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A collection of poetry

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Comment from luna
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I love acrostics but haven't written one in awhile. You did a good job with this one. Depression is a tough topic to tackle, and a hard thing to be saddled with. Good luck to you. Keep writing.

Yours,

Luna *smile*

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008

Comment from Eternal Muse
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Oh, how wonderful, those words. You describe depression to a "t". Excellent word choices and so true for this debilitating illness. Thoroughly enjoyed this write.

I also wrote an acrostic on depression here on FS, back in 2006, this is why yours daught my attention. Here is the link to mine:

http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=109973&userid=154806&tf=0

What do they say about great minds thinking alike? (smile).

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
    OMG....just read yours! Oh yeah......we know what all that means! Love this line: Entry into a world of famous Black Rose Society - brilliant stroke of the pen there. Loved all of it!! Thanks so much for your review here. And glad you liked it! With regards, Sue
Comment from Valerie Julia Ann
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The artwork reminds me of brain neurons, and that's probably why you chose this particular piece. Depression is a terrible thing to go through, but you did a great write on the acrostic. I can't find anything to critique. Valerie

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2008

Comment from c_lucas
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A well written acrostic poem that has a very good cadence which makes for an easy read. It has good imagery and descriptive scheme. Depression can kill the spirit and, if unchecked, the soul. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008

Comment from JoAnna Lee
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Well done... not forced. Read a bit rough, adding to the sense of the depression. Good description.
I wish you well in the contest.

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    JoAnna, thank you for this kind review. And your comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from jamar2
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Loveley Acrostic on this subject of depression, many of use have been there before so one knows what you are saying and you have done this well,good luck with your entry.
jamar.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    jamar, thank you for your very kind review and specific comments. And for your well-wishes in the contest. Most sincerely, Sue
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    jamar, thank you for your very kind review and specific comments. And for your well-wishes in the contest. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
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I like the abstract way this piece floats on the ocean of it's meaning, like flotsam on the ocean of life. It is a very nice acrostic, and I love the way you put this together in an almost chaotic, yet organized way, very similar to depression itself.
Kudos and good luck!
Sincerely,
Curt

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Curt, always love your reviews, as I appreciate your critique and specifics. Thanks for your kind review and well-wishes in the contest! Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from dportwood
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Sixteezkid,

I like the the structure of this acrostic with its unusual rhyming scheme. My favorite line - Spilt guilt getting through.

Nicely done and good luck in the contest.

Duane

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Duane, thanks so much for highlighting the line that you liked! I like getting that kind of feedback. I thank you for your great review and well-wishes in the contest! With regards, Sue
Comment from jmyron
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Depression is such a useless emotion. Unfortunatly, many people are afflicted by it. It is a spiderweb surrounding you. You can almost see the way out, but the sticky strands pull and tug on your emotions making it all the harder to escape.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    It's bloody useless!! ha! But, unfortunately, many are afflicted. Thank you so much for your very kind review and I'm glad you liked this piece. With regards, Sue
Comment from okiboy
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I thought this poem captures a meaning of the picture. There seems to be a lot of chaos in the mind, just as the picture. It is reasonable that this is what cause depression, as well. This was a very enjoyable poem to read and think about. Thanks!

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2008


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2008
    Thanks, okiboy, for your very kind review and I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. With regards, Sue