Pure Pleasure
A night of passion21 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Ahh, the pleasure of dreams. I would have woken him up and said he had unfinished business to deal with!! Lol. This was a great story for the contest, it wasn't pornish, but loving. I thought you did a great job. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Ahh, the pleasure of dreams. I would have woken him up and said he had unfinished business to deal with!! Lol. This was a great story for the contest, it wasn't pornish, but loving. I thought you did a great job. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, Sandra. Yes, I definitely did not want it to be pornish at all!
I love your comment about the need to wake him up to finish some unfinished business lol
Thank you for the review!
Comment from MissMerri
Well written, and well edited too, which shows you to be a skilled and careful writer. This was descriptive and concise, and I found nothing I would wish different. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Well written, and well edited too, which shows you to be a skilled and careful writer. This was descriptive and concise, and I found nothing I would wish different. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thank you I appreciate it. I wanted it to flow smoothly and tastefully.
Comment from Tim Margetts
Wow, Lana. This is certainly intense.
I hope you were able to make your dream reality later on, what is the point of such a dream if you can't then bring it to life.
This writing flowed smoothly, it was erotic without being pornographic, It demonstrated heat, passion and most of all, love.
Well done
Tim x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Wow, Lana. This is certainly intense.
I hope you were able to make your dream reality later on, what is the point of such a dream if you can't then bring it to life.
This writing flowed smoothly, it was erotic without being pornographic, It demonstrated heat, passion and most of all, love.
Well done
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Lol, thank you. It was fun writing it! not gonna lie, I felt a little hot under the collar, writing it.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This is eroticism at its finest. No crude words, though there may have been an illicit thought escaped, and I wish I had a bonus star left to submit, but alas I do not. If I could vote now you'd win mine.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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This is eroticism at its finest. No crude words, though there may have been an illicit thought escaped, and I wish I had a bonus star left to submit, but alas I do not. If I could vote now you'd win mine.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much, it would've been nice if this was in a voting contest to earn some good member dollars but we'll see since this is an entry to a cash prize and possible member dollars. I don't know who votes for all of these entries that go into the abyss. But I appreciate your voting sentiments.
Comment from Brad Bennett
Hi Lana, I'm sure there were a lot of hot, fired up single males out here, in Fanstory land, until they found out you were married. :>)
Well done, Brad
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Hi Lana, I'm sure there were a lot of hot, fired up single males out here, in Fanstory land, until they found out you were married. :>)
Well done, Brad
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Lol Brad, thank you, your review made me chuckle.
Thank you for putting a smile on my face. Enjoy your day.
Comment from Bill Schott
This seems to me to be an excellent example of the form, which brings all the sensual activity into play without a lot of nomenclature labeled. I would bet the husband would be happy his abilities are so vast he can perform in his sleep.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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This seems to me to be an excellent example of the form, which brings all the sensual activity into play without a lot of nomenclature labeled. I would bet the husband would be happy his abilities are so vast he can perform in his sleep.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thank you for your review! I had to look up nomenclature, because I don't think I've ever heard that word in my life. Thank you for the review, the comments and the education. And you made me chuckle at the husband performing his abilities in his sleep lol.
Enjoy your day
Lana
Comment from Stacy M.S.
Wow...this is one smoking, hot, sultry story!
I am thinking you could write some very steamy erotic romance.
Great descriptions.
I look forward to reading more of your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Wow...this is one smoking, hot, sultry story!
I am thinking you could write some very steamy erotic romance.
Great descriptions.
I look forward to reading more of your writings.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Thank you, Stacey, it was my first try at something like this other than a really short poem ones of three lines lol I appreciate the review and the feedback.
Hope you're enjoying your day!
Lana
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow, I had to run my gold glass of iced tea across my forehead after reading this. I'll have to let my wife read it just before her next shower.
All kidding aside, this was extremely erotic in the most tasteful way (pun intended).
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Wow, I had to run my gold glass of iced tea across my forehead after reading this. I'll have to let my wife read it just before her next shower.
All kidding aside, this was extremely erotic in the most tasteful way (pun intended).
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Thank you John, it was fun writing it and my goal was to be tasteful so I'm glad it was tastefully erotic. I did read it to my husband and he now makes comments everyday. Thank you for the six stars!!!!!!
Comment from lancellot
Very nice, and sensual. Even if only a dream, you did a wonderful job showcasing the eroticism of a loving couple, even after many decades of marriage. I think the FanStory members will really appreciate that aspect of the story. They don't normal like adult themes but if it is between an older married couple in love, they will accept it.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Very nice, and sensual. Even if only a dream, you did a wonderful job showcasing the eroticism of a loving couple, even after many decades of marriage. I think the FanStory members will really appreciate that aspect of the story. They don't normal like adult themes but if it is between an older married couple in love, they will accept it.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Thank you, I was surprised that it was one of the prompts that doesn't go to the general voting booths. I didn't want it to be raunchy and that's why I wanted it to be a scene about a married couple. Thank you for the six stars and your comments.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really love the way you capture the anticipation in your writing. The description of "putting puzzle pieces together" is so beautiful. I also enjoyed how you used the water and the sensation of touch to bring a sense of closeness. Your descriptions were wonderful. I think this is one of the most difficult forms of writing - and you seemed to write it natural. You woke up. Haha. Great ending. Keep writing - this is fantastic!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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I really love the way you capture the anticipation in your writing. The description of "putting puzzle pieces together" is so beautiful. I also enjoyed how you used the water and the sensation of touch to bring a sense of closeness. Your descriptions were wonderful. I think this is one of the most difficult forms of writing - and you seemed to write it natural. You woke up. Haha. Great ending. Keep writing - this is fantastic!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much! At first I did not write it as a dream, but then I changed the ending to it because a couple people wished me a happy anniversary when it wasn't our anniversary. My husband and I often refer to this activity as putting a puzzle together lol-that's our secret code.
