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Comment from lindalcreel
Well we already know how that turned out. did you really work for that cardiologist. My husband sees a group here and there is one in the group that has questionable skills. Thankfully I always had a big mouth, and I watched him closely. Most of the doc's I worked with were great, but there have been a few that I wouldn't let touch me. Working at a large teaching hospital we always had interns every June. I remember a patient in severe CHF one day -difficulty breathing and his skin was mottled above the knee, and I'm telling the resident to turn off the iv fluid. The intern was in the room and we both heard her say it was alright to run the fluid because his blood pressure wasn't high. I looked at her like she had three heads and thankfully I had already ordered a stat chest xray. When the results came back she came running into the room and told me to turn off the iv fluid. She didn't know that I had already turned it off when she walked out of the room. We gave him a heavy dose of lasix and sent him to ICU. The intern and I became fast friends because he trusted me after that. One of many stories. My husband flew med-evacs and I told everyone if I have chest pain call my husband. That woman is never going to touch me. True story. I'm sure you've got a few yourself. Of course I knew some nurses that I didn't want to touch me either. lol
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Well we already know how that turned out. did you really work for that cardiologist. My husband sees a group here and there is one in the group that has questionable skills. Thankfully I always had a big mouth, and I watched him closely. Most of the doc's I worked with were great, but there have been a few that I wouldn't let touch me. Working at a large teaching hospital we always had interns every June. I remember a patient in severe CHF one day -difficulty breathing and his skin was mottled above the knee, and I'm telling the resident to turn off the iv fluid. The intern was in the room and we both heard her say it was alright to run the fluid because his blood pressure wasn't high. I looked at her like she had three heads and thankfully I had already ordered a stat chest xray. When the results came back she came running into the room and told me to turn off the iv fluid. She didn't know that I had already turned it off when she walked out of the room. We gave him a heavy dose of lasix and sent him to ICU. The intern and I became fast friends because he trusted me after that. One of many stories. My husband flew med-evacs and I told everyone if I have chest pain call my husband. That woman is never going to touch me. True story. I'm sure you've got a few yourself. Of course I knew some nurses that I didn't want to touch me either. lol
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks , Linda. I never worked with a doctor as bad as Tamayo--but I knew quite a few.-D
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:)
Comment from allborn66
This is an interesting chapter. I like the pacing. The dialogue sounds believable. There seems to be great potential in the circumstances.
Barbara
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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This is an interesting chapter. I like the pacing. The dialogue sounds believable. There seems to be great potential in the circumstances.
Barbara
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Thanks Barbara--glad your still reading.-D
Comment from Millibrad
Dialogue between Laura and Michael flows nicely and grabs me enough for me to care what happens to them. It would help to create the setting where the conversation is taking place; something more than he has just returned home. Give us some visuals. For example, where were they before Laura "walked to the kitchen."
A couple of things need your attention:
"(You're) mother just died in her sleep" change to "your"
rediculous (sp)change to "ridiculous"
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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Dialogue between Laura and Michael flows nicely and grabs me enough for me to care what happens to them. It would help to create the setting where the conversation is taking place; something more than he has just returned home. Give us some visuals. For example, where were they before Laura "walked to the kitchen."
A couple of things need your attention:
"(You're) mother just died in her sleep" change to "your"
rediculous (sp)change to "ridiculous"
Comment Written 31-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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Milibrand---Much appreciated--don't think I've had reply from you previously. Thanks for corrections on typos. Hope you'll read more--describing home location is a good idea.-Thanks-Doug
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh oh Michael is about to meet Dr. Tamayo. Hopefully he will be cautioned before he actually hits surgery. He's lucky he is not dead already though.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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Oh oh Michael is about to meet Dr. Tamayo. Hopefully he will be cautioned before he actually hits surgery. He's lucky he is not dead already though.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2013
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Thanks G---as always--appreciated.-----------D
Comment from witness4HIM
Well Michael finally realizes he is in need of a heart doctor. thanks to his wife
He has all signs to watch.
Another super chapter following this family and the people involved with them.
Oh, no, this is the wrong doctor.........
