BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 86 "A Mouse on the Ski Trail"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun presentation as this little mouse is enjoying some winter adventures in the snow, you made me smile with this one Lisa, love Dolly x x x x x x
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This is a fun presentation as this little mouse is enjoying some winter adventures in the snow, you made me smile with this one Lisa, love Dolly x x x x x x
Comment Written 13-Jan-2025
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Jasmine,
omg... your picture is adorable :)
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PREVIOUS CHAPTER 85
what secrets beneath the ice
in millennia shall rise
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I am happy you contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. The poem has the right composition but you should have a 5/7/5. But don't worry about it, just try to check the renga book next time. I will go ahead and write a 5/7/5 following yours. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add Renga Rules to your author notes.
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Hello, Jasmine,
omg... your picture is adorable :)
..........................................
PREVIOUS CHAPTER 85
what secrets beneath the ice
in millennia shall rise
...........................................
I am happy you contributed to the Renga Book. It's an excellent chapter. The poem has the right composition but you should have a 5/7/5. But don't worry about it, just try to check the renga book next time. I will go ahead and write a 5/7/5 following yours. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Good syllables and connection between lines. Please add Renga Rules to your author notes.
***** PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THE RULES TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES *****
HOW TO WRITE A RENGA POEM:
It's very important to LINK your Renga stanza to the previous stanza keeping the same theme and season of the year.
First copy and paste this link to your browser to check the Renga Book. Your chapter will follow the last chapter: fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=42337
FIRST POET - starts with a three-line haiku 5/7/5 that sets the theme and season of the year.
THE SECOND POET writes a 7/7 stanza that links to the previous 5/7/5 chapter with the same theme and season of the year.
This pattern (5/7/5 stanza followed by a 7/7 stanza) continues on and on. Some renga books can be 100 stanzas or more.
To post your chapter, scroll down the renga poem page you are reading. Above the review box click on ADD CHAPTER.
Gypsy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I'm sorry that it was confusing because both Chapter 84 and 85 are 7/7. The title of Chapter 85 is: Renga Chapter 85 - 5/7/5.
I can change my poem if you want me to. I can do it now or let it be because you must be writing your 5/7/5.
Thanks.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You might not have taken a picture but you, certainly, achieved the right impact with your chosen visual.The little black mouse is in a hurry to get away to his retreat, obviously reflecting the fun you enjoyed on your own skiing adventure. An excellent contribution to the book of Renga poems. Well done, Lisa. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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You might not have taken a picture but you, certainly, achieved the right impact with your chosen visual.The little black mouse is in a hurry to get away to his retreat, obviously reflecting the fun you enjoyed on your own skiing adventure. An excellent contribution to the book of Renga poems. Well done, Lisa. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks a lot for this wonderful review and the full understanding of my happiness reflected on the little creature's face.
You should write about Southern France.
Comment from lancellot
Ha, very cute, I can imagine what the poem or story would be if you and your husband actually saw that mouse doing what this is doing in the picture. Maybe, that could be a good fictional story.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Ha, very cute, I can imagine what the poem or story would be if you and your husband actually saw that mouse doing what this is doing in the picture. Maybe, that could be a good fictional story.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks a lot for this wonderful review and a fiction idea.
Comment from Begin Again
This little guy is adorable and he definitely appears to be enjoying his ride.... I bet the one you saw was thinking more about the cold. Hope you had lots of fun.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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This little guy is adorable and he definitely appears to be enjoying his ride.... I bet the one you saw was thinking more about the cold. Hope you had lots of fun.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks a lot for this wonderful review. Haha. It was running for something.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written chapter for the book and I enjoyed very much reading. I love the image that you used with this. I rather guess it must be an image created with AI. Am I correct about that. Patricia.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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This is a well written chapter for the book and I enjoyed very much reading. I love the image that you used with this. I rather guess it must be an image created with AI. Am I correct about that. Patricia.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Yes. It was. Thanks a lot for the review.
Comment from royowen
I love this Lisa, it reminds me of the poetry written for the benefit of children, and her focus is on small creatures like mice that have wonderful adventures as well as being teaching device, beautifully written My friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I love this Lisa, it reminds me of the poetry written for the benefit of children, and her focus is on small creatures like mice that have wonderful adventures as well as being teaching device, beautifully written My friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks a lot for this great review.
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