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Comment from eliz100
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This is another excellent chapter. I think the doctor's appointment was just right. Beka is getting used to Ty touching her. I do not see any need for improvement.Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2025


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2025
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Teri7
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Barbara, This is a great chapter. I really like how Ty and Rebekah are getting along. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. Can't wait for the next chapter! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2025


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Rebecca seems to be easily persuaded by Tyler, but she is still very old-fashioned in her outlook since she wants nothing but dresses. The almost worst thing that could happen to her is a crowd assembling to see the pregnant lady with the Doctor. The totally worst thing would be if they knew she was the famous best-selling author.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
    They do recognize her. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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Barbara,

This is a great continuation of the story. I think Dr. Ty is starting to fall for Beka. Ah, you have to love a good love story. Things are moving right along for them. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Great job

Cecilia

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
    Thank you for the kind review. He doe repeatedly mention she's welcome at his home until the baby's born and she's back on her feet.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Nice chapter, Tyler is playing the role of loving partner in this adventure that will results with the delivery of a healthy baby. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from judiverse
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To me. Tyler is taking things too far. He's determined that she'll stay there during her pregnancy, he's going to be her birthing coach, and he's buying all those clothes for her. She's going to feel like a helpless baby. Good details on possible complications of her pregnancy. I think her mother had miscarriages because she didn't get the proper care, thanks to controlling husband. Oh, dear, the gossip is going to run rampant about the well-known author and the handsome doctor. Rebeka isn't going to like that. No doubt rumors will be flying that he's the father of Rebeka's baby. Great work with this, but I don't like to see Ty completely take over Rebeka's life. judi

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    You're close to right. More information will be coming as to why Tyler's helping. He has some guilt issues. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
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I thought your chapter was very well written considering the length of edits you were mentioning.

Tyler has really taken me an interest in Beka. It seems like she's softening a bit.

I'm curious to find out what's or who's waiting for them outside the maternity store.

I need some conflict about now...

Nicely written and flowing

John

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    There will some conflict and more coming up the following week. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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The funny thing is, I've heard of these difficult pregnancies and births, but not with my girls, and my mother, but Catherine did have gestational diabetes, which vanished after the birth, my elder child's Rebecca, and her younger sister called he Becca, so that's what she is, your story's developing nicely Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    Thank you for the kind review. My gestational diabetes left after birth too, but have been told as I age it'll return, so far nothing.
reply by royowen on 31-Mar-2025
    Don't believe them, remember, the power of words.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Tyler couldn't do more for Rebekah, supporting her through a very thorough medial examination and then being super-generous in purchasing eight maternity dresses for her. Even not minding when his reputation is in danger of being besmirched. It's a lengthy read and I wonder if it might benefit from having some of the extraneous detail removed, such as the assistant putting her hands on the back of the chair or "put his (right) arm around..." It can slow the pace of the read. I enjoyed the humour of Ty setting parameters for his name and the way this, together with the shopping, bring light relief to the more serious tone of the chapter. Well done, Barbara. Debbie

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    I will consider that, but I felt the assistant and the chair showed she was fishing for information. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    I will consider that, but I felt the assistant and the chair showed she was fishing for information. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Nicely done, Barb. The reader has a good idea of where things ae headed. That is a great ending for this post. The reader is anxious to find out who "they" are.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
    Thank you for the kind review.