We Could Go Dancing
a nice harmonic song that lollops and lopes along18 total reviews
Comment from Pacinogal
MRGRUNTY,
WHAT A MAGNIFICENT SONG. IT'S GOT THE CORRECT SET-UP
CHORUS, ETC. IT IS WRITTEN VERY WELL.
YOU EVEN HAVE THE INSTRUMENTAL BREAK!
GREAT JOB.
PACINOGAL
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2007
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MRGRUNTY,
WHAT A MAGNIFICENT SONG. IT'S GOT THE CORRECT SET-UP
CHORUS, ETC. IT IS WRITTEN VERY WELL.
YOU EVEN HAVE THE INSTRUMENTAL BREAK!
GREAT JOB.
PACINOGAL
Comment Written 14-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2007
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Hi again and again I find myself thanking you profusely!! LOL
Cheers
grant
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THAT'S OK, YOUR WELCOME ...IT IS WELL DESERVED OVER AND OVER AND OVER AGAIN. lol
KATHY
Comment from weirdcarbon
How refreshing! I love this. My favourite bit is the word "lope" in your notes! Ha ha!
I did not detect any SPAG! Well written, flows beautifully, this is so tender and has so much soul. Thank you for putting it up for review.
"for the spark in your tongue,
and the grey in your hair." ...so cool.
I think these lines are very original and particularly resonant and charming and strong:
"Chance upon the mystery,
of dance indulgent history.
The last remaining versions
of your face"
But I love the whole thing. Wow. I wonder what the melody is? (trying to imagine an Australian "lollop" ;) Anyway. Good job here! Thanks again. Very interested to see/hear more
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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How refreshing! I love this. My favourite bit is the word "lope" in your notes! Ha ha!
I did not detect any SPAG! Well written, flows beautifully, this is so tender and has so much soul. Thank you for putting it up for review.
"for the spark in your tongue,
and the grey in your hair." ...so cool.
I think these lines are very original and particularly resonant and charming and strong:
"Chance upon the mystery,
of dance indulgent history.
The last remaining versions
of your face"
But I love the whole thing. Wow. I wonder what the melody is? (trying to imagine an Australian "lollop" ;) Anyway. Good job here! Thanks again. Very interested to see/hear more
Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Hi there my ex scouser mate! LOL
Thanks for the great and original review!
I have a stacked portfolio if you dare to have a squiz at it...Take a torch, it can get dark in there. hehe
again many thanks!
cheers
grant
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a "squiz" ... a "squiz"? .. Hmm? Where the hell d'you guys get these ridiculous words from? I luv it!! Ha ha!! How dare you mention teh "S" word in polite international company!! LOL yeah yeah yeah yeeeeeeaaaaahhhh!!!!!
Will do. Report back. Give us a couple of days me old dodger. Oh yes,whereabouts on the really tiny tiny tiny weeny island of Oz do you exactly live? (if it's Bribane,you're a dead man)
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haha
errr...What would be so bad about Brisvegas then...(swallows heavily and looks shiftily about)
I'm also going to try to put the melody up as a musical accompaniment.
Will sound like a cat scratching tin I reckon! LOL
cheers
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scratching tin would be OK. I draw the line at those ten a penny "cats scratching their arses" type of melodies, though, so take heed.
RE Bris vegemite - nothing. Nothing at all wrong with it. It's the only city in Oz I've been to - have friends there. Good luck with the cats. It can be a bastard keeping them still in front of the mic
Comment from PoesyPoet
It's not fair. I want to hear the beat. As far as the flow, it was great as I read it, but couldn't get the music as I know you meant it. Anyway, it makes for grand poetry and a great song.
PP
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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It's not fair. I want to hear the beat. As far as the flow, it was great as I read it, but couldn't get the music as I know you meant it. Anyway, it makes for grand poetry and a great song.
PP
Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Hi there PP!
You know, my sister's name is also Celeste! Cool huh?
Thanks for the positive feedback, I do like the positive stuff!! haha
If possible, I'll try and put the lyrical melody as a musical accompaniment.
