Whispers
Darkness In All51 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Wow! This is really dark,
a bit on the heavy side for
my taste, but I'm the first
to admit, it is cleverly thoughtout
and presented.....
Regards,
Margaret.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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Wow! This is really dark,
a bit on the heavy side for
my taste, but I'm the first
to admit, it is cleverly thoughtout
and presented.....
Regards,
Margaret.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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thank you for such a kind review, I do appreciate it...dklrd
Comment from AWorkInProgress
Hello, dark poet friend. I'm kinda dark myself. :)
Ok.. I know poems can be interpreted in different ways. so I may be way of base in MY interpretation.. but that's ok.
As you long for passion, you take it from her watching her beg(almost stealing her soul so to speak.. )
I love it!(Hope I'm not totally and completely off track.)
I really enjoyed reading this poem anyway take care,
~Kris~
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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Hello, dark poet friend. I'm kinda dark myself. :)
Ok.. I know poems can be interpreted in different ways. so I may be way of base in MY interpretation.. but that's ok.
As you long for passion, you take it from her watching her beg(almost stealing her soul so to speak.. )
I love it!(Hope I'm not totally and completely off track.)
I really enjoyed reading this poem anyway take care,
~Kris~
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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WOW!!!!! thank you so very much for this rating. I am humbled by your comments and love your insight on this piece. thank you so very much...dark Lord
Comment from Koba
Very good! Not usually my cup of tea but there is no doubt that it is well thought out and written. Very good dark imagery. The only correction I might offer is alleyways instead of allyways.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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Very good! Not usually my cup of tea but there is no doubt that it is well thought out and written. Very good dark imagery. The only correction I might offer is alleyways instead of allyways.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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thank you so very much for stopping by and reviewing this piece...dark lord
Comment from jeslaf
I can't say I like the sentiment, but boy do I like the powerful darkness you were able to portray by your use of strong language and imagery. The line "I taste the scent of your passion/Within the bowels of my soul." reminds me of an animalistic/hunter instinct, primal almost. The line "I rip the safety net From beneath you, swallow you," is downright s-c-a-r-y, as is the last stanza in its entirety. Great work, dark dude!
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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I can't say I like the sentiment, but boy do I like the powerful darkness you were able to portray by your use of strong language and imagery. The line "I taste the scent of your passion/Within the bowels of my soul." reminds me of an animalistic/hunter instinct, primal almost. The line "I rip the safety net From beneath you, swallow you," is downright s-c-a-r-y, as is the last stanza in its entirety. Great work, dark dude!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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WOW!!! thank you for such a great review of this piece. I am pretty proud of how it turned out. thanks again for stopping by...dark lord
Comment from G.B. Smith
Watching you fall to your knees,
Begging for life and love.
I stare into your eyes and
Welcome you to the legion of many.
Dark and malinging work here. You have crafted it to fit you life's thoughts. Although I disagree with its premise, I applaud it for imagination
Bear
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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Watching you fall to your knees,
Begging for life and love.
I stare into your eyes and
Welcome you to the legion of many.
Dark and malinging work here. You have crafted it to fit you life's thoughts. Although I disagree with its premise, I applaud it for imagination
Bear
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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thank you for stopping by and reviewing this piece, I do appreciate the kind words...dark lord
Comment from CARoseKlix
I like the gloom and doom rhythm of this poem with its shadowy nature. 2nd stanza 2nd line is it 'alleyways'? If so, it needs the 'e'. My favorite line is 'I taste the scent of your passion."
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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I like the gloom and doom rhythm of this poem with its shadowy nature. 2nd stanza 2nd line is it 'alleyways'? If so, it needs the 'e'. My favorite line is 'I taste the scent of your passion."
Comment Written 29-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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thank you for the kind review, I do appreciate it...dklrd
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Sometimes I wonder about your writing and where they come from my friend -- any one with any sense would run screaming to the lord for forgiveness and be ever so afraid of the eternal darkness. Another great write.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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Sometimes I wonder about your writing and where they come from my friend -- any one with any sense would run screaming to the lord for forgiveness and be ever so afraid of the eternal darkness. Another great write.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2008
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thank you so very much for stopping by and reviewing this piece, I greatly appreciate the kindness...dklrd
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Dkirdmcches ........
You have written as you claim - on the dark side.
From a writing point of view, there is one correction to be made ........
* You have - Allyways .... which should be - Alleyways .....
Your words are very descriptive and poetic and, no doubt, you know what prompted you to write this work.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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Hullo Dkirdmcches ........
You have written as you claim - on the dark side.
From a writing point of view, there is one correction to be made ........
* You have - Allyways .... which should be - Alleyways .....
Your words are very descriptive and poetic and, no doubt, you know what prompted you to write this work.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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thanks for the very cool review, very appreciated...dklrd
Comment from starman
Nesting the offspring in her heart. Now, that was very sweet. Dark indeed. I could almost imagine all them bugs coming out of her eyes.
Very juicy
:)s
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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Nesting the offspring in her heart. Now, that was very sweet. Dark indeed. I could almost imagine all them bugs coming out of her eyes.
Very juicy
:)s
Comment Written 28-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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thanks for the very cool review, always appreciated...dklrd
Comment from giftid3
Very interesting. The imagery you have painted shows confusion and control wrapped up in images of gossipy darkness, while passions rise to enslave. The world of the darkness obliterates the daytime scenarios and transforms everyone and everything into misfits of society and life. Still if you ponder even longer you can come up with other imagery surrounding unrequited love, lust and obligation amidst a nonchalant attitude to life. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent with the rest of us. I enjoy reading your works. Thanks for the experience. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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Very interesting. The imagery you have painted shows confusion and control wrapped up in images of gossipy darkness, while passions rise to enslave. The world of the darkness obliterates the daytime scenarios and transforms everyone and everything into misfits of society and life. Still if you ponder even longer you can come up with other imagery surrounding unrequited love, lust and obligation amidst a nonchalant attitude to life. Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful talent with the rest of us. I enjoy reading your works. Thanks for the experience. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 28-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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WOW!!! thank you for such an insightful review of this piece. I was not sure how it was going to play out as I was writing it, but it turned out much better than I had planned...dklrd