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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Well Michael finally realizes he is in need of a heart doctor. thanks to his wife
He has all signs to watch.
Another super chapter following this family and the people involved with them.
Oh, no, this is the wrong doctor.........
Comment Written 13-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2013
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ditto
Comment from R.E. A.
I remember this story. It's been a while since I originally read it, but I instantly remembered the beginning as I started reading. This chapter has great dialogue and is a great setup for upcoming chapters.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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I remember this story. It's been a while since I originally read it, but I instantly remembered the beginning as I started reading. This chapter has great dialogue and is a great setup for upcoming chapters.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Hi REA----Thanks much. I'll be posting more chapters soon--hope you'll get a chance to read more---Doug
Comment from babylonia
definitely another good chapter. i did have some questions. i saw a few spaggies.
was usually breathing easier by the time he made it home. (change easy to easier, change he got home to he made it home. sounds easier)
no, not tamayo ... LOL yeah, i remember mr. shiny new car, kill my patient with a shot of air tamayo. hmmm .... the plot thickens.
since the mother died in a previous chapter, maybe you should say ...
if you happen to talk to my dad
stupid that your dad
dad should probably be capitalized.
imagery is excellent. made me smile when she kept insisting. i am glad michael listened to her, maybe.
barbara
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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definitely another good chapter. i did have some questions. i saw a few spaggies.
was usually breathing easier by the time he made it home. (change easy to easier, change he got home to he made it home. sounds easier)
no, not tamayo ... LOL yeah, i remember mr. shiny new car, kill my patient with a shot of air tamayo. hmmm .... the plot thickens.
since the mother died in a previous chapter, maybe you should say ...
if you happen to talk to my dad
stupid that your dad
dad should probably be capitalized.
imagery is excellent. made me smile when she kept insisting. i am glad michael listened to her, maybe.
barbara
Comment Written 05-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Thanks again Barb-----Oops---i forgot his mother was dead---Thanks---Doug
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doug,
no worries, LOL that's why i'm here.
keep up the good work. it does sound like the son, the mother and the daughter all have a piece of the puzzle .... something with their hearts.
barbara
can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment from William Walz
i can't say that i have read any of the other chapters but this one is nicely done and illustrates the concerns and warning signs of us cardiac patients--myself included--at those first signs of trouble. i'll have to go back and look at some of the previous chapters. well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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i can't say that i have read any of the other chapters but this one is nicely done and illustrates the concerns and warning signs of us cardiac patients--myself included--at those first signs of trouble. i'll have to go back and look at some of the previous chapters. well done.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Thanks www. appreciate your comments. Hope you can read more--will post another chapter soon. ----Doug
Comment from Spiraleye
Pretty good use of dialog here, although there is a lot of repetition, and the conversation is monotone. Make it go up an octave.
example: ?Okay, I suppose so. Alright, whatever you say, Laura.?
Try this:
Mike: I suppose so...
Laura: storms into the room "you suppose so!"
Mike: "Ok, ok, whatever you say...."
This creates a bit of drama and make the conversation less monotone??
So, what's wrong with him :) Guess I'll have to wait till' next time
Good luck - Spiraleye
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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Pretty good use of dialog here, although there is a lot of repetition, and the conversation is monotone. Make it go up an octave.
example: ?Okay, I suppose so. Alright, whatever you say, Laura.?
Try this:
Mike: I suppose so...
Laura: storms into the room "you suppose so!"
Mike: "Ok, ok, whatever you say...."
This creates a bit of drama and make the conversation less monotone??
So, what's wrong with him :) Guess I'll have to wait till' next time
Good luck - Spiraleye
Comment Written 05-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
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HI SE----Thanks for review and comments---I'll check out my dialogue---Thanks again---hope you'll read more--will post another chapter soon. ---Doug
Comment from Earthwriter
i think this sends a powerful message to all to take symptoms seriously very reall write my friend i enjoyed it left me wanting more
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2008
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i think this sends a powerful message to all to take symptoms seriously very reall write my friend i enjoyed it left me wanting more
Comment Written 05-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2008
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Hi EW---Thank you! I'm inspired. ---Doug
