The Sublime Journey
Life is a journey with an unknown destination.2 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
The road to nowhere
with twists and turns
beckons me and my heart yearns
to travel on with indefinite time
on a journey so sublime
This good, but I count only 33 syllables. I recommend an extra one syllable word to the first line. Perhaps to an adjective to road.
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The road to nowhere
with twists and turns
beckons me and my heart yearns
to travel on with indefinite time
on a journey so sublime
This good, but I count only 33 syllables. I recommend an extra one syllable word to the first line. Perhaps to an adjective to road.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a wonderful 34 syllable poem. The words make the reader think about life and how we always have a path to choose.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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This is a wonderful 34 syllable poem. The words make the reader think about life and how we always have a path to choose.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Mar-2025
