Whisper on the Wind
Love can last a lifetime.5 total reviews
Comment from Thesis
Very creative. This was a great entry to the contest. You created a wonderful story that I could not stop reading. Your characters were well-developed and the storyline was interesting. Using ancestors and providing vague history of associations with Lyrial was mysterious. As far as the eroticism was concerned, it was well done, not graphic, which will earn you some cudos on this site that shy's away from graphic eroticism.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Very creative. This was a great entry to the contest. You created a wonderful story that I could not stop reading. Your characters were well-developed and the storyline was interesting. Using ancestors and providing vague history of associations with Lyrial was mysterious. As far as the eroticism was concerned, it was well done, not graphic, which will earn you some cudos on this site that shy's away from graphic eroticism.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2025
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Thank you for your comments, Thesis.
I am pleased you enjoyed the mystery I weaved through this tale. The history was made vague enough to allow for creative reader imagination but with enough clues to give purpose. As for the eroticism. This was my first ever attempt at writing something in this category and I decided to go for sensual rather than graphic. I didn't want to write porno..
Tim
Comment from Karen Cherry
Amazing. I was going to write one, I am not now. I can't do better than that. YET! This is a bit long, but I kept reading. This should win. It is still raining here. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Amazing. I was going to write one, I am not now. I can't do better than that. YET! This is a bit long, but I kept reading. This should win. It is still raining here. Karen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Do please still write one, Karen.
It's judged by the committee so who knows what they will be looking for.
I hope mine does OK but you can never know what they want.
Tim x
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Nope, yours is very good. I do not want to beat you out of a win. Tough turnips. Karen
Comment from Iza Deleanu
A whisper in the wind and the lady of the house comes to life from the ashes of being forgotten. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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A whisper in the wind and the lady of the house comes to life from the ashes of being forgotten. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2025
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Thank you for this review, Iza
I am glad you enjoyed my little story. I think of it as a sensual romantic tragedy.
Tim
Comment from Begin Again
This, my friend, is your best writing ever! Each word, emotion, and sense pulled the reader deeper and deeper into the story. I did not even notice the length because the story was too compelling. I so wish I had a six, seven, or ten to give you. This is definitely your spot. I don't have the words to tell you how terrific this was. You've got to be the winner!
Smiles and more smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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This, my friend, is your best writing ever! Each word, emotion, and sense pulled the reader deeper and deeper into the story. I did not even notice the length because the story was too compelling. I so wish I had a six, seven, or ten to give you. This is definitely your spot. I don't have the words to tell you how terrific this was. You've got to be the winner!
Smiles and more smiles, Carol
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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I wish you were on the judging panel, Carol.
I really appreciate your virtual stars. I was concerned writing an erotic piece, my first ever, as I was concerned about putting off some of my regular readers with that tag.
I am glad I did not.
Thank you again for reading and enjoying my little tale.
Tim x
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The price was very high. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. In my humble opinion you nailed this contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
He did not know if he was chasing her, or if she had already caught him. (Great line.)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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The price was very high. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. In my humble opinion you nailed this contest entry. Good luck with the contest.
He did not know if he was chasing her, or if she had already caught him. (Great line.)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2025
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Thank you for reading an reviewing it for me, barara.
I didn't know (never before having written in this catagory) if the tag would scare of my usual readers.
I tried to create something sensual and mysterious rather than a porn show, and leaned into my love of mystery and fantasy.
Tim x
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It may scare off some reader. I refuse to write porn, but will read it only to a limit. Yours didn't cross the line.
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I think there is a distinct difference between sensual eroticism and porn.
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I think you're correct.
