My day in a million...years
My day in a million...years14 total reviews
Comment from Tim Margetts
This was a joy to read, Iza,
Snappy, funny, and full of well-timed sarcasm. The voice is strong right from the first line, and you maintain that tone beautifully all the way through.
I especially liked lines like "coffee that tasted suspiciously like defeat" and "a rejected prince not-so-charming from a tragic romance movie"-they hit just the right balance between humour and exhaustion.
You've nailed the prompt, and the pacing carries the reader smoothly from moment to moment without lag.
There were a couple of minor brain farts I noticed (e.g. "but I as usual I was the star" that might just need a tweak) that would sharpen it even more.
Still, the charm here is in the storytelling-it's not just a bad day, it's your bad day, and you make it feel like a shared laugh between friends.
Witty, warm, and wonderfully human-exactly the kind of voice that keeps readers coming back.
Great prompt response, my friend.
Tim x
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This was a joy to read, Iza,
Snappy, funny, and full of well-timed sarcasm. The voice is strong right from the first line, and you maintain that tone beautifully all the way through.
I especially liked lines like "coffee that tasted suspiciously like defeat" and "a rejected prince not-so-charming from a tragic romance movie"-they hit just the right balance between humour and exhaustion.
You've nailed the prompt, and the pacing carries the reader smoothly from moment to moment without lag.
There were a couple of minor brain farts I noticed (e.g. "but I as usual I was the star" that might just need a tweak) that would sharpen it even more.
Still, the charm here is in the storytelling-it's not just a bad day, it's your bad day, and you make it feel like a shared laugh between friends.
Witty, warm, and wonderfully human-exactly the kind of voice that keeps readers coming back.
Great prompt response, my friend.
Tim x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your day was humorous, but sounded like so many people's day. You start out optimistic with perfect plans for a delightful day. But, it never happens that way. Something, or some things always go wrong. After all the funny things that happened to your protagonist, she had an upbeat ending. She survived. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Your day was humorous, but sounded like so many people's day. You start out optimistic with perfect plans for a delightful day. But, it never happens that way. Something, or some things always go wrong. After all the funny things that happened to your protagonist, she had an upbeat ending. She survived. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from Arabellesmom
Really liked reading your story I enjoyed your writing a lot. The picture you chose goes very well with your writing. Not to mention, you're an amazing writer. Great writing and great work!!!!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Really liked reading your story I enjoyed your writing a lot. The picture you chose goes very well with your writing. Not to mention, you're an amazing writer. Great writing and great work!!!!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for this amazing review and encouragement.
Comment from Harry Craft
With caffeine barely holding my life together, I got dressed in record time-only to realize, halfway out the door, that my shirt was inside out. Lol! This was my favorite line in the whole story. I truly enjoyed reading this because I think this is something we have all experienced at least once in our lives! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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With caffeine barely holding my life together, I got dressed in record time-only to realize, halfway out the door, that my shirt was inside out. Lol! This was my favorite line in the whole story. I truly enjoyed reading this because I think this is something we have all experienced at least once in our lives! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Oh, yeah it happened to me too:)
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Roger that!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
The days of hell.
First, I lay out my clothes the night before. (never inside out) Second, I never use a snooze, but get up early enough for the what ifs. (actually, I always woke before the alarm but set it anyway 'just in case') Third, it's easy enough to avoid mud puddles. Fourth, the kinds of mistakes like mass emails happens - once.
But this was fiction. (Once I got to school and didn't realize I'd forgotten to get dressed (totally nude) untiI I walked into class.) smiley face here
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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The days of hell.
First, I lay out my clothes the night before. (never inside out) Second, I never use a snooze, but get up early enough for the what ifs. (actually, I always woke before the alarm but set it anyway 'just in case') Third, it's easy enough to avoid mud puddles. Fourth, the kinds of mistakes like mass emails happens - once.
But this was fiction. (Once I got to school and didn't realize I'd forgotten to get dressed (totally nude) untiI I walked into class.) smiley face here
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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I do prepare my stuff from the evening, but then I decide to change something because a change in weather:) and then all hell lose:)
Comment from Julie G1
Well written in a lovely and engaging comical style. The reader is sharing that feeling of having a day at work when we should have stayed home in bed. Great tale, delighting the audience, the writer is not alone. The witty turn of phrasing adds to the funny side of the overall effect.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Well written in a lovely and engaging comical style. The reader is sharing that feeling of having a day at work when we should have stayed home in bed. Great tale, delighting the audience, the writer is not alone. The witty turn of phrasing adds to the funny side of the overall effect.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Sometimes you just wanna do that, cover your head and stay in your bubble in the bed
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your journey Iza and when we have days like this we are always thankful they are over and we made it back with very few scratches! Did you apologise to the cat for stepping on it? Ha ha ha, a fun, well written post and it deserves a six, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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I enjoyed your journey Iza and when we have days like this we are always thankful they are over and we made it back with very few scratches! Did you apologise to the cat for stepping on it? Ha ha ha, a fun, well written post and it deserves a six, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 04-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Of course, I did:)his my sweet baby boy Teddy
Comment from Teri7
That was a really wild day to deal with. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. I loved your first few words about your battle with your alarm clock! Very well worded. I love the picture of the cat! Great job! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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That was a really wild day to deal with. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words. I loved your first few words about your battle with your alarm clock! Very well worded. I love the picture of the cat! Great job! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Teri.
Comment from DeboraDyess
I KNOW THIS KIND OF MORNING! LOL
Thoughts:
~ errors, but I as usual I was the star. >> You repeated the 'I' but only one is needed. Just pick. :)
And that's all! Yup, those days really make the others shine. :)
blessings,
Deb
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I KNOW THIS KIND OF MORNING! LOL
Thoughts:
~ errors, but I as usual I was the star. >> You repeated the 'I' but only one is needed. Just pick. :)
And that's all! Yup, those days really make the others shine. :)
blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your story had me laughing out loud! I love how you embrace the chaos of your day with such humor. The way you keep rolling with the punches makes it feel like I'm right there with you. You've got a great storytelling voice that makes even the frustrating moments feel entertaining. Keep sharing these stories - they're terrific!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Your story had me laughing out loud! I love how you embrace the chaos of your day with such humor. The way you keep rolling with the punches makes it feel like I'm right there with you. You've got a great storytelling voice that makes even the frustrating moments feel entertaining. Keep sharing these stories - they're terrific!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
