any format in poetry far less free verse, but I know I enjoyed reading this very much. thank you for sharing .regards Miska
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So many questions, who has the answers. I'm no expert on any format in poetry far less free verse, but I know I enjoyed reading this very much. thank you for sharing .regards Miska
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
Comment from TheDon
Great poem. My favorite line (only because it hits so close to home) is: To give while not/giving away
I hope this helps and good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Great poem. My favorite line (only because it hits so close to home) is: To give while not/giving away
I hope this helps and good luck.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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TheDon, I'm so glad you liked this poem. Thank you for saying which is your favorite line; always great to see that! And for your very kind review. With regards, Sue