Cheers
grant
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That is way cewl Grant. I have not met another Celeste yet.
Comment from Swtdreamz
I wrote you a song,
to tell you I care.
for the spark in your tongue, - cute- wish a guy'd write me song- that would be the sweetest thing haha
In whispers and corners,
I gave you my heart. - reminds me of that song "Last x-mas, I gave you my heart, you threw it away the very next day" wait I THINK those are the lyrics-
and if we remember
our history today;
then, we should be dancing... - of course to that age-old song
good job
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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I wrote you a song,
to tell you I care.
for the spark in your tongue, - cute- wish a guy'd write me song- that would be the sweetest thing haha
In whispers and corners,
I gave you my heart. - reminds me of that song "Last x-mas, I gave you my heart, you threw it away the very next day" wait I THINK those are the lyrics-
and if we remember
our history today;
then, we should be dancing... - of course to that age-old song
good job
Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Hehehe you fool! haha LOL!
Thanks for the original and also
head expandingly nice words!!
I appreciate.
cheers
grant
Comment from Ben Johnson Jnr.
It's pretty good but I find it overly wordy in some places for a song like for instance;
Chance upon the mystery,
of dance indulgent history.
The last remaining versions
of your face
far too flowery poetic for a song in opinion so I rated it as a poem. Just an opinion.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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It's pretty good but I find it overly wordy in some places for a song like for instance;
Chance upon the mystery,
of dance indulgent history.
The last remaining versions
of your face
far too flowery poetic for a song in opinion so I rated it as a poem. Just an opinion.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Hi there Ben
Thanks for taking the time to review honestly!!
If it helps explain a bit better (as I see you are a musician)
Those particular words are chosen for their lyrical value but
also for their rhythm as they fit the syncopated accents of the phrasing.
Hope that makes sense! haha But again I applaud your honesty as I really
don't respect so many "grab a buck cut and paste sycophants"
cheers mate
grant
Comment from L K Pinaire
Nice. I'd like to hear this with music. I enjoyed it and thought it was well done. I love music, though I'm a lot closer to old foggy than teenage fanclub. Best of luck to you.
Good writing,
Larry
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Nice. I'd like to hear this with music. I enjoyed it and thought it was well done. I love music, though I'm a lot closer to old foggy than teenage fanclub. Best of luck to you.
Good writing,
Larry
Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Hi Larry you old fart!! hahaha
I'm gonna try and put a croaky melody with this as an accompaniment.
Here's hoping! hehe
cheers fella
grant
Comment from Chgraphicurt
Great format for a song. Can't picture any group I listen to doing it. For some reason Hall and Oates popped into my mind. But a good song regardless of what idiots popped into my mind. lol
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Great format for a song. Can't picture any group I listen to doing it. For some reason Hall and Oates popped into my mind. But a good song regardless of what idiots popped into my mind. lol
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Haaahaha Hall & Oates!! That gave me a chuckle! hehe
Thanks for the cool review and I've gotta respect a fellow Drummer!!
cheers
grant
p-s I have a pretty big portfolio if you ever get bored!! LOL
Comment from shy1250
I wish I could hear this one, instead of merely reading it. It has a magic to it, a flow that is so perfect, words fail me. In the back of Writer's Digest, there are a lot of songwriter sites--maybe you could try one? Could see this being done by anyone from U2 to Enya. Just too good to just let it sit here. No suggestions for improvement--it sounds perfect to me. later, shy
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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I wish I could hear this one, instead of merely reading it. It has a magic to it, a flow that is so perfect, words fail me. In the back of Writer's Digest, there are a lot of songwriter sites--maybe you could try one? Could see this being done by anyone from U2 to Enya. Just too good to just let it sit here. No suggestions for improvement--it sounds perfect to me. later, shy
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2007
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2007
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Coz you're too shy shy, hush hush I do I!!
LOL
Thanks shy for the fantastic review. It was original and you didn't cut and paste my poem and say those were the bits you liked!! LOL hehe
I appreciate the effort and cool thoughts.
cheers
grant
