BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 81 "Bunny Artwork"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
13 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I like the concept that they're "painting" the snow, and I have a feeling that, from now on, when I see these footprints as I take Li'l Swish for her daily walks, I am going to remember that perfect description. Cool photo you found to go with this enjoyable read! xoxox
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I like the concept that they're "painting" the snow, and I have a feeling that, from now on, when I see these footprints as I take Li'l Swish for her daily walks, I am going to remember that perfect description. Cool photo you found to go with this enjoyable read! xoxox
Comment Written 12-Jan-2025
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette.
It appears I'm not with the mainstream on FS. I've seen a lot of entries for renga and Japanese style poetry. My formalistic, traditional style of writing poetry precludes me from writing in that fashion. I believe
I will post an epigram. They are short, to the point, and sometimes rhyme, but embrace the virtues of sarcasm, humor, and criticism. The photo you included summarizes the meaning of your poem. Since I started generating all of my own artwork using AI, the graphic I used on this weeks post about "Memories" took a long time to generate.
I may become an artist and quit writing. HAHAHAHAHAHA. In free hand, I can't draw a stick man with no arms or legs.
Z
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Hello Yvette.
It appears I'm not with the mainstream on FS. I've seen a lot of entries for renga and Japanese style poetry. My formalistic, traditional style of writing poetry precludes me from writing in that fashion. I believe
I will post an epigram. They are short, to the point, and sometimes rhyme, but embrace the virtues of sarcasm, humor, and criticism. The photo you included summarizes the meaning of your poem. Since I started generating all of my own artwork using AI, the graphic I used on this weeks post about "Memories" took a long time to generate.
I may become an artist and quit writing. HAHAHAHAHAHA. In free hand, I can't draw a stick man with no arms or legs.
Z
Comment Written 11-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2025
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Oooooo.... I like it!! Would love to participate in your Epigram book (if you make it that... Be sure to make the first 'chapter' a quick explanation with simple example like from Emily Dickenson or other... would love to have them not so political, but I know some will definitely go there (sigh)... I will look forward to "Zepigrams"! ;) Yvette
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I recently read a lot of epigrams by Oscar Wilde. I have many pages of them that I have written in the past but I've only published 2 of them. I'm not the right guy to start a book. I lose interest if my poem is over six stanzas. HAHAHA. I'm not publishing very much here. I have posted one poem in the last three weeks.
Z
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Yvette. I enjoyed reading your Renga poem that you infused with your lovely style of writing. Well done on the form and presentation. A lovely read!
Melissa
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Hello Yvette. I enjoyed reading your Renga poem that you infused with your lovely style of writing. Well done on the form and presentation. A lovely read!
Melissa
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this shorty.... I like the RENGAs to help me refocus on writing!! Y'all get some snow there? :) Yvette
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Hello Yvette... we are anticipating snow to start any minute. The forecast is calling for 6 inches... I hope it's a a pretty snow :). I'm going to stay up and watch it as while.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Pretty renga sectional poem. The photo of the bunny rabbit tracks sure does compliment the poem text. Thank you for the author notes. I am heading over to work on Utah's annual poetry contest now.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Pretty renga sectional poem. The photo of the bunny rabbit tracks sure does compliment the poem text. Thank you for the author notes. I am heading over to work on Utah's annual poetry contest now.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much, Crystie -- really enjoy the RENGA when things are busy: helps re-focus into the writer's realm! :) Yvette
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Sure thing. I just noticed I put 'compliment' when I meant 'complement.' Must have been tired. But I always mean to compliment you!
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Thank you so much!! ;) ;) Take care! ;)
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem catches a lively moment in nature. The opening word, 'into,' sets a sense of startled urgency, as if the bunnies are jumping at some disturbance.
Bunnies scatter to and fro, showing playful movement. It's a lovely picture. The fact that 'paw prints, part to paint, fresh snow' points to the delicate traces they leave behind, almost decorating the snowy landscape.
It beautifully balances movement and nature inviting the reader to appreciate the fleeting beauty of wildlife in its purest form.
It is a delight to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Take care
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Your poem catches a lively moment in nature. The opening word, 'into,' sets a sense of startled urgency, as if the bunnies are jumping at some disturbance.
Bunnies scatter to and fro, showing playful movement. It's a lovely picture. The fact that 'paw prints, part to paint, fresh snow' points to the delicate traces they leave behind, almost decorating the snowy landscape.
It beautifully balances movement and nature inviting the reader to appreciate the fleeting beauty of wildlife in its purest form.
It is a delight to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Take care
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much for your detailed review on this shortie, Peter -- really enjoy the RENGA when things are busy: helps re-focus into the writer's realm! Take care out there and Happy New Year, sir! :)
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You are most welcome.
Take care and stay safe
Comment from Elias Noor
This haiku is vivid and evocative. The image of bunnies scattering and leaving paw prints in fresh snow is both delicate and dynamic.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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This haiku is vivid and evocative. The image of bunnies scattering and leaving paw prints in fresh snow is both delicate and dynamic.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much for your review on this shorty, Elias! :)
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Yvette,
This is a beautiful poem. It does look like the bunny went running for his life. The picture you chose compliments the poem nicely.
Great job my friend
Cecilia
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Yvette,
This is a beautiful poem. It does look like the bunny went running for his life. The picture you chose compliments the poem nicely.
Great job my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much, Cecilia -- really enjoy the RENGA when things are busy: helps re-focus into the writer's realm! :) Yvette
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You're welcome. Glad you enjoyed the Renga.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The rabbits leave behind a trail for their predators and I hope they stay safe during the winter which is a trying time for all wildlife. I love the sentiment here Yvette, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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The rabbits leave behind a trail for their predators and I hope they stay safe during the winter which is a trying time for all wildlife. I love the sentiment here Yvette, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much, Dolly -- really enjoy the RENGA when things are busy: helps re-focus into the writer's realm! :) Yvette
Comment from June Sargent
A great addition to the book of Renga. I love bunnies and they are artists at heart. Picasso would be jealous of their paws. lol Your posts are on point
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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A great addition to the book of Renga. I love bunnies and they are artists at heart. Picasso would be jealous of their paws. lol Your posts are on point
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Picasso indeed!! He'd love the disaster the back yard looks like after they and the squirrels get busy!! ;) Thanx for the review, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment from kahpot
Their movements are quite rapid and enduring, (no wonder they are the world's best breeders) and as your work displays they leave their print everywhere, ****kahpot
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Their movements are quite rapid and enduring, (no wonder they are the world's best breeders) and as your work displays they leave their print everywhere, ****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2025
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Thanx so much for the review on this shorty, sir -- am so glad to see you active again! Take care over there! ;) Yvette
