CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 134 "He's For Me"A collection of poetry
33 total reviews
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
Enjoyed your poem. Thought the wording was excellent and it read well.
Great job. No Spag noted or other suggestions to offer
Brian S Pratt
fantasy author
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Enjoyed your poem. Thought the wording was excellent and it read well.
Great job. No Spag noted or other suggestions to offer
Brian S Pratt
fantasy author
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Brian, thanks for reading this work. I appreciate your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from ulster3
Hello Sixteez.
Excellent in form of vers beaucoup. A beautifully worded rhythmic poem. Yes, Curt is extremely creative and seems so very nice. fondly, rebecca
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Hello Sixteez.
Excellent in form of vers beaucoup. A beautifully worded rhythmic poem. Yes, Curt is extremely creative and seems so very nice. fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I just HAD to make the attempt! It was fun to write. Like a "quick-step" dance - Ha! So glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from raimie
I really like this poem. It has a great rhythm and a great subject. i also like that it shows the evolution of this womens broken heart and her ability to get back ou there after a bruised heart. Very well written.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I really like this poem. It has a great rhythm and a great subject. i also like that it shows the evolution of this womens broken heart and her ability to get back ou there after a bruised heart. Very well written.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Raime, so glad you enjoyed this work. I also loved writing with that pace. Thank you for your very kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from giftid3
Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
I enjoyed reading this and the imagery that came forth of one who meets someone that causes butterfiles to rise in the stomach, the heart to pound faster, the cheeks to flush and the knees to go weak. Love blossoms in passionate embraces, and then its over. And boy is it over. He was not true, was after one thing only, got what he wanted and was soon gone. Life becomes shattered and love becomes heartbreak and heartache, with a resolve that you will never venture there again.
And then one day, your eyes meet, the flutters begin, the flushing appears, and the knees wobble. Love has blossomed again.
Amazing isn't it how our emotions rule our lives instead of us ruling our emotions. If we had more control, we would know what love is, what lust is and what excited hormones are, not by feelings but by actions, behaviours and attitudes. Kindred spirits meet on a level that transcends any feelings and those not kindred meet emotionally in lust turned love. The results tell for themselves at the end of it all, when it either falls apart or it blossoms and grows.
This was well worded and expressed with a good flow and rhythmn. The imagery was clear and distinct showing love found, love lost and love found again.
Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
I enjoyed reading this and the imagery that came forth of one who meets someone that causes butterfiles to rise in the stomach, the heart to pound faster, the cheeks to flush and the knees to go weak. Love blossoms in passionate embraces, and then its over. And boy is it over. He was not true, was after one thing only, got what he wanted and was soon gone. Life becomes shattered and love becomes heartbreak and heartache, with a resolve that you will never venture there again.
And then one day, your eyes meet, the flutters begin, the flushing appears, and the knees wobble. Love has blossomed again.
Amazing isn't it how our emotions rule our lives instead of us ruling our emotions. If we had more control, we would know what love is, what lust is and what excited hormones are, not by feelings but by actions, behaviours and attitudes. Kindred spirits meet on a level that transcends any feelings and those not kindred meet emotionally in lust turned love. The results tell for themselves at the end of it all, when it either falls apart or it blossoms and grows.
This was well worded and expressed with a good flow and rhythmn. The imagery was clear and distinct showing love found, love lost and love found again.
Many blessings to you
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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giftid, thank you so much for sharing all your thoughts on this very weird thing called "falling in love"!! Chemistry, baby, chemistry -ha!! It is so primal that it takes over. And don't it feel good (for awhile)..... Thanks for your most generous review and sharing your thoughts. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from honeytree
"Not too late, make a date.
No debate, he's first rate!
I'm not meek, so I'll seek,
cheek-to-cheek , his warm kiss
not to miss all the bliss
we will share, while we bare.
Heart was bruised, felt confused
so misused, now diffused.
Letting go was so slow.
Now I know I can taste
and replace love's embrace.
Damn! Here I am.
Love your smile, stay awhile
(like his style, he's worthwhile!)
Hold my hand and we'll stand
near the band. We can dance
take a chance; make romance.
It's begun. Now we're one.
Amazing how one can find the right partner
in life.I feel we know straight away at least that is how my husband and I met. Been married for 35 years now.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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"Not too late, make a date.
No debate, he's first rate!
I'm not meek, so I'll seek,
cheek-to-cheek , his warm kiss
not to miss all the bliss
we will share, while we bare.
Heart was bruised, felt confused
so misused, now diffused.
Letting go was so slow.
Now I know I can taste
and replace love's embrace.
Damn! Here I am.
Love your smile, stay awhile
(like his style, he's worthwhile!)
Hold my hand and we'll stand
near the band. We can dance
take a chance; make romance.
It's begun. Now we're one.
Amazing how one can find the right partner
in life.I feel we know straight away at least that is how my husband and I met. Been married for 35 years now.
Honeytree
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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That is wonderful, Honeytree! You had 'love at first sight'. So glad you enjoyed this poem! With regards, Sue
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I am glad you liked this review.I enjoyed reading this. Honeytree
Comment from Rar22
I really, really loved this. You weave the form constraints so well into the poem itself, you make it seem very easy. The photograph and presentation are beautiful, and each rhyme carries meaning and moves the poem along, rather than simply being needed for structure. Awesome job.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I really, really loved this. You weave the form constraints so well into the poem itself, you make it seem very easy. The photograph and presentation are beautiful, and each rhyme carries meaning and moves the poem along, rather than simply being needed for structure. Awesome job.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Rar22, Very, very kind review. Thank you so much. Am so glad you like it! You're right....not easy. A lot of syllable counting and re-counting! HA!! And thanks for your encouraging words. With regards, Sue
Comment from NightWriter
"He's For Me" is a beautifully written poem that carried a beat as I read it. Poem has perfect rhythm, almost musical. It reads smooth and has perfect rhyming as well. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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"He's For Me" is a beautifully written poem that carried a beat as I read it. Poem has perfect rhythm, almost musical. It reads smooth and has perfect rhyming as well. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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NightWriter, thank you for your great review. So glad you liked it! I have to say that I really enjoyed writing it! Glad Curt turned us all onto his "vers beaucoup"! Regards, Sue
Comment from starman
Vers Beaucoup .. That's a fancy rhyme scheme. You rweally pull it of here. The verse kind of dances along to the image you have represented.
Excellent.
:)s
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Vers Beaucoup .. That's a fancy rhyme scheme. You rweally pull it of here. The verse kind of dances along to the image you have represented.
Excellent.
:)s
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hey starman, thanks for your very kind review. So glad you enjoyed it! Regards, Sue
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Forgot to fill you in, as I only just learned this. Curt Mongold invented this poetry form! How cool!
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written fast cadence that makes for a good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. You do have a talent for poetry. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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A very well written fast cadence that makes for a good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. You do have a talent for poetry. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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It was a lot of fun to write at that pace! Thank you so much for your very kind review and for your most encouraging words! With regards, Sue
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You're welcome, Sue. Charlie
Comment from Kaze
Ahh yes... everyone experiences this fear after being wounded because their trust was misused. However, you're right--it's an undeniable feeling.. when the time comes, we all fall in love, whether we want to or not.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Ahh yes... everyone experiences this fear after being wounded because their trust was misused. However, you're right--it's an undeniable feeling.. when the time comes, we all fall in love, whether we want to or not.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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What's a gal to do?? Ha! Now, if only I could look that good dancing! Thanks for your great review and comments. Sue