Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "Vermin"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
3 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow As always Powerful writing melon form where I'll fall out awesome. How this is coming to a conclusion? I don't know where you piece.It all together amazing work right job, keep them coming!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Wow As always Powerful writing melon form where I'll fall out awesome. How this is coming to a conclusion? I don't know where you piece.It all together amazing work right job, keep them coming!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Melon form? Thank you for your review and comments
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really loved how your chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! The way you showed the cop's anger and Aliss's calm under pressure was amazing. Your ability to create tension in every moment really made it feel real. I was hooked by the urgency. I felt every bit of Aliss's fear and determination. The phone call with Mark added to the suspense. Keep up the great work - I'm excited to see where you take it next!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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I really loved how your chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! The way you showed the cop's anger and Aliss's calm under pressure was amazing. Your ability to create tension in every moment really made it feel real. I was hooked by the urgency. I felt every bit of Aliss's fear and determination. The phone call with Mark added to the suspense. Keep up the great work - I'm excited to see where you take it next!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thank you Michael!
Comment from foxtale
Excellent, you've kept the suspense building.
A few mechanical clean-ups needed.
Such as : She knew she had stay here, to bide her time. (had to stay)
Soon enough he was outside trite phrasing, instead = (Then, he was outside) this adds tension
had on * blue polyester (make us see the blue of a cop uniform * - dark blue -)
The cell!
(At first, following her thoughts that he was a cop, I thought 'jail cell' instead of cell phone!)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Excellent, you've kept the suspense building.
A few mechanical clean-ups needed.
Such as : She knew she had stay here, to bide her time. (had to stay)
Soon enough he was outside trite phrasing, instead = (Then, he was outside) this adds tension
had on * blue polyester (make us see the blue of a cop uniform * - dark blue -)
The cell!
(At first, following her thoughts that he was a cop, I thought 'jail cell' instead of cell phone!)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thank you for your suggestions - changes made!
i appreciate any and all comments and stars. they make me work harder!